What a wonderful time to be
the joy of spring13 total reviews
Comment from Alchera
Beautifully penned throughout its perfectly rhymed stanzaic structural format and its loving narrative fancying storyline life's natural integration content.Great work. A suggestion: add "ing" to "fancy". Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Beautifully penned throughout its perfectly rhymed stanzaic structural format and its loving narrative fancying storyline life's natural integration content.Great work. A suggestion: add "ing" to "fancy". Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for your suggestions
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You are Always welcome!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written rhyming poem about the joy of Spring when we feel to go outside and enjoy the heat of the sun and find the first flowers blooming and everything seems to start new.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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A very well-written rhyming poem about the joy of Spring when we feel to go outside and enjoy the heat of the sun and find the first flowers blooming and everything seems to start new.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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I am missing the Spring, thank you
Comment from susand3022
Hi Iza, I like that the flowers are springing... as the old adage says: 'Spring has sprung, the grass is riz... I wonder where 'da flowers is?' I always loved that one, and I can't wait for the Spring to spring out either! Just a few more months to go... yeah, I keep telling myself that. LOL
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Hi Iza, I like that the flowers are springing... as the old adage says: 'Spring has sprung, the grass is riz... I wonder where 'da flowers is?' I always loved that one, and I can't wait for the Spring to spring out either! Just a few more months to go... yeah, I keep telling myself that. LOL
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Me too, and I know Spring lately is so short - one day and boom is wanna be me sumerleeeeeeee:)
Comment from Joan E.
Your poem is certainly bursting with joy! I admired your rhymes and your positivity. The artwork you selected is so parallel as well. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Your poem is certainly bursting with joy! I admired your rhymes and your positivity. The artwork you selected is so parallel as well. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much, Joan
Comment from Diana L Crawford
It is a wonderful time to be! We are a lucky generation for sure! And when we have love by our side, it is even more wonderful! Thanks for sharing this lovely one!
xoxo
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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It is a wonderful time to be! We are a lucky generation for sure! And when we have love by our side, it is even more wonderful! Thanks for sharing this lovely one!
xoxo
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much, my friend and missing the warm weather and the ocean
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so very welcome! xoxo
Comment from Brett Matthew West
This upbeat poem, with its cheerful overtones, does remind of "springing" and illustrates that it is indeed a "wonderful time to be". Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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This upbeat poem, with its cheerful overtones, does remind of "springing" and illustrates that it is indeed a "wonderful time to be". Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much Brett:) Have a wonderful day
Comment from Maria Millsaps
The title of the poem draws the reader.
1st stanza does not rhyme.
1st stanza, line 4 - You get down ( the underlaying of your poem is about a wonderful time- these choices of words create a negative connotation.
In the 1st stanza, line3 - I would drop the when.
A successful poem does not have to rhyme or scan or have certain patterns of line. It does need to paint a picture with carefully chosen words.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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The title of the poem draws the reader.
1st stanza does not rhyme.
1st stanza, line 4 - You get down ( the underlaying of your poem is about a wonderful time- these choices of words create a negative connotation.
In the 1st stanza, line3 - I would drop the when.
A successful poem does not have to rhyme or scan or have certain patterns of line. It does need to paint a picture with carefully chosen words.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much Maria for your suggestions
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a beautiful, well-written, delightful poem that is making me smile.
Gratefulness to be alive shines through every word. Inclusion of nature and romance--very effective
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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This is a beautiful, well-written, delightful poem that is making me smile.
Gratefulness to be alive shines through every word. Inclusion of nature and romance--very effective
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Carl DeVere
I loved the rhyme and the rhythm of this poem. I especially liked the suggestion to go dancing and the suggestion of the title. You have a great name and you've chosen an interesting pen name.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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I loved the rhyme and the rhythm of this poem. I especially liked the suggestion to go dancing and the suggestion of the title. You have a great name and you've chosen an interesting pen name.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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That is actually my name:) Iza is from Isabela:)
Comment from lyenochka
I think "flowers springing" works beautifully for the bouncing into life in spring. I find your poem interesting because it doesn't follow any particular rules but it does rhyme and it has a joyful refrain of "What a wonderful time to be."
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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I think "flowers springing" works beautifully for the bouncing into life in spring. I find your poem interesting because it doesn't follow any particular rules but it does rhyme and it has a joyful refrain of "What a wonderful time to be."
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Thank you Helen, when I wrote I was singing that is why looks different:)
