Awaiting Liberation
The fleeting beauty of Winter's prison...37 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This5-7-5, Awaiting Liberation, has the right set up and observes that th3 crystal casing has wrapped the slumbering lumber and keeps it on ice until they're sprung.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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This5-7-5, Awaiting Liberation, has the right set up and observes that th3 crystal casing has wrapped the slumbering lumber and keeps it on ice until they're sprung.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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Thanx for stopping in on this shortie, Bill -- always good to hear from you! ;) :) Yvette
Comment from susand3022
Ummmm... YOU'RE WAITING??? HELLO!!! LOL, That would be me that's waiting for the "Get Out of Icy Jail Free" card! I love the image... tomorrow... or is it tonight?... nope, tomorrow, we're on to look a bit like that... UGH! so not looking forward! (shiver, shiver) Send blankets and hot cocoa with little marshmallows! :)
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Ummmm... YOU'RE WAITING??? HELLO!!! LOL, That would be me that's waiting for the "Get Out of Icy Jail Free" card! I love the image... tomorrow... or is it tonight?... nope, tomorrow, we're on to look a bit like that... UGH! so not looking forward! (shiver, shiver) Send blankets and hot cocoa with little marshmallows! :)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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LOL!! Blankets and lots and lots of warm beverages of various kinds and strengths... LOL! ;) ) Thanx for stopping in on this one, my lady -- take care!! ;) Yvette
Comment from Bichon
I really like how you have described spring as a rescue. You have used very detailed language and painted an excellent scene to get lost in! Great job!
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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I really like how you have described spring as a rescue. You have used very detailed language and painted an excellent scene to get lost in! Great job!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Pllleeeeaaaseee just bring in the warmer weather and sunshine for longer hours - today's the first day it's been here since Tuesday and I'm tired of the cold, gray, rainy...yuck! ;) :) Thanx for your review, Beautiful - have an awesome week out there, my friend! ;) Yvette
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
We are indeed awaiting liberation. I think that for us, that liberation may not come until April. We've had it a bit mild, but, the cold is on its way. I like this and the descriptive wording you've used. I enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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We are indeed awaiting liberation. I think that for us, that liberation may not come until April. We've had it a bit mild, but, the cold is on its way. I like this and the descriptive wording you've used. I enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Pllleeeeaaaseee just bring in the warmer weather and sunshine for longer hours - today's the first day it's been here since Tuesday and I'm tired of the cold, gray, rainy...yuck! ;) :) Thanx for your review, Jeffrey - have an awesome week out there, my friend! ;) Yvette
Comment from Mark D. R.
Yvette,
Of course I try to emulate your short verse style. But, I try to avoid capitalization or punctuation whenever possible, with the exception of the occasional wiggle mark to highlight my attempt at the Satori ending.
Since you chose to capitalize your first word (I consider this a complete thought, with our without a punctuation mark), then why not add a period after the third line? IMHO... my reading of your ending two lines is a complete thought too.
Mark
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Yvette,
Of course I try to emulate your short verse style. But, I try to avoid capitalization or punctuation whenever possible, with the exception of the occasional wiggle mark to highlight my attempt at the Satori ending.
Since you chose to capitalize your first word (I consider this a complete thought, with our without a punctuation mark), then why not add a period after the third line? IMHO... my reading of your ending two lines is a complete thought too.
Mark
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Thanx so much for you HO on this one, Mark... I do so appreciate your reviews and learned comments! ;) I'll just be glad when Spring makes its official appearance - lol! ;) :) Take care out there and have a great week
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a short, straightforward poem about the changing of the seasons. It is pithy and well written. The picture is a fitting complement. I enjoyed reading this poem.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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This is a short, straightforward poem about the changing of the seasons. It is pithy and well written. The picture is a fitting complement. I enjoyed reading this poem.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
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Please bring on the warm weather!! ;) :) LOL! Thanx for your review on this short one, Susan -- so good of you stop by for a 'short' visit! ;) :) Yvette
Comment from lyenochka
Well said! We don't have long winters here but we do take note because snow isn't always expected in our winters. Great title and metaphor for the winter-imprisoned world waiting for Spring's new growth.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Well said! We don't have long winters here but we do take note because snow isn't always expected in our winters. Great title and metaphor for the winter-imprisoned world waiting for Spring's new growth.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Thanx for your review on this one, Helen -- Winter is number four in my list of favorite seasons.... can you tell?! LOL! :) ;) Take care and stay warm! ;) Yvette
Comment from kahpot
This is a wonderful poem your words and the artwork took me away from the many fires we have (down under), I love the thoughts and promising feeling it brings, as always an excellently presented work ****kahpot
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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This is a wonderful poem your words and the artwork took me away from the many fires we have (down under), I love the thoughts and promising feeling it brings, as always an excellently presented work ****kahpot
Comment Written 15-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Hey there, sir -- long time no hear!! ;) So good to see your name again!! ;) ;) Thanx for your review on this one -- Winter is number four in my list of favorite seasons.... can you tell?! LOL! :) ;) Take care and enjoy your warm sunshine down there! ;) Yvette
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Awaiting Liberation", is short, succinct and very much to the point. With well-chosen words, this talented poet has told it as it is. I look forward to seeing your next post
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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"Awaiting Liberation", is short, succinct and very much to the point. With well-chosen words, this talented poet has told it as it is. I look forward to seeing your next post
Comment Written 15-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Thanx for your review on this one, Duchess -- Winter is number four in my list of favorite seasons.... can you tell?! LOL! :) ;) Take care and stay warm! ;) Yvette
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Yvette,
You're very welcome. Winter beats the horrible heat here hands down. LOL.
the Duchess :)))
Comment from Coco Jane
Neat imagery here. "Rescue" is an interesting notion. I think of it more as a release, but rescue makes sense.
Personally I like the snow because I enjoy skiing. But indeed, many feel trapped by winter. Your note, "The fleeting beauty of Winter's prison..." is poetic itself but does not really introduce the idea of the poem. Just something to think about. I dislike having to insert those notes!
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Neat imagery here. "Rescue" is an interesting notion. I think of it more as a release, but rescue makes sense.
Personally I like the snow because I enjoy skiing. But indeed, many feel trapped by winter. Your note, "The fleeting beauty of Winter's prison..." is poetic itself but does not really introduce the idea of the poem. Just something to think about. I dislike having to insert those notes!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
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Rescue is the perfect notion -- I need to be saved from the drab and cold of these months - LOL! ;) Thanx for your review on this one, Coco -- Winter is number four in my list of favorite seasons.... can you tell?! LOL! :) ;) Take care and stay warm! ;) Yvette
