Creatures Great and Small
5-7-5 poem on carbon footprint4 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a very strong cautionary tale. I hope the reader is drawn in to reflect and be brutally honest about their attitude toward this issue. This is a tribute to all who have gone before us and continue to fight against extinction. They are doing their part, it is time for us to itch in by pitching out all the fossil fuel projects. Well thought out.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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This is a very strong cautionary tale. I hope the reader is drawn in to reflect and be brutally honest about their attitude toward this issue. This is a tribute to all who have gone before us and continue to fight against extinction. They are doing their part, it is time for us to itch in by pitching out all the fossil fuel projects. Well thought out.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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So glad this place resonated with you!
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your message about climate change in this 5-7-5. (I think it would be better to stay with the three-line format, and I believe you need another syllable in the second line--perhaps, the addition of "fast".) Good luck in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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I admired your message about climate change in this 5-7-5. (I think it would be better to stay with the three-line format, and I believe you need another syllable in the second line--perhaps, the addition of "fast".) Good luck in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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They formatted this for the contest. For some reason it?s categorized as fiction. I will try to fix it once again. Thanks for reading..
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I am glad my input was useful and you were able to reformat the 5-7-5. Best wishes- Joan
Comment from Mark D. R.
Your writing prompt accurately describes the environmental crisis the world now faces, regardless of Trump's actions and his total disregard for the facts of climate control. You definitely informed us with your entry.
IMHO, since you used caps in your first and last lines, consider a period after your second line or add a squiggle and uncap 'choose.' Sure I read CO as two letters, but if it was C-O, other readers might more quickly 'read' it as two letters. Maybe an alternative is CO-2, or CO2?
... different pathS?
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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Your writing prompt accurately describes the environmental crisis the world now faces, regardless of Trump's actions and his total disregard for the facts of climate control. You definitely informed us with your entry.
IMHO, since you used caps in your first and last lines, consider a period after your second line or add a squiggle and uncap 'choose.' Sure I read CO as two letters, but if it was C-O, other readers might more quickly 'read' it as two letters. Maybe an alternative is CO-2, or CO2?
... different pathS?
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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Thank you for your suggestions.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Change in Direction"
Was well-written and Rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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"Change in Direction"
Was well-written and Rich in Theme and Imagery.
...
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much!
