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Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "St. Louis Chapter 21 part 2"Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?
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Comment from Sankey
Glad you finally turned up. I said to Ulla earlier when I first got up this morning and looked I could not see either of you in here then she turned up later and now yours. Good read and no spags.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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Glad you finally turned up. I said to Ulla earlier when I first got up this morning and looked I could not see either of you in here then she turned up later and now yours. Good read and no spags.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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I usually post after church. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Lots of discussion about the surveillance. All the concern for Mac's safety seems to require a lot of manpower. I agree that surveillance should be done as discreetly as possible, so the subjects won't be aware of it. I'm wondering if concern for Mac's safety might not be the foremost thought on Mitch's part. There seems to be so much missing from the police investigation, and Mac's efforts are being hindered because of concerns for her safety. At least a plan is worked out, but whoever is responsible seems to be always a step ahead of Mac. Funny that Mac thinks of snacks for their surveillance. Great characterization, and lots of tension before the surveillance. judi
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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Lots of discussion about the surveillance. All the concern for Mac's safety seems to require a lot of manpower. I agree that surveillance should be done as discreetly as possible, so the subjects won't be aware of it. I'm wondering if concern for Mac's safety might not be the foremost thought on Mitch's part. There seems to be so much missing from the police investigation, and Mac's efforts are being hindered because of concerns for her safety. At least a plan is worked out, but whoever is responsible seems to be always a step ahead of Mac. Funny that Mac thinks of snacks for their surveillance. Great characterization, and lots of tension before the surveillance. judi
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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Thank you for the kind review. Mac does like her junk food. LOL
Comment from royowen
So they've laid out a plan, reasonably safe, that suits those involved in Mackenzie's life, so that they can find someone out, the trouble is, of course, they can't guarantee complete safety. But hopefully they can catch a rat, which seems to me, to be possible. You've hatched a really good plot hear Barbara, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : There's a couple more (issued) issues?
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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So they've laid out a plan, reasonably safe, that suits those involved in Mackenzie's life, so that they can find someone out, the trouble is, of course, they can't guarantee complete safety. But hopefully they can catch a rat, which seems to me, to be possible. You've hatched a really good plot hear Barbara, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : There's a couple more (issued) issues?
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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I will make that correction. Thank you for the catch.
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Most welcome Barbara
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, I love this story and the continuation is just great. Logan does care more and more doesn't he? I found a couple of things:
Mitch will be here in (a) few minutes.
"There's a couple (of) more (issues) that need to be looked into.
Now, what's next? All best. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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Hi Barbara, I love this story and the continuation is just great. Logan does care more and more doesn't he? I found a couple of things:
Mitch will be here in (a) few minutes.
"There's a couple (of) more (issues) that need to be looked into.
Now, what's next? All best. Ulla xx
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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I have made the corrections. The first one was in last weeks post. I'm shocked nobody caught it. Thank you.
Comment from Ricky1024
This chapter...
"Saint Louis Chapter 21 part 2"
Was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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While, Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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This chapter...
"Saint Louis Chapter 21 part 2"
Was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
...
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
While, Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
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Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
The story is progressing nicely and it is nice to read your story again. I've been away for a while due to life circumstances. Your story continues to be well-written, and full of action. I could feel the tension in their planning session. Great job. Shirley
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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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The story is progressing nicely and it is nice to read your story again. I've been away for a while due to life circumstances. Your story continues to be well-written, and full of action. I could feel the tension in their planning session. Great job. Shirley
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Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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I welcome you back. Thank you for stopping by and reading. I can't wait to read some of your posts.
