Unhidden Heart
Free Verse Assignment from FS Class24 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
I went and read the The River " by Edgar Allen Poe ..in the first stanza the poet compares the the crystal clear flowing river to the purity , youthful innocence of a young girl...and her natural beauty glows like the river in the bright sunlight.
In the second stanza edgar writes that the girl compares her lover to the trembling waters/ waves of the river because that is how he acts when he is under her gaze...he trembles.
I think you your take is egregious .. you wrote three Stanze ..the first two speak of the virtues of this fair lass whose beauty, purity and innocence have capture the poet's heart ..her lover believes that even the river has been enchanted by her.
Your third stanza is beautiful ...I prefer this over Edgar's ..shorter , cryptic version...
He trembles as her gazes /her soul searching beam falls upon her him ..search for the honest man in me .
I love this last line...
...cause it's direct / crystal clear .. it has more effect /impact on me cause I'm not great at interpreting poems.
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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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I went and read the The River " by Edgar Allen Poe ..in the first stanza the poet compares the the crystal clear flowing river to the purity , youthful innocence of a young girl...and her natural beauty glows like the river in the bright sunlight.
In the second stanza edgar writes that the girl compares her lover to the trembling waters/ waves of the river because that is how he acts when he is under her gaze...he trembles.
I think you your take is egregious .. you wrote three Stanze ..the first two speak of the virtues of this fair lass whose beauty, purity and innocence have capture the poet's heart ..her lover believes that even the river has been enchanted by her.
Your third stanza is beautiful ...I prefer this over Edgar's ..shorter , cryptic version...
He trembles as her gazes /her soul searching beam falls upon her him ..search for the honest man in me .
I love this last line...
...cause it's direct / crystal clear .. it has more effect /impact on me cause I'm not great at interpreting poems.
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Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Franca, what a lovely review and I can see that you got every point I meant to make. The River is a lovely poem (that is why I chose it) and I am happy that you liked that third stanza. Thank you so much!
Melissa
Comment from juliaSjames
You've done really well with your take on the original, Melissa. Your version flows beautifully.
Thanks for sharing and good luck with the class
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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You've done really well with your take on the original, Melissa. Your version flows beautifully.
Thanks for sharing and good luck with the class
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 18-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
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Thank you very much Julia. I am delighted you liked it!!
Melissa
Comment from Drew Delaney
It truly is a well written free-verse poem and the picture you chose fits perfectly. I actually love this writing. The images are clear to the eye and fills the imagination of purity and love. Nice job!
Drew
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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It truly is a well written free-verse poem and the picture you chose fits perfectly. I actually love this writing. The images are clear to the eye and fills the imagination of purity and love. Nice job!
Drew
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2020
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Hi Drew... I am delighted you liked this verse. Thanks so much.
Melissa
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Hi Drew... I am delighted you liked this verse. Thanks so much.
Melissa
Comment from Dawn Munro
I was composing my review already (in my head) and behold a story began to take shape and I realized not knowing who Alberto's daughter was, was becoming a moot point... ð???
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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I was composing my review already (in my head) and behold a story began to take shape and I realized not knowing who Alberto's daughter was, was becoming a moot point... ð???
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Great review, Dawn. I appreciate it :). !!!
Melissa
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It was my pleasure,Melissa.
Comment from royowen
Well done Melissa, I've taken classes in poetry, but I have written a few free verse, but it's hard to get rhythm an rhyme out of my head, but I know it's easier for a serial rhymer to write free verse thank vice versa. So well done Melissa, super write, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Well done Melissa, I've taken classes in poetry, but I have written a few free verse, but it's hard to get rhythm an rhyme out of my head, but I know it's easier for a serial rhymer to write free verse thank vice versa. So well done Melissa, super write, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Hello Roy. I am glad you liked this free verse from our class assignment. It is a good exercise to gain inspiration and get ideas. Thanks for your comments on Unhidden Heart.... I appreciate it so much! :)
Melissa
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Well done
Comment from damommy
I feel like I'm repeating myself since I heard your poem in class yesterday. I love the strong imagery you've created, and the picture you chose is perfect. It seems this young lady will settle for nothing less than an honest man.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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I feel like I'm repeating myself since I heard your poem in class yesterday. I love the strong imagery you've created, and the picture you chose is perfect. It seems this young lady will settle for nothing less than an honest man.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Hello Yvonne. I am glad you liked this free verse from our class assignment. It is a good type of exercise to gain inspiration and get ideas. Thanks for your comments on Unhidden Heart.... I appreciate it so much! :)
Melissa
Comment from Therese Caron
This is a beauty and full of gorgeous metaphors. Lovely words and imagery. The picture is stunning. I love the lines about even the waves worship her. Have to give you a 6 on this one!
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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This is a beauty and full of gorgeous metaphors. Lovely words and imagery. The picture is stunning. I love the lines about even the waves worship her. Have to give you a 6 on this one!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Hello Terry. I am glad you liked this free verse from our class assignment. It is a good exercise to gain inspiration and get ideas. Thanks for your comments on Unhidden Heart.... I appreciate it so much! :)
Melissa
Comment from lauralumummu
Well, I am impressed. This is beautiful with a lovely flow. I love the picture and your writ was a joy to read. I like this one her soul searching beam. All the best, Laura.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Well, I am impressed. This is beautiful with a lovely flow. I love the picture and your writ was a joy to read. I like this one her soul searching beam. All the best, Laura.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Hello Laura. I am glad you liked this free verse from our class assignment. It is a good exercise to gain inspiration and get ideas. Thanks for your comments on Unhidden Heart.... I appreciate it so much! :)
Melissa
Comment from Mistydawn
What a beautifully written poem. A story in itself. It's well-written, interesting. Your great word choice paints a vivid picture in the reader's mind. How he feels for her, adores every ounce of her being. It takes the reader back to their first love, the innocence of it all. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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What a beautifully written poem. A story in itself. It's well-written, interesting. Your great word choice paints a vivid picture in the reader's mind. How he feels for her, adores every ounce of her being. It takes the reader back to their first love, the innocence of it all. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Hello Misty. I am glad you liked this free verse from our class assignment. It is a good exercise to gain inspiration and get ideas. Thanks for your comments on Unhidden Heart.... I appreciate it so much! :)
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
This certainly made an interesting assignment. Your work in creating free verse from Poe's poem is excellent. You create a magic spell as you describe how the river is pure as the heart of Alberto's daughter. Even the waves worship her. The narrator really seems to be under the river's spell, and it brings out the best in him. Beautifully worded. The call of the river really comes through in your interpretation. judi
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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This certainly made an interesting assignment. Your work in creating free verse from Poe's poem is excellent. You create a magic spell as you describe how the river is pure as the heart of Alberto's daughter. Even the waves worship her. The narrator really seems to be under the river's spell, and it brings out the best in him. Beautifully worded. The call of the river really comes through in your interpretation. judi
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Hello Judi . I am glad you liked this free verse from our class assignment. It is a good exercise to gain inspiration and get ideas. Thanks for your comments on Unhidden Heart.... I appreciate it so much! :)
Melissa
