Love's Vision
The Japanese Kouta with a challenge41 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a romantic little poem, Yvette. I like the composition of your Kouta. It has just the right word choices and a beautiful image to go with it. Marilyn
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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This is a romantic little poem, Yvette. I like the composition of your Kouta. It has just the right word choices and a beautiful image to go with it. Marilyn
Comment Written 22-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2020
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Thanx much for your review on this little 'foray into the unknown', Marilyn -- much appreciated! ;) Yvette
Comment from juliaSjames
Beautiful lyrical poetry. This is the first time I've read a kouta. I may take up your challenge and try one of my own.
Well done, Yvette.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Beautiful lyrical poetry. This is the first time I've read a kouta. I may take up your challenge and try one of my own.
Well done, Yvette.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 17-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Thanx so much for your review on this 'newly discovered' short form, Julia... I ran across it over the holidays and decided to give it a go! ;) :) Look forward to your pen's version! ;) :) Have a bright, sunshiny week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Barbaraj1
I never heard of a Japanese Kouta. This is a lovely and warm poem.
It's also very romantic................"Touch my skin with dew drop's kiss.
Good job.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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I never heard of a Japanese Kouta. This is a lovely and warm poem.
It's also very romantic................"Touch my skin with dew drop's kiss.
Good job.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Thanx so much for your review on this 'newly discovered' short form, Barbara J... gotta keep life interesting, ya know?! ;) :) Might I look forward to your giving it a go, perhaps?! ;) :) Have a bright, sunshiny week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvette. That is a nice verse and of course I know nothing about the style but I liked the content. It's probably time for me to leave FS and go back to my hillbilly ways of just ritin' stuff and getting some stuff published in journals which is what I was doing 'fore I came here. I was gettin' some cash there. :)))
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Hello Yvette. That is a nice verse and of course I know nothing about the style but I liked the content. It's probably time for me to leave FS and go back to my hillbilly ways of just ritin' stuff and getting some stuff published in journals which is what I was doing 'fore I came here. I was gettin' some cash there. :)))
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Thanx so much for your review on this 'newly discovered' short form, Z... gotta keep life interesting, ya know?! ;) :) Maybe Ralphie will want to give a try for his fan base, yeah?! ;) :) Have a bright, sunshiny week! ;) Yvette
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Hey Yvette. You're welcome.
Pretty soon. I'm gonna send Ralphie off on his own. He gets all the smiles, and I get all the frowns. Who can compete with that?
He's becoming a real showboat.
(*_*). Z
Comment from Patty Palmer
What a pretty poem you made out of 4 lines! You said more in the four lines than some do in 4 stanzas! The picture is very interesting also. It enhances the poem beautifully! Great job!
Patty
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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What a pretty poem you made out of 4 lines! You said more in the four lines than some do in 4 stanzas! The picture is very interesting also. It enhances the poem beautifully! Great job!
Patty
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Thanx so much for your review on this 'newly discovered' short form, Patty... gotta keep life interesting, ya know?! ;) :) Look forward to your giving it a go! ;) :) Have a bright, sunshiny week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is a cozy, warm all over poem. The artwork suits the piece well and is amazing to behold. I see you wrote a 'Kouta' and a well done one at that. I love the phrase, "dew drop's kiss" but my favorite line is the last one, "Dream this life is ours." So even if it isn't yet, dream that it could be and is possible. I like that theory very much. We can't forget to dream, whether it happens or not is beside the point. Excellent presentation. Good feelings are left with those who read this.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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This is a cozy, warm all over poem. The artwork suits the piece well and is amazing to behold. I see you wrote a 'Kouta' and a well done one at that. I love the phrase, "dew drop's kiss" but my favorite line is the last one, "Dream this life is ours." So even if it isn't yet, dream that it could be and is possible. I like that theory very much. We can't forget to dream, whether it happens or not is beside the point. Excellent presentation. Good feelings are left with those who read this.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Thanx so much for your review on this 'newly discovered' short form, Jess... gotta keep life interesting, ya know?! ;) :) So sorry I'm so far behind, but I'm getting caught up.... come heck or high water!! ;) :) Have a bright, sunshiny week out there on the coast! ;) Yvette
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Hi Yvette.
Since your post, I have noticed other Kouta's being posted. It looks challenging. I might try penning one myself.
It has rained this week with high winds, which brought the power outage for a while, yesterday. So much for sun shiny days, For a while anyway. I hope you're holding up with the weather down there.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Mark D. R.
Yvette,
I can learn a lot from reading your poems and now a new style to consider for my own, Kouta.
That gentle kiss can almost be felt and what a delicious whisper to hear! Quite a lovely thought you created with this post. Your selected artwork is perfect for your verse.
Mark
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Yvette,
I can learn a lot from reading your poems and now a new style to consider for my own, Kouta.
That gentle kiss can almost be felt and what a delicious whisper to hear! Quite a lovely thought you created with this post. Your selected artwork is perfect for your verse.
Mark
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Thanx so much, Mark, for this awesome review on this 'newly discovered' short form. I ran across it over the holidays and decided to give it a go!! ;) Would love to see your pen see what it could do with it? !! ;) Thanx again and have a bright, sunshiny week! ;) Yvette
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So Yvette,
I have been saving in Review the following for a Tanka contest, but can redo as a Kouta if I omit my fifth line. Have you an opinion on which would make a stronger impression to the FS community?
Mark
sunlit shadows slope
thru the museum's skylight
adding mystery
to a statue's stoic smile
and a visitor's vision
Of course, I have added various alliterations to this verse (-;
Comment from Dawn Munro
ð?¥°ð???ð???ð?€© you vixen. I accept. I shall pen one, without a doubt. When exactly, I can't say, but yours has ignited the excitement for the format. It is beautiful.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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ð?¥°ð???ð???ð?€© you vixen. I accept. I shall pen one, without a doubt. When exactly, I can't say, but yours has ignited the excitement for the format. It is beautiful.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Hooray!! ;) And there shall be no 'vixen' comment... hey! I gotta keep life interesting, ya know?! ;) :) Look forward to your giving it a go, my friend! ;) :) Have a bright, sunshiny week! ;) Yvette
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:)))
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This sounds like a place for two where nothing else exists in that moment frozen in time. The only thing visible and tangible in that world is the two of you. I like this romantic, passionate, and well written work. Well done Y.M!
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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This sounds like a place for two where nothing else exists in that moment frozen in time. The only thing visible and tangible in that world is the two of you. I like this romantic, passionate, and well written work. Well done Y.M!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Thanx so much for your review on this 'newly discovered' short form, Jeffrey... gotta keep life interesting, ya know?! ;) :) Have a bright, sunshiny week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Therese Caron
What a lovely little poem! I have never heard of the Japanese Kouta. This one is very good. I like the line Dream this life is ours. You chose a stunning image also. Thanks for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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What a lovely little poem! I have never heard of the Japanese Kouta. This one is very good. I like the line Dream this life is ours. You chose a stunning image also. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Thanx so much for your review on this 'newly discovered' short form, Terry... gotta keep life interesting, ya know?! ;) :) Look forward to your giving it a go! ;) :) Have a bright, sunshiny week! ;) Yvette
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I don?t feel brave enough yet. My writing is not up to the caliber of FanStory people!
