Doctor's Final Exam (fantasy)
The Dentist went to the wrong lab for finals26 total reviews
Comment from susand3022
Hi JLR, A fun fantasy poem for sure... I hated my last dentist and had to find a new one. He wanted to do the one thing you got wrong... 5 syllables... 'Never palaver'... I looked it up to be sure. (I had to look up what palaver meant first! I'd never heard the word but it described my old dentist to a T) It is, however, 3 syllables, and never is 2. Change 'never' to 'don't' and you've got a winner! :)
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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Hi JLR, A fun fantasy poem for sure... I hated my last dentist and had to find a new one. He wanted to do the one thing you got wrong... 5 syllables... 'Never palaver'... I looked it up to be sure. (I had to look up what palaver meant first! I'd never heard the word but it described my old dentist to a T) It is, however, 3 syllables, and never is 2. Change 'never' to 'don't' and you've got a winner! :)
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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Susan thanks got it and fixed them.
Comment from RShipp
I don't like doctors and I abhor dentists... so this poem was right up my alley for a few chuckles.
When I was in college, my roomy was a med-student. I took the cadaver-studies class with him. I loved it!
Best of luck in your "Fantasy challenge--Week of 1-24-2020".
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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I don't like doctors and I abhor dentists... so this poem was right up my alley for a few chuckles.
When I was in college, my roomy was a med-student. I took the cadaver-studies class with him. I loved it!
Best of luck in your "Fantasy challenge--Week of 1-24-2020".
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I don't think I'd appreciate him looking in my mouth! If he can get his exams so wrong, he might pull out a good tooth! LOL, that was a fun poem, and very well written. Well done. Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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I don't think I'd appreciate him looking in my mouth! If he can get his exams so wrong, he might pull out a good tooth! LOL, that was a fun poem, and very well written. Well done. Sandra xxx
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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Smiling back!
Comment from Minglement
Nice entry for this humor poetry contest. I enjoyed this little foray into a fantasy world, but I have to say - I hate the dentist ;) It reads well and kept my interest. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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Nice entry for this humor poetry contest. I enjoyed this little foray into a fantasy world, but I have to say - I hate the dentist ;) It reads well and kept my interest. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from amada
I am glad to read something light and airy like this work here. For sure this had to be a labor of love, counting the syllables in different lines. i followed the fun story and i chuckled as well. All i have to say is poor cadaver!
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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I am glad to read something light and airy like this work here. For sure this had to be a labor of love, counting the syllables in different lines. i followed the fun story and i chuckled as well. All i have to say is poor cadaver!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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Smiling back.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I had to chuckle as I read this piece and realized the mistake he made. A different form and I had to look up the club to understand but it looks perfect to me
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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I had to chuckle as I read this piece and realized the mistake he made. A different form and I had to look up the club to understand but it looks perfect to me
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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Barb, thanks, smiling back.
Comment from lyenochka
You're always so brave to try out the new forms right away! After reading your poem, I'm afraid to go see a doctor or dentist. We can only hope that all of them had the right training!
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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You're always so brave to try out the new forms right away! After reading your poem, I'm afraid to go see a doctor or dentist. We can only hope that all of them had the right training!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2020
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Smiling back!
Comment from Therese Caron
Very interesting and very different poem. I had to read it several times to really grasp it, and then finally did. And I learned a new word-palaver. I don't like not knowing words, I always look them up immediately. This is a great poem - I wish you good luck in the fantasy challenge of your writing club.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Very interesting and very different poem. I had to read it several times to really grasp it, and then finally did. And I learned a new word-palaver. I don't like not knowing words, I always look them up immediately. This is a great poem - I wish you good luck in the fantasy challenge of your writing club.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Thanks a bit difficult I find the restrictive stanza too tight fro a good poem to flow.
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I have not even been brave enough yet to try any of those different types of poems.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written fantasy poem. The biggest part of the poem is in good format as described in the rules there is however one faulty Syllable count.
Never palaver!(5 syllables)
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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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A very well-written fantasy poem. The biggest part of the poem is in good format as described in the rules there is however one faulty Syllable count.
Never palaver!(5 syllables)
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Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Sandra, OOps fixed. thanks
Comment from Susan X Smith
Well this poem is interesting and unique. An odd way of viewing the medical profession of which I know very little. I think you might have meant palaver rather than plaver in the last line of the second stanza.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Well this poem is interesting and unique. An odd way of viewing the medical profession of which I know very little. I think you might have meant palaver rather than plaver in the last line of the second stanza.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Yes, I dropped that pesky a nice catch thank you!
