My Country
The drought is broken15 total reviews
Comment from PoemsOfDD
I hear you on this one K. The weather here in Australia has been so extreme with its heat and fires to storms and flooding. Everyone is affected by it.
I thought I'd review this poem to bring it the 'Recognized' ribbon it deserves.
Just a comment on the last line - Can't come back from from the cost - you may want to delete the extra 'from'. ~DDx
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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I hear you on this one K. The weather here in Australia has been so extreme with its heat and fires to storms and flooding. Everyone is affected by it.
I thought I'd review this poem to bring it the 'Recognized' ribbon it deserves.
Just a comment on the last line - Can't come back from from the cost - you may want to delete the extra 'from'. ~DDx
Comment Written 01-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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DD you are so kind. I will change it. Thanks so much for reading and appreciating our crazy weather. Bless you, Kay.
Comment from Alchera
Tears are dropping as I am reviewing this chronical felt written poem of yours.I have no words to describe what You felt and what I personally feel in my flashback memory for the Australian lost and suffering state of mind and above all for their uncertain future. A Great pièce of work. Thank You for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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Tears are dropping as I am reviewing this chronical felt written poem of yours.I have no words to describe what You felt and what I personally feel in my flashback memory for the Australian lost and suffering state of mind and above all for their uncertain future. A Great pièce of work. Thank You for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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Hello my friend, Thank you for reading. Yes, a holocaust indeed. Now the monsoon rains are saving our country. It will take many years to come back, some will never. Blessings, Kay.
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Yes the ecological damage and lost have been enormous everywhere and nature will rebirth slowly again while man's will remain for ever and will never return e specially for those who have lost their life homes.
If You like give a look at my poem New South Wales. Please! Blessings from Italy. Tony
Comment from patcelaw
I am so sorry your land has been so devastated by the raging wildfires. It is a blessing that the rains are coming and putting out the fires.
Patricia
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2020
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I am so sorry your land has been so devastated by the raging wildfires. It is a blessing that the rains are coming and putting out the fires.
Patricia
Comment Written 20-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2020
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Hello Patricia, Good to hear from you. Thanks so much for reading. Yes, it was a holocaust of mammoth proportions. Thank the lord for the rain! love Kay.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant write here speaking of the aftermath of the tragedy of forest fire and the loss of life and beautiful greenery. It will regrow, but it will take years. I feel for your country and hope that those who have lost everything can rebuild their lives. Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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A poignant write here speaking of the aftermath of the tragedy of forest fire and the loss of life and beautiful greenery. It will regrow, but it will take years. I feel for your country and hope that those who have lost everything can rebuild their lives. Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Hello Dolly Peg, Hee, Hee. Our Govt. is trying to get tourists back. The media has made Oz sound like no one should travel here, no so. We have much to offer still. I cried when I found out we had six million native animals killed. However, would you believe, helicopters are dropping food to the animals spotted. Thanks for reading my friend. Love, Kay XX
Comment from Eve Vasa
Hi, yes, all that rain was great. It is lovely to see and hear. Nothing like the sound of rain on the roof to put you to sleep.
I liked your poem. It is a 'good' work that I enjoyed reading. The reason for the four star ratings is the rhyme. You are obviously wanting this to rhyme each alternate line, but at ties that felt a little forced. Like the us of farmers and chimes, which didn't work for me and also in the line with 'food' and 'stood'.
So my suggestion for improvement would be to work on those couple of areas to see if you can't come up with more appropriate word usage.
Overall, it is a good poem that I would recommend to others for review. Nice to read you today, Eve.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Hi, yes, all that rain was great. It is lovely to see and hear. Nothing like the sound of rain on the roof to put you to sleep.
I liked your poem. It is a 'good' work that I enjoyed reading. The reason for the four star ratings is the rhyme. You are obviously wanting this to rhyme each alternate line, but at ties that felt a little forced. Like the us of farmers and chimes, which didn't work for me and also in the line with 'food' and 'stood'.
So my suggestion for improvement would be to work on those couple of areas to see if you can't come up with more appropriate word usage.
Overall, it is a good poem that I would recommend to others for review. Nice to read you today, Eve.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Hello Eve, Thanks for reading and your suggestions. I was emotional about our loss and wrote this off the top of my head. Yes, I will edit where I can. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Janetsue
The devastation is beyond comprehension. So much land turned to ashes...so many animals lost...so many people exhausted and homeless. Thank the Lord you've survived. I wish I had a six for this, my friend! xoxo
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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The devastation is beyond comprehension. So much land turned to ashes...so many animals lost...so many people exhausted and homeless. Thank the Lord you've survived. I wish I had a six for this, my friend! xoxo
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Thank you my friend. The monsoon rains have finally arrived! We ar still devastated; millions of acres lost, homes and millions of native animals. At least the rain is easing the drought. Love, Kay.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Well said Aussie. Well written, well rhymed and with much emotion in each verse about the terrible cost to our land, our animals and all those affected by the bush fires. Hopefully the rain will put out all the fires.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Well said Aussie. Well written, well rhymed and with much emotion in each verse about the terrible cost to our land, our animals and all those affected by the bush fires. Hopefully the rain will put out all the fires.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Hello Valda, It's still raining! You would be used to it up north. It's a joyous time now, our farmers are getting bucket loads! Love, Kay.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Kace. That's wonderful news for everyone around the world who have been watching the fires in Australia. It's particularly important for your country. Nicely described poem. I'm sure there's much relief now. Marilyn
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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Hi Kace. That's wonderful news for everyone around the world who have been watching the fires in Australia. It's particularly important for your country. Nicely described poem. I'm sure there's much relief now. Marilyn
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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You bet your boots it is! The sound of rain is manner for the soul. Thanks Marilyn. love, Kay XX
Comment from Teri7
Praise the Lord for hearing and answering prayers. I know so much was lost, but God is good all the time. Even when we don't see it, He is good. I am so thankful the rain came. You are still in my prayers my friend! May God bless you all and the little animals too! love you! Teri
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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Praise the Lord for hearing and answering prayers. I know so much was lost, but God is good all the time. Even when we don't see it, He is good. I am so thankful the rain came. You are still in my prayers my friend! May God bless you all and the little animals too! love you! Teri
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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Indeed, Praise the Lord! Manna from heaven. Thanks Teri. Love, Kay.
Comment from Sasha
I am relieved that rain has finally put stop to the terrible fires in you country. I hope they continue untill they are all out...
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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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I am relieved that rain has finally put stop to the terrible fires in you country. I hope they continue untill they are all out...
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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Hello Sasha, God is good, we humans are impatient, still it was a holocaust to say the least. Thanks for reading my friend. Love, Kay.
