Where Are You?
A Devotional27 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice and very well written poem you have penned for the Poem of the Month contest. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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This is a very nice and very well written poem you have penned for the Poem of the Month contest. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 28-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my little story, taken partly from a life experience. I mostly write from life, mine or others. Have many stories in progress, hope ou will have a chance to read.
irish
Comment from humpwhistle
I found this in your portfolio, irish, needing one more review to reach All-Time Best status. I think we all have old friends and heroes who remain close even they're lost from our world, drifting amid the wake we leave behind. These memories, though fragile in one sense, have the tensile strength of braided steel.
Come on, brother, write some more.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2020
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I found this in your portfolio, irish, needing one more review to reach All-Time Best status. I think we all have old friends and heroes who remain close even they're lost from our world, drifting amid the wake we leave behind. These memories, though fragile in one sense, have the tensile strength of braided steel.
Come on, brother, write some more.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 16-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2020
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Thank You for the extra effort you made in this search, and the review, raising the devotional up a notch to All Time Best. I am inspired to post one of the stories I have been working on and tweaking.
Memories make this time of year tough.
irish
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Your friend is looking down upon you smiling. He's proud of you. This is a well crafted, very raw emotion, piece. Great job and I wouldn't change a thing.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
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Your friend is looking down upon you smiling. He's proud of you. This is a well crafted, very raw emotion, piece. Great job and I wouldn't change a thing.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
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Thank you for reading in-depth, and all the stars! Was always annoyed at the way we celebrate and commemorate our sports hero's but forget about those who made the ultimate sacrifice for our country.
irish
Comment from AUDREYANN
Your poetic skills are on full display in this poem Cal, I was so caught up in the story, I couldn't stop reading until I reached the end, Each verse told another part of the story and a little bit more was revealed about the main character, your soul brother. I really enjoyed reading this! I don't get to the site much, but hope to do better this year. My faulty memory is to blame, I think. I just keep forgetting how much I enjoy it. Anyway, I'm so glad I found this story/poem today,
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Your poetic skills are on full display in this poem Cal, I was so caught up in the story, I couldn't stop reading until I reached the end, Each verse told another part of the story and a little bit more was revealed about the main character, your soul brother. I really enjoyed reading this! I don't get to the site much, but hope to do better this year. My faulty memory is to blame, I think. I just keep forgetting how much I enjoy it. Anyway, I'm so glad I found this story/poem today,
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Gee, thank you so much for your kind, in-depth review, and all those stars!! Amazing that this actually came to me in a dream and I wrote it out the next morning, sent it to a life-time friend of mine for finishing touches, and found that picture that was a story in itself.
So glad to hear from you and I hope you find time to visit and post more often!
irish
Comment from MissMerri
It is not surprising I guess, that I should love this poem. What is perhaps surprising is that it took me so long to let you know. It is only because I have had twenty-seventeen unexpected interruptions. But today I ran away from home, like your courageous friend, and I am writing this on my phone. I want you to know it is heart-touching and vivid and inspiring and a strong example of why you should write more often. I hope you will be able to do so soon! I love seeing your posts. You really have a talent for creating easy to see scenes that draw the reader right into the story. Please give us more of your creative stories.
MM
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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It is not surprising I guess, that I should love this poem. What is perhaps surprising is that it took me so long to let you know. It is only because I have had twenty-seventeen unexpected interruptions. But today I ran away from home, like your courageous friend, and I am writing this on my phone. I want you to know it is heart-touching and vivid and inspiring and a strong example of why you should write more often. I hope you will be able to do so soon! I love seeing your posts. You really have a talent for creating easy to see scenes that draw the reader right into the story. Please give us more of your creative stories.
MM
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind and in depth review, all those stars!!! And most of all, your help and encouragement. In the coming months, with re-retirement on the horizon, I will hopefully be able to refine and post some of the more than one-hundred stories I have started.
irish
Comment from Badger_29
Very well constructed;
The way it rolls along off the tongue, and your allusions to being young as compared to the lifetime that goes in between then and now.
The flow and meter ar excellent, as is the rhyming.
BB
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Very well constructed;
The way it rolls along off the tongue, and your allusions to being young as compared to the lifetime that goes in between then and now.
The flow and meter ar excellent, as is the rhyming.
BB
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Thank you for your kind and instructive review, glad you enjoyed my little effort!
irish
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Go to your typewriter and bleed". Hemingway
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Miracle in the heights
Here's a story for you. I jave been Down trodden. lost my bike, 2nd phone and on top of that I broke my guitar I need the way downtown I was being discouraged because I lost my RT Metro pass.
Lo and behold I called lost and found and they had it there.
Then I was worried about finding a ride downtown for a doctors for me at 1:30 and then to work after that. I worked on resources and tried to find something else game very discouraged then an angel called me and got me yellow cab.
Jesus Said
" If your son asked for an egg would you give him a snake?
Consider the birds of the air for they do not work nor toil yet our Heavenly Father takes care of them.
How much more would Take Care of ye of little faith? I would like to see more soon.
If you can't think of anything, try those acrostics with the names of your family members. people like that type of thing as a gift. also it's a way to train a writing to have a logical progression with a limited number of variables, sometimes difficult. I started doing it naturally when I think of people's names while I'm wherever my mind starts to make these acrostics.
Calculated
Anogram
Living
Vicariously
Into
Netherlands
Brave
Ready
Unification
Cedeing
Eternity
Grand
Announcment
Negotiating
Desireable
Yellow Roses
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Or "yeild", for the y . . . Is much
Better
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a lovely poem.
Very nicely written and the story within is well told.
The picture is a wonderful match.
Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece with us.
Sharon
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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I think this is a lovely poem.
Very nicely written and the story within is well told.
The picture is a wonderful match.
Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece with us.
Sharon
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Thanks for reading, Sharon, your kind review, and the stars!
Lucky to find that picture that is a story in itself.
irish
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I wish I had a six left for this poem. I sure hope you received a bunch of sixes. This poem deserves it. You did a wonderful job writing. I could feel the emotion of the situation.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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I wish I had a six left for this poem. I sure hope you received a bunch of sixes. This poem deserves it. You did a wonderful job writing. I could feel the emotion of the situation.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Hi Barb, thank you for the kind and generous review, and the stars!
Hope to find more time to post and visit, my re-retirement is just around the corner.
irish
Comment from estory
There's a nice sing-song lilt to the music of this poem, contrasting with the rather solemn, sober tone of the voice, looking back at a long lost friend who gave his life in the service of his country. The contrast serves to deepen and widen the mood of the poem, showing happiness alongside sadness, like clouds on a sunny day. I think the image of the white crosses on the graves at the end was a strong, poignant symbol of the person lost to death and a whole relationship taken away in that death. The musical elements of the poem reminded me a little of early Yeats, something like The Cap and Bells. estory
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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There's a nice sing-song lilt to the music of this poem, contrasting with the rather solemn, sober tone of the voice, looking back at a long lost friend who gave his life in the service of his country. The contrast serves to deepen and widen the mood of the poem, showing happiness alongside sadness, like clouds on a sunny day. I think the image of the white crosses on the graves at the end was a strong, poignant symbol of the person lost to death and a whole relationship taken away in that death. The musical elements of the poem reminded me a little of early Yeats, something like The Cap and Bells. estory
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Wow, thank you so much for the kind and in-depth review, and the stars! AS with all my writing, this poem was a story from my life. Actually visited Arlington two year ago, believe that was the inspiration for this work.
irish
Comment from Therese Caron
This is one of the best poems I've read in a long time. It is amazing how you always remember that boy. Some children stay in our hearts and minds forever, especially the ones who never had a chance. This poem is written so beautifully and in such a heartfelt way. Thank you so much for sharing this poem with us.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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This is one of the best poems I've read in a long time. It is amazing how you always remember that boy. Some children stay in our hearts and minds forever, especially the ones who never had a chance. This poem is written so beautifully and in such a heartfelt way. Thank you so much for sharing this poem with us.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Hello, Therese, Thank you so much for your kind and in-depth review, and the massive constellation of stars! Tom had a terrible childhood and I was always amazed at his courage and the way he overcame the bitterness and turned it into the spirit of giving.
irish
