Punchinello
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
A great description for the setting, very poetic: "She went to an illegal abortionist and died from excessive bleeding." I love the use of dialects: "Jebediah tossed his bald cranium from side to side. In disbelief he returned, "I swears, Bartholomew, you's forever yappin' 'bout Yo-han Sebastian Strauss." A great simile: "He loosened his building anger and felt he was on a carnival ride." great chapter.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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A great description for the setting, very poetic: "She went to an illegal abortionist and died from excessive bleeding." I love the use of dialects: "Jebediah tossed his bald cranium from side to side. In disbelief he returned, "I swears, Bartholomew, you's forever yappin' 'bout Yo-han Sebastian Strauss." A great simile: "He loosened his building anger and felt he was on a carnival ride." great chapter.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Thanks. Much appreciate the review.
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Comment from Elljae
(he played out the dizzying lair.)-this part lost me, is he playing in a lair or is this word, lair, being used in a way I obviously don't understand. I know an old form of the word is a man who dresses in a crude or vulgar way, someone who shows off; I don't know, maybe the writer was trying to mean something that I just don't get. What does the author mean 'as he played out the dizzying lair'?
But despite my ignorance with this particular phrase I still find this story very compelling and I am captivated by this serial killer, "Punchinnello". I look forward to each chapter after I finish reading the current one. Thank you.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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(he played out the dizzying lair.)-this part lost me, is he playing in a lair or is this word, lair, being used in a way I obviously don't understand. I know an old form of the word is a man who dresses in a crude or vulgar way, someone who shows off; I don't know, maybe the writer was trying to mean something that I just don't get. What does the author mean 'as he played out the dizzying lair'?
But despite my ignorance with this particular phrase I still find this story very compelling and I am captivated by this serial killer, "Punchinnello". I look forward to each chapter after I finish reading the current one. Thank you.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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lair means a place where a dangerous or wild animal resides, and Punchinello certainly fits that description. Therefore, what was intended to be said is that Punchinello was playing out (or performing) his killings in the realm he existed in. Anyway, appreciate the review.
Comment from Ricky1024
This was the assassin at his very best and also this was the chapter that I'd miss the other day cuz your wife posted a couple chapters high end it was a nice mix in the beginning with Cody and school basically being followed by the silver-haired man and then it first I didn't understand the conversation between two I didn't know if it was birds or what it was until the end when you said it was a couple of bums especially that they were hungry in the one didn't hear that it was human feet sorry for the run-on sentences I'm actually riding a bicycle in Tuckerton New Jersey on route 9 I have 17 minutes to catch the 5597 have to ride about 6 MI thanks for this and have a wonderful day Ricky
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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This was the assassin at his very best and also this was the chapter that I'd miss the other day cuz your wife posted a couple chapters high end it was a nice mix in the beginning with Cody and school basically being followed by the silver-haired man and then it first I didn't understand the conversation between two I didn't know if it was birds or what it was until the end when you said it was a couple of bums especially that they were hungry in the one didn't hear that it was human feet sorry for the run-on sentences I'm actually riding a bicycle in Tuckerton New Jersey on route 9 I have 17 minutes to catch the 5597 have to ride about 6 MI thanks for this and have a wonderful day Ricky
Comment Written 24-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Much appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Brett, this is a chapter that really kept me on the edge of the seat so to speak. I loved it. It's very well written and I can't wait to be reading on what is to happen in Cody's life. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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Hi Brett, this is a chapter that really kept me on the edge of the seat so to speak. I loved it. It's very well written and I can't wait to be reading on what is to happen in Cody's life. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Sankey
Gory, gruesome chapter old friend. What a read. Can almost smell the barbecue. You created quite a vivid picture in my mind for sure. No spags. Good job.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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Gory, gruesome chapter old friend. What a read. Can almost smell the barbecue. You created quite a vivid picture in my mind for sure. No spags. Good job.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Much more to come.
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
Woww!! It was such an amazing piece of writing. You're possessed with such a wonderful talent. I loved it and enjoyed reading it completely. I hope you'll go miles as a writer. Wishing you luck.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Woww!! It was such an amazing piece of writing. You're possessed with such a wonderful talent. I loved it and enjoyed reading it completely. I hope you'll go miles as a writer. Wishing you luck.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Mistydawn
This is a very interesting chapter. A lot is going on for sure. Your first part about Cody is well-written, interesting. Your character's thoughts and actions seem believable, he really came to life. The second part is well-written, interesting, suspenseful. The cannibalism part was rather gross to me but I guess feet is a gourmet dinner to your character, lol. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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This is a very interesting chapter. A lot is going on for sure. Your first part about Cody is well-written, interesting. Your character's thoughts and actions seem believable, he really came to life. The second part is well-written, interesting, suspenseful. The cannibalism part was rather gross to me but I guess feet is a gourmet dinner to your character, lol. Nicely done.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Uuuhhh.... interesting segment. (wink, wink) Again, is Pamela someone I should know and my blonde memory is on the blink? I'm sure hoping Cody's feet aren't next... Good portrayal of the scene and the surroundings and, especially, more on the mental state of our assassin. Look forward to the next installment! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Uuuhhh.... interesting segment. (wink, wink) Again, is Pamela someone I should know and my blonde memory is on the blink? I'm sure hoping Cody's feet aren't next... Good portrayal of the scene and the surroundings and, especially, more on the mental state of our assassin. Look forward to the next installment! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Pamela Landa is just a minor character used in this one scene, and no Cody does not have to worry about being consumed...or does he? Interesting perspective. One can never tell.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
WOW a scene from Walking dad about roasting somebody legs for dinner. This story gave me the chills, it's quite horrifying. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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WOW a scene from Walking dad about roasting somebody legs for dinner. This story gave me the chills, it's quite horrifying. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate your comments and the review.
