Obsessive Tendencies
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Her Reality"An Unlikely Journey Toward Reconstruction
25 total reviews
Comment from Fonda Little
My favorite part was, ""Come on, Justine." I grab her arm, trying to sound light-hearted. "You know how he gets."
"Uuuuugh! Why must you indulge him?" she asks disgustedly as we reluctantly follow.
Because he smells a werewolf on me.
But I didn't say that out loud. Not yet.", because the end leaves the reader in suspense for the next chapter!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
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My favorite part was, ""Come on, Justine." I grab her arm, trying to sound light-hearted. "You know how he gets."
"Uuuuugh! Why must you indulge him?" she asks disgustedly as we reluctantly follow.
Because he smells a werewolf on me.
But I didn't say that out loud. Not yet.", because the end leaves the reader in suspense for the next chapter!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
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Yep!! ;) Gettin' good now, yeah?! ;) ;)
Comment from ciliverde
I am so interested in the hair of these fairies - the colors that change with emotion! I love that. Your imagination is quite amazing, and I look forward to learning more about both the fairies and werewolves, as we delve into the travails of Gregor and Celeste :))
Carol
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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I am so interested in the hair of these fairies - the colors that change with emotion! I love that. Your imagination is quite amazing, and I look forward to learning more about both the fairies and werewolves, as we delve into the travails of Gregor and Celeste :))
Carol
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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It's a very scary place: the imagination of a blonde mathematician...LOL!! ;) I'm so glad you're enjoying, Carol!! ;) THANK YOU! :)
Comment from robyn corum
Vette,
Nicely done. I am not a fan of fantasy - and though I find the other novel less of a fantasy and more realistically based - well, there's enough there to keep me on even footing -- this storyline is a bit more offputting for me. If I don't catch all of the chaps, you'll know why. It has nothing to do with your writing, whatsoever.
That is always crisp, clean and delicious. My mind just doesn't work as well this way. Weird.
Notes, if I may:
1.) couldn't control the deluge of hope and happiness that doused me
--> 'douse' is usually associated with putting something out or lowering it...
2.) 'They' are mostly the older ones - the ones (who) prefer not to interact
--> when referring to human(oids) use 'who'
3.) It is they (who) keep our 'before times' traditions alive... because they are the ones (who) try to maintain
--> ditto.
Thanks so much! I enjoyed!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Vette,
Nicely done. I am not a fan of fantasy - and though I find the other novel less of a fantasy and more realistically based - well, there's enough there to keep me on even footing -- this storyline is a bit more offputting for me. If I don't catch all of the chaps, you'll know why. It has nothing to do with your writing, whatsoever.
That is always crisp, clean and delicious. My mind just doesn't work as well this way. Weird.
Notes, if I may:
1.) couldn't control the deluge of hope and happiness that doused me
--> 'douse' is usually associated with putting something out or lowering it...
2.) 'They' are mostly the older ones - the ones (who) prefer not to interact
--> when referring to human(oids) use 'who'
3.) It is they (who) keep our 'before times' traditions alive... because they are the ones (who) try to maintain
--> ditto.
Thanks so much! I enjoyed!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Thanx again, my friend, for these catches -- I went back through the applicable chapters and applied them. :) Hope all's well over there... still nice and gray (ugh!) here today as I'm quite sure it is there as well... ;/ You have a great rest of the week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Mrs. KT
Holy Toledo, Mon Cherie!
Your imagination and creativity know no end! I am truly in awe of your storyline, the characters, setting, and dialogue. Every morsel connects, and I find it all utterly intriguing!
Kudos!
Looking forward to the next installment!
Take Care!
diane
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Holy Toledo, Mon Cherie!
Your imagination and creativity know no end! I am truly in awe of your storyline, the characters, setting, and dialogue. Every morsel connects, and I find it all utterly intriguing!
Kudos!
Looking forward to the next installment!
Take Care!
diane
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Oh, but you are my sunshine for the week!! ;) Thanx for your review on this one... make sure you catch Chapter five from this month as well (how did you miss this one last month?) -- it's paying over a buck (cost me lots to get it there - lol!). My New Year's resolution (at least, in part) is to stay on top of these (three) and maybe publish one or more (you know, so they can go no where like the other three that are out there...lol!! lol!!). :) :) :) Thanx again for your awesome review and stars, Beautiful Lady -- you rock! :) Yvette
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My pleasure, Yvette!
I most likely read the one from last month, became distracted with flooring projects, and then failed to return. It's an old age thing...
:) :) :)
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Lol!! Age indeed! Thank you for this big smile to start the day.... I need to find time for some projects of my own, I suppose -- lol! lol! Yep, grinning to beat the band here... luv you!! 😉
Comment from Sally Law
This is a fairy tale wonderlust. I enjoyed it although I think our little sweet tart is going to be eaten alive in the next installment. Your characters are magical and funny, just as I remember my girlfriends and boyfriends used to grill me about my love life. Friends are always nosey and know us better than we think. Hopefully, she listens to them.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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This is a fairy tale wonderlust. I enjoyed it although I think our little sweet tart is going to be eaten alive in the next installment. Your characters are magical and funny, just as I remember my girlfriends and boyfriends used to grill me about my love life. Friends are always nosey and know us better than we think. Hopefully, she listens to them.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
Comment Written 19-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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Too nosy, sometimes, for us nutty nerds that try hard not to be too introverted...LOL!! ;) :) Thank your for taking the time to read this latest chapter of Gregor and Celeste's story, Lady Sally -- truly means a lot to have your support!! ;) Here's wishing you a wonderful remainder of the week!! ;) Yvette
Comment from Ulla
Hi Yvette, you have drawn me in and I'm fascinated by this story. Celeste has the ability to draw in the admiration of her male friends. I can't wait to be reading on. Warm regards. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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Hi Yvette, you have drawn me in and I'm fascinated by this story. Celeste has the ability to draw in the admiration of her male friends. I can't wait to be reading on. Warm regards. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 19-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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Thank your for taking the time to read this latest chapter of Gregor and Celeste's story, Ulla -- truly means a lot!! ;) Here's wishing you a wonderful remainder of the week!! ;) Yvette
Comment from juliaSjames
Dear Yvette, I'd forgotten about your unlikely lovers. But this wonderful chapter drew me back under their spell. The males in Celeste's life are certainly possessed of huge personalities. You show this well.
A few suggestions:
"the twins are in full-fairy garb" - no need for the hyphen
"A chill runs through my body as if it's setting its own internal timer" - I like this. I feel this sometimes. Did you mean "internal thermostat"?
"There is nothing to be done of the bone-deep and innate fear" - "about the bone -deep ..."
You've taken cross-species mating to a new level in this write, my friend.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Dear Yvette, I'd forgotten about your unlikely lovers. But this wonderful chapter drew me back under their spell. The males in Celeste's life are certainly possessed of huge personalities. You show this well.
A few suggestions:
"the twins are in full-fairy garb" - no need for the hyphen
"A chill runs through my body as if it's setting its own internal timer" - I like this. I feel this sometimes. Did you mean "internal thermostat"?
"There is nothing to be done of the bone-deep and innate fear" - "about the bone -deep ..."
You've taken cross-species mating to a new level in this write, my friend.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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LOL! :) :) Thanx for the review and the suggestions, my friend -- so good to have you out there keeping an eye on me! ;) Glad to have you on board keeping up with Gregor and Celeste! :) Yvette
Comment from Mary-Kate
I have not had the pleasure of reading the previous chapters, but you have captured me and drawn me into this fantasy. I feel I am observing the interaction between Celeste and Joaquin. I am already wondering about her morning meeting with Gregor. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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I have not had the pleasure of reading the previous chapters, but you have captured me and drawn me into this fantasy. I feel I am observing the interaction between Celeste and Joaquin. I am already wondering about her morning meeting with Gregor. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Thanx so much for stopping in and taking the time to read this one, Mary-Kate -- you are so very much appreciated, my lady!! ;) :) I do hope that you have the time to go back and read about their morning encounter and learn a bit more about each of them.... it's going to be a wonderful adventure!! ;) :) Thank you so very much for these lovely stars, and I look forward to having you on board for future chapters! ;) Have a great week out there and take care! ;) Yvette :)
Comment from Rikki66
First I must say that I will have to read the earlier chapters. I always picture woodland fairy's as petit and werewolves as extra-large. The story is enthralling as well as enchanting. I will read the others and look forward to the next.
Rikki
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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First I must say that I will have to read the earlier chapters. I always picture woodland fairy's as petit and werewolves as extra-large. The story is enthralling as well as enchanting. I will read the others and look forward to the next.
Rikki
Comment Written 17-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Thanx so much for stopping in and taking the time to read this one, Rikki -- so very much appreciated!! ;) :) I do hope you find the time to go back and I look forward to having you on board for future chapters, sir! ;) Have a great week -- Yvette :)
Comment from estory
The writing here has lots of personality and a bit of polish; very intriguing. What I liked about it was the surreal atmosphere, and the emotions turning inside out, roiling around in this fairy romp. We have all these sexual attractions heaving through the characters like an undercurrent, just under the surface of the dancing, carefree action. Sharp descriptions place us in the scene here, and the lively narrative draws us into the story. estory
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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The writing here has lots of personality and a bit of polish; very intriguing. What I liked about it was the surreal atmosphere, and the emotions turning inside out, roiling around in this fairy romp. We have all these sexual attractions heaving through the characters like an undercurrent, just under the surface of the dancing, carefree action. Sharp descriptions place us in the scene here, and the lively narrative draws us into the story. estory
Comment Written 17-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Thanx so much for stopping in and taking the time to read this one, E -- so very much appreciated!! ;) :) Look forward to having you on board for future chapters! ;) Have a great week -- Yvette :)
