Dawn's Favorite Poems, Vol. 4
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Broken Doll"eclectic poetry favorites from 2017 & 2018
11 total reviews
Comment from padumachitta
hi
well now I'm sad...geez, loved the piano though.
Your poem read well, moved well and made a clear and poignant point..
I really hope it's not you, because I have always like and enjoyed you and can't imagine that you would not have many friends out there in the world.
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hi
well now I'm sad...geez, loved the piano though.
Your poem read well, moved well and made a clear and poignant point..
I really hope it's not you, because I have always like and enjoyed you and can't imagine that you would not have many friends out there in the world.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2020
Comment from Joan E.
Your poem sounded as autobiographical as the final couplet indicates. I admired your rhythmic, rhymed quatrains and their evocative descriptions, which I think most women would agree with. Your "knife" simile and matching picture are very effective as well. Sighs- Joan
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Your poem sounded as autobiographical as the final couplet indicates. I admired your rhythmic, rhymed quatrains and their evocative descriptions, which I think most women would agree with. Your "knife" simile and matching picture are very effective as well. Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 19-Jan-2020
Comment from Ricky1024
"Broken Doll".
Based on the award-winning poem by LR Knost.
A female activist and Rights movement for children.
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I enjoy the artwork cuz I collect dolls.
It was also rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks Dawn,
Doctor Ricky 1024
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"Broken Doll".
Based on the award-winning poem by LR Knost.
A female activist and Rights movement for children.
...
I enjoy the artwork cuz I collect dolls.
It was also rich in Theme and Imagery.
...
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks Dawn,
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 19-Jan-2020
Comment from pharp
Dawn,
What a beautifully penned piece of art. The presentation is outstanding. As I read, past memories came into play and tears down my eyes. You did an exceptional job in the penning of this poem. Thanks for sharing...all out of sixes / virtual six my friend....Blessings...Portia
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Dawn,
What a beautifully penned piece of art. The presentation is outstanding. As I read, past memories came into play and tears down my eyes. You did an exceptional job in the penning of this poem. Thanks for sharing...all out of sixes / virtual six my friend....Blessings...Portia
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
Comment from Sasha
I am sure you hear this all the time, but I wish I had a 6 to give you for this beautifully written poem. Your message is clear and the artwork you used to illustrated it is superb. Thank you so much for sharing this with us. It is definitely worthy of 6 stars to me.
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I am sure you hear this all the time, but I wish I had a 6 to give you for this beautifully written poem. Your message is clear and the artwork you used to illustrated it is superb. Thank you so much for sharing this with us. It is definitely worthy of 6 stars to me.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
Comment from damommy
This is beautifully written about a woman who is considered a trophy. One can be so hurt that they avoid any contact with anyone. Shy people are particularly vulnerable.
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This is beautifully written about a woman who is considered a trophy. One can be so hurt that they avoid any contact with anyone. Shy people are particularly vulnerable.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
Comment from Teri7
Dawn, This is a very well written poem you have penned with a great message in it. You used great descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. God is the mender of broken hearts and lives. love and blessings, teri
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Dawn, This is a very well written poem you have penned with a great message in it. You used great descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. God is the mender of broken hearts and lives. love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a good poem with an extended metaphor and declarations of belief combined. Here are my favorite lines: A woman isn't someone's wind-up toy.
We're equals,and deserving of respect
I would take the comma out after 'equals' there. Thanks for posting!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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This is a good poem with an extended metaphor and declarations of belief combined. Here are my favorite lines: A woman isn't someone's wind-up toy.
We're equals,and deserving of respect
I would take the comma out after 'equals' there. Thanks for posting!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Thanks.
Comment from Drew Delaney
Wow! This one was written just for me I think. I was the broken doll for 42 years. I love this poem. I am going to save it so that I can read it once in a while. Thank you so much for sharing. I love the pic you shared as well. Where do you find these beautiful pics?
Drew
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Wow! This one was written just for me I think. I was the broken doll for 42 years. I love this poem. I am going to save it so that I can read it once in a while. Thank you so much for sharing. I love the pic you shared as well. Where do you find these beautiful pics?
Drew
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh, Dawn, I want to come and give you a cuddle. Your poem cut me to the core, it's so very sad. Your heart was broken and stripped bare and tossed away, what a terrible man to do that to someone he is supposed to love. You are such a lovely lady, always there for others, yet you are alone and sad. Your poem is written with so much emotion it's hard not to hurt along with you. I'm glad you have Prissy, my friend. Love you lots. Sandra xxxx
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Oh, Dawn, I want to come and give you a cuddle. Your poem cut me to the core, it's so very sad. Your heart was broken and stripped bare and tossed away, what a terrible man to do that to someone he is supposed to love. You are such a lovely lady, always there for others, yet you are alone and sad. Your poem is written with so much emotion it's hard not to hurt along with you. I'm glad you have Prissy, my friend. Love you lots. Sandra xxxx
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Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
