Comment from Pantygynt

Good

The rules for this contest call for a free verse of twenty lines maximum. Since this consists of twenty-one lines you will have wasted your money if you do not cut it to within the required length. I would also advise some use of poetic devices as at present this looks like prose divided into lines

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020

Thanks, I will edit.

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

Your story a page in the life story of the universe with second chances :"
Now as I look back over our 35 years, I'm
So glad my heart jumped, and the little voice
Was wrong, there is lasting love at first sight" Good luck with the contest

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020

Thanks for your read and comment.

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

Office jobs can bring either heartache or good breaks for the other person. If your married, it's usually a no, no status when being employed in an office. Sorry....but I'm glad you are blissfully happy.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020

I agree it is not the best way, but life decisions must be made. Thanks for the read and the comments.