My Offering
Jesus My Savior has given His all; I give Him my heart.41 total reviews
Comment from dmt1967
This poem is full of hope. I liked the last sentence, 'you bought my life, at the greatest cost, and nothing I offer you ever is lost.' Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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This poem is full of hope. I liked the last sentence, 'you bought my life, at the greatest cost, and nothing I offer you ever is lost.' Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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Thank you for your beautiful review. I think that's my favorite line, also!
Comment from padumachitta
hi
a good entry for the faith contest. You have used the word in a Christian definition and the poem reflects that and stays on topic.
I am never one for notes that are not actually to do with the peom. Just MHO: they tend to lessen the impact of the poetry. Therefore I try not to read them: just my thought on this.
The poem stands alone and quite ell without the addition..:-)
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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hi
a good entry for the faith contest. You have used the word in a Christian definition and the poem reflects that and stays on topic.
I am never one for notes that are not actually to do with the peom. Just MHO: they tend to lessen the impact of the poetry. Therefore I try not to read them: just my thought on this.
The poem stands alone and quite ell without the addition..:-)
Comment Written 15-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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Hello, Thank you for your honest review and excellent rating. I respect your opinion about the notes, however they are relevant to the poem in a Christian context and indeed form the basis of many of the things I profess in it; they're a kind of lens through which I process my experience. But I am glad the poem made sense to you anyway. Best wishes. - Mary Kay
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Fair enough. I just think the poem is strong enough without the notes. That's a compliment, by the way. Your poem was a great lens.
I admit my own view here 'that notes aren't another story or further reading. Notes are about, perhaps a word that is colloquial or a bit of info about style'
Personally I very rarely read the notes, especially if I notice quotes from other sorces. I truly just want the words from the author.
I am not arguing, for you have your own good reasons, only explaining my point as a writer and (often) a creative writer coach.
May you walk in peace,
padumachitta
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Thank you for the compliment, padumachitta, and for your further explanation. Peace to you, also! - Mary Kay
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:-)
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written faith poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words with very good scriptures to back up what you have written. Thank you for sharing. Best wishes in the contest. May God bless you! Teri
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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This is a very well written faith poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words with very good scriptures to back up what you have written. Thank you for sharing. Best wishes in the contest. May God bless you! Teri
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Thank you very much for your excellent review, Teri! I appreciate everything you wrote, and also that you read the scriptures and understood their connection to my poem. It's always awesome to meet others who share faith in Christ. May God bless you too! - Mary Kay
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Mary Kay. You have quoted one of my favorites by Matthew. Your poem is nicely worded and rhymed. The last stanza is particularly nicely done. Marilyn
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Hi Mary Kay. You have quoted one of my favorites by Matthew. Your poem is nicely worded and rhymed. The last stanza is particularly nicely done. Marilyn
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Thank you very much, Marilyn. Jesus really showed many of us his compassion with that verse, knowing how weary we are: tired of living up to others' expectations, exhausted from following impossible rules, weary from the difficulties and tests of life, or just plain tired. His rest is spiritual, based on faith; the comfort of His Presence. I appreciate your kind and thoughtful review of my poem.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Faith Poetry contest.
This spiritual verse tells of overcoming hardships with faith.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the Faith Poetry contest.
This spiritual verse tells of overcoming hardships with faith.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Thank you very much, Sharon, for your excellent review!
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Mary Kay. It's a well written poem for construction but I really like the content a lot. You've included enough about the struggle believers have in dealing with this world and the demands of the spiritual world. It's very nice and I wish you well in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Hello Mary Kay. It's a well written poem for construction but I really like the content a lot. You've included enough about the struggle believers have in dealing with this world and the demands of the spiritual world. It's very nice and I wish you well in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Thank you, Robert, for your kind and thoughtful review of my poem. I deeply appreciate it.
Comment from royowen
I like the way you have used the scriptures. We need to maintain a contrite heart in our bosom, and dependant spirit, otherwise we lose the sight of our neediness, our weaknesses are ever before our eyes, but not in a downcast way, but with raised eyes to gaze on He who is our sustenance. Beautifully written in aabb rhymed quatrains, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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I like the way you have used the scriptures. We need to maintain a contrite heart in our bosom, and dependant spirit, otherwise we lose the sight of our neediness, our weaknesses are ever before our eyes, but not in a downcast way, but with raised eyes to gaze on He who is our sustenance. Beautifully written in aabb rhymed quatrains, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Thank you for your beautiful review of my poem, and especially for your expression of spiritual insight and understanding. God bless you. - Mary Kay
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Well done
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Looking at 8 quatrains in aabb rhyme. Great use of inserted questions to answer with further development such as: From where comes the wind that lashes my feet?
Could it spring from my own soul, my faith incomplete?
That makes it a thinking poem. Nice faith entry.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Looking at 8 quatrains in aabb rhyme. Great use of inserted questions to answer with further development such as: From where comes the wind that lashes my feet?
Could it spring from my own soul, my faith incomplete?
That makes it a thinking poem. Nice faith entry.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Thank you very much for your great review and analysis. I appreciate your thoughts!
Comment from Tina Crute
What a sweet song of surrender to God, this is!
"You're there each time I take a hit," echoes the consistent theme in your poem, of how Gods always there when we need Him. Great writing!
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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What a sweet song of surrender to God, this is!
"You're there each time I take a hit," echoes the consistent theme in your poem, of how Gods always there when we need Him. Great writing!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Thank you, Tina, for your excellent review of my poem, and for understanding the core message, which is not doubt, but faith.
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I loved it!
Tina
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Thank you! :-)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written spiritual faith poem. Jesus Christ gives us everything He had. The only thing He asks from us is our heart and faith. He will keep us safe no matter what.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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A very well-written spiritual faith poem. Jesus Christ gives us everything He had. The only thing He asks from us is our heart and faith. He will keep us safe no matter what.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Thank you, Sandra, for your beautiful review. I appreciate all that you wrote.
