Scene at a Pet Store 3
Pons and Ned still at the store14 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
"Scene at a Pet Store 3"
Was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly!
Thanks!
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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"Scene at a Pet Store 3"
Was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly!
Thanks!
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Thanks, Ricky
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, this is terrific, Bill. I knew right off when you introduced the expert women that is FanStory's Yvonne and Judiverse. They are both most wise indeed and offered some terrific advice.
What a neat idea and your script works like a charm. I enjoyed reading your "characterizations".
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Ha, this is terrific, Bill. I knew right off when you introduced the expert women that is FanStory's Yvonne and Judiverse. They are both most wise indeed and offered some terrific advice.
What a neat idea and your script works like a charm. I enjoyed reading your "characterizations".
Gloria
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Thank you, Gloria. Judi and Yvonne had both been concerned about this topic so I asked them if they would be in this scene. I haven?t heard back from them yet. They might mute me. :)
Comment from Carl DeVere
Well this was certainly worth some giggles and a commentary on how superior some people feel to other people. I wish that I knew how to tell you how to crank this up a notch. There's potential here with some more work. Hit the edit button and read it back to yourself. You might be surprised at what happens next.
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Well this was certainly worth some giggles and a commentary on how superior some people feel to other people. I wish that I knew how to tell you how to crank this up a notch. There's potential here with some more work. Hit the edit button and read it back to yourself. You might be surprised at what happens next.
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Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Thanks, Carl, for giving this a look. I am stringing a bunch of these scenes together for the community theater. I will be adding and modifying to create a full story.
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Great! i know some actors who would love to play a bumpkin. "Break a leg." as they say in the theater.
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! I'm glad Yvonne and Judi could join you all there. But they would have been much nicer and wouldn't make comments about Ned needing a cactus. Fun post, Bill!
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Lol! I'm glad Yvonne and Judi could join you all there. But they would have been much nicer and wouldn't make comments about Ned needing a cactus. Fun post, Bill!
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Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Judi had commented that Ned should look at rescue dogs. Yvonne said sh3 feared Nedwas too dumb to care for an animal.
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Oh! I stand corrected. Rescue pets are best!
