Hawk Soars
Hunter and hunted - nature's ploys41 total reviews
Comment from heavenempress
hi, excellent piece of work. I liked the idea behind the poem and how you managed to come up with it. Simple but powerful, I liked it. Keep it up and I highly recommend your work to others. Nice image and presentation.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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hi, excellent piece of work. I liked the idea behind the poem and how you managed to come up with it. Simple but powerful, I liked it. Keep it up and I highly recommend your work to others. Nice image and presentation.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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Heavenempress, I thank you for the validation and support.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a well written poem. It paints a picture of a hunter concentrating on a rabbit while the bird has a lucky escape. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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This is a well written poem. It paints a picture of a hunter concentrating on a rabbit while the bird has a lucky escape. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of all of your syllables in this nature 5-7-5.
Sometimes when I am enjoying such a scene, I don't think about the fact that the creatures I'm watching are looking for supper!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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You have made excellent use of all of your syllables in this nature 5-7-5.
Sometimes when I am enjoying such a scene, I don't think about the fact that the creatures I'm watching are looking for supper!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 5-7-5 you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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This is a very well written 5-7-5 you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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Teri, thanks
Comment from Janet Foor
Great picture to convey your message of the hunter and the hunted in this terrific haiku. Beautiful image of the hawk as it flew over the field.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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Great picture to convey your message of the hunter and the hunted in this terrific haiku. Beautiful image of the hawk as it flew over the field.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
blessings
Janet
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
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Janet, I appreciate your validation.
Comment from Joan E.
We see soaring hawks in the canyons around us--we are never able to see what they are hunting. Your haiku helped to answer that question. Your artwork selection was perfect and I enjoyed your alliteration of "h's". Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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We see soaring hawks in the canyons around us--we are never able to see what they are hunting. Your haiku helped to answer that question. Your artwork selection was perfect and I enjoyed your alliteration of "h's". Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Joan it must be a delight to witness. Thanks for the review.
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Joan it must be a delight to witness. Thanks for the review.
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No hawks at the moment--but many doves, bluejays and grosbeaks at our bird feeder, looking out at the Pacific! Have a healthful and productive 2020- Joa
Comment from estory
The balance is there, the nature image is there, and I think you did a good job of articulating this struggle between predator and prey in this haiku piece. Very oriental feel, nicely done. I liked the alliterations for musical element. estory
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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The balance is there, the nature image is there, and I think you did a good job of articulating this struggle between predator and prey in this haiku piece. Very oriental feel, nicely done. I liked the alliterations for musical element. estory
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Smiling back, thank yoiu...
Comment from padumachitta
Hi
A strong photo to go with a picture of words for the contest.
I did stumble a bit on hinder, but understand you wanted the alliteration of the Hs
good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Hi
A strong photo to go with a picture of words for the contest.
I did stumble a bit on hinder, but understand you wanted the alliteration of the Hs
good luck in the contest
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Thanks for your review and comments.
Comment from dragonpoet
Well matches words and picture for this haiku. I hope the rabbit gets away. Though it does seem improbable.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Well matches words and picture for this haiku. I hope the rabbit gets away. Though it does seem improbable.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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Joan, thank you for the validation and good wishes.
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Don't mention it, JLR
Joan
Comment from Alchera
The syllables counting in the first line is wrong because "soars" is one syllable not two so there are four syllables in all. The rest of the haiku narrative story lined content is good and acceptable.
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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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The syllables counting in the first line is wrong because "soars" is one syllable not two so there are four syllables in all. The rest of the haiku narrative story lined content is good and acceptable.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
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THANKS
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I was sorry and surprised that no one else had notice it! Have a nice day JLK
