Some Silliness
A Veltanelle poem for Potlatch Poetry21 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
LOL! Well, I guess nursery rhymes were meant to be silly and get our minds off more pressing matters. I do agree with the stitch in time, though. Works for me. Marilyn
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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LOL! Well, I guess nursery rhymes were meant to be silly and get our minds off more pressing matters. I do agree with the stitch in time, though. Works for me. Marilyn
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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Thank you. I always take two stitches, just in case. Not really. lol
Comment from LaRosa
Now how much fun was that to read? Had me smiling all the way and especially that I was not alone as a child thinking he had to be an idiot to jump over a flame, no matter the reason!
It's an interesting form: Veltanelle. I had to look it up. Learning never stops here and I believe you met the challenge quite well.
PS) never quite imagined DaVinci's Lady with humor. A perfect twist.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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Now how much fun was that to read? Had me smiling all the way and especially that I was not alone as a child thinking he had to be an idiot to jump over a flame, no matter the reason!
It's an interesting form: Veltanelle. I had to look it up. Learning never stops here and I believe you met the challenge quite well.
PS) never quite imagined DaVinci's Lady with humor. A perfect twist.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for this delightful review. I see we think a lot alike. Why don't you join Potlatch Poetry if you like learning new forms?
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Thanks for the invite. I think about it, and probably will before long. I always disliked poetry but am learning to appreciate it now.
Comment from dkblack
This was enjoyable to read and put a smile on my face! I also liked learning what a Veltanelle form of poetry is. I find silliness to be a great stress reliever! Well done!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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This was enjoyable to read and put a smile on my face! I also liked learning what a Veltanelle form of poetry is. I find silliness to be a great stress reliever! Well done!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Then I must be the least stressed person in the world. I;m silly all the time. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Yvonne, I liked this a lot and it was good fun to read, but I have a feeling that most of it I didn't really understand. I have a feeling that I would have to had grown up in the States to fully understand this. All best, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Hi Yvonne, I liked this a lot and it was good fun to read, but I have a feeling that most of it I didn't really understand. I have a feeling that I would have to had grown up in the States to fully understand this. All best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Thank you for reviewing it anyway. In the second stanza, I thought if one stitch saves nine, then two stitches would save me eighteen. lol
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Now you had to go and make sense of the nonsense. LOL
Very well done veltanelle. Rules followed spot on and it was a fun read for this morning. Nicely done, as I could see other lines if allowed
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Now you had to go and make sense of the nonsense. LOL
Very well done veltanelle. Rules followed spot on and it was a fun read for this morning. Nicely done, as I could see other lines if allowed
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Thank you. According to the rules, I could only write 3 stanzas. Knowing me, there's more to come of silliness.
Comment from Pantygynt
Well you said it -- 'some silliness' that is, but what the hell. Silliness is fun, at least it is here, a separate dollop of the stuff in each sestet, which is the proper word for what is described here as sixains -- yuck! What a word.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Well you said it -- 'some silliness' that is, but what the hell. Silliness is fun, at least it is here, a separate dollop of the stuff in each sestet, which is the proper word for what is described here as sixains -- yuck! What a word.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Thanks, Jim.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
What an original form name, and how funny to do a new take on an old nursery rhyme. Here is the ultimate question that makes total sense: Could he not walk around the taper's flare?
Apparently there are some other idioms being played around with, too.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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What an original form name, and how funny to do a new take on an old nursery rhyme. Here is the ultimate question that makes total sense: Could he not walk around the taper's flare?
Apparently there are some other idioms being played around with, too.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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I wondered that, too. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Gloria ....
You pose some very difficult questions, Yvonne and what a hoot. I particularly got a charge out of Jack be nimble. For heaven's sake yes, just walk around the flame instead of risking all for a silly jump.
Great job and a most interesting form. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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You pose some very difficult questions, Yvonne and what a hoot. I particularly got a charge out of Jack be nimble. For heaven's sake yes, just walk around the flame instead of risking all for a silly jump.
Great job and a most interesting form. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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That's what I thought. Why jump over the candlestick? Thank you, Gloria.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvonne. That is a funny piece. One thing bothered me... you started talkin' about cyphering in the second stanza. Did you do that to confuse me? I think you did. That hurt. (~_~) Robert
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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Hello Yvonne. That is a funny piece. One thing bothered me... you started talkin' about cyphering in the second stanza. Did you do that to confuse me? I think you did. That hurt. (~_~) Robert
Comment Written 17-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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LOL. I'm so sorry. I never meant to confuse you. Thanks, Robert.
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I'm gonna make a sign and put it on my home page. "NO MORE NUMBERS". Tee Hee I swore off numbers when I retired. Robert
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That's going be something hard to ignore.
Comment from lyenochka
What an interesting form. And I love how you gave us humorous and logical commentary on these well known sayings. Great job with the potlatch club challenge. I guess for this club no free verse poem is permitted?
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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What an interesting form. And I love how you gave us humorous and logical commentary on these well known sayings. Great job with the potlatch club challenge. I guess for this club no free verse poem is permitted?
Comment Written 17-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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When we do an author's choice, free verse is acceptable. Usually, we're trying to learn different forms of metered/rhymed poetry. I almost used my class assignment this time, since I could use anything.
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Oh, thanks! Good to know. I was going to use my class assignment but want to wait until after our discussion. ♥
