Where Is Everybody Going
There's more than working in life4 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
"Where is Everybody Going!"
So true this is a hurry up and get it done world of telecommunications.
And, their best friend is that cell phone! Constantly at their ear or they're hitting it oddly enough with their finger?
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This was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly!
Thanks Lulube!
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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"Where is Everybody Going!"
So true this is a hurry up and get it done world of telecommunications.
And, their best friend is that cell phone! Constantly at their ear or they're hitting it oddly enough with their finger?
...
This was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly!
Thanks Lulube!
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 19-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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thxs Ricky for such a thorough review
lulube
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Lori, I like this poem, it shows the kind of person you are! Sensible!
The world has gone crazy, frantically rushing about, god knows where. I like your line about the expensive toys - it's ridiculous what people spend on their kids then wonder why they are hard up. A week before Christmas I saw a woman buying her child a new toy while filling her trolley with food. Where is the excitement of Christmas if you are buying toys while out shopping. Well enough of my grousing - bed time LOL. Good poem. Keep writing - Warm regards Dorothy xx
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Hello Lori, I like this poem, it shows the kind of person you are! Sensible!
The world has gone crazy, frantically rushing about, god knows where. I like your line about the expensive toys - it's ridiculous what people spend on their kids then wonder why they are hard up. A week before Christmas I saw a woman buying her child a new toy while filling her trolley with food. Where is the excitement of Christmas if you are buying toys while out shopping. Well enough of my grousing - bed time LOL. Good poem. Keep writing - Warm regards Dorothy xx
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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thxs for your continuous support and understanding my style. That lady must have money to burn. lol Its always been a hassle for me to buy what I'd like to in Dec. so I start right after my birthday in March. then I'm not too, too stressed.
need your opinion-is the meter out that much in this one?
lulube and should I post the letter,to Phyllis's family, for you to read it that way? or in an email that i'd need?
Comment from Lil' Mormon Boy
Sound like the story of many a life at home, I know it was mine as a child and as a father. You have cause to reflect.
Your metering was sometimes hard to follow, for me, but rhyming was perfect.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Sound like the story of many a life at home, I know it was mine as a child and as a father. You have cause to reflect.
Your metering was sometimes hard to follow, for me, but rhyming was perfect.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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thxs for your honesty and great comments in this review.
lulube
Comment from tfawcus
Your poem illustrates the frenetic pace of modern life and its ultimate pointlessness. So much better, as you suggest, to take things more slowly and enjoy the journey.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Your poem illustrates the frenetic pace of modern life and its ultimate pointlessness. So much better, as you suggest, to take things more slowly and enjoy the journey.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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thxs for your awesome comments and time for this review
lulube
