The Pitches
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Peril Returns"Backgound to support Pez and Pallas
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Comment from Ulla
Hi Bill, this Peril seems to be a pain in the backside. Can't we just get rid of him? I feel for Pez and I want him all the best. What can you do about that? I love the story. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Hi Bill, this Peril seems to be a pain in the backside. Can't we just get rid of him? I feel for Pez and I want him all the best. What can you do about that? I love the story. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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I?ll give Peril a decade to get his act together.
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Oh dear!!!
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That gives him about three chapters.
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Ach well, alright then!
Comment from Gail Denham
Interesting story for sure - I loved the part about the library fines being taken away in a Brinks truck. too funny - hope it isn't that bad - that's why I buy all my books (used) - I can't read them in time anyway.
good job.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Interesting story for sure - I loved the part about the library fines being taken away in a Brinks truck. too funny - hope it isn't that bad - that's why I buy all my books (used) - I can't read them in time anyway.
good job.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Thanks, Gail.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Poor, Pez. Can't we just have Peril offed and be done with the worthless git?! ;) At least Pez included his GED studying in his list of things to do...! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Poor, Pez. Can't we just have Peril offed and be done with the worthless git?! ;) At least Pez included his GED studying in his list of things to do...! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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The nemesis makes the plot work. I think Peril will be around corners another decade.
Comment from nomi338
don't you just hate it when guys who are supposed to be stiffs, refuse to become stiffs and remain so. It is awkward as hell when they show up from out if the blue and mess your life up with their surprise visits. People who are after then will assume that you were in on their initial disappearance and will then come after you. Man, what a bummer.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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don't you just hate it when guys who are supposed to be stiffs, refuse to become stiffs and remain so. It is awkward as hell when they show up from out if the blue and mess your life up with their surprise visits. People who are after then will assume that you were in on their initial disappearance and will then come after you. Man, what a bummer.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Peril must be the proverbial bad penny.
Comment from Gloria ....
Such great truth in that line, The big goys dun't never dah da time -- jesd da crime. Pity, that is.
Ha, I imagine those book fine fees add to a pretty dollar. lol
Excellent write and using the Iran-Contra Affair is great way to keep track of time and also draw in current events that are putting their paws on Pez.
Most enjoyable read.
Gloria
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Such great truth in that line, The big goys dun't never dah da time -- jesd da crime. Pity, that is.
Ha, I imagine those book fine fees add to a pretty dollar. lol
Excellent write and using the Iran-Contra Affair is great way to keep track of time and also draw in current events that are putting their paws on Pez.
Most enjoyable read.
Gloria
Comment Written 11-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Thank you, Gloria, for the kind review. Bill
Comment from lyenochka
Well, if he's going to pass that GED, he'll have to know that Miami is in Florida. Hope he can get away from his dad real fast! He does seem to have more heart than his dad.
"Samuel's won't get that option." (Samuel's?) You probably don't need the apostrophe 's' here.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Well, if he's going to pass that GED, he'll have to know that Miami is in Florida. Hope he can get away from his dad real fast! He does seem to have more heart than his dad.
"Samuel's won't get that option." (Samuel's?) You probably don't need the apostrophe 's' here.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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How did that thing sneak in there?
Comment from susand3022
Well, Peril made it out alive eh, Bill? I guess you can't keep a good man down... or a bad one either. Tee hee hee... I love that you have Pez getting his GED... shows he's got half a head on his shoulders. :)
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Well, Peril made it out alive eh, Bill? I guess you can't keep a good man down... or a bad one either. Tee hee hee... I love that you have Pez getting his GED... shows he's got half a head on his shoulders. :)
Comment Written 11-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Thanks, Susan. Looks like some feelings are going to get hurt.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Poor Pez, he does try so hard to get better, and then something comes along to knock him back, this time is rotten father. Who needs parents like that? You're doing a great job giving us the Pez's growing up years. Well done, Bill. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Poor Pez, he does try so hard to get better, and then something comes along to knock him back, this time is rotten father. Who needs parents like that? You're doing a great job giving us the Pez's growing up years. Well done, Bill. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 11-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Thank you, Sandra, for the encouraging review. Bill
Comment from phill doran
Hello again Bill
Once more, very, very good. The phonetics of the dialogue really work well. Although I can assume what "GED" means - some sort of school test - perhaps you could add something in your notes to explain more accurately (for the non-Americans who read you). Just a thought.
Make the most of your weekend.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Hello again Bill
Once more, very, very good. The phonetics of the dialogue really work well. Although I can assume what "GED" means - some sort of school test - perhaps you could add something in your notes to explain more accurately (for the non-Americans who read you). Just a thought.
Make the most of your weekend.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 11-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Thanks, Phil, for the encouraging review. I?ve added GED = General Equivalency Diploma to the notes.
Comment from Mistydawn
Poor guy. As if he doesn't have enough on his plate, his dad comes back and gets him tangled up in his mess. Think the kid would've been better if he was a crock's dinner. It's well-written, very interesting. Your dialogue seems realistic and your characters come to life.
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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Poor guy. As if he doesn't have enough on his plate, his dad comes back and gets him tangled up in his mess. Think the kid would've been better if he was a crock's dinner. It's well-written, very interesting. Your dialogue seems realistic and your characters come to life.
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Comment Written 10-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much, Mistydawn.
