The glimmer of ghosts
You will always be with me7 total reviews
Comment from Mackenzie Schmidt
Your poem the Glimmer of Ghosts was extremely well written your use of metaphor, simile, symbolism and really intensified the emotional imagery. the picture you choose helped with the theme as if you were personifying the fog and light of the moon.
I cant think of anything that should be changed!
Well Done!
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Your poem the Glimmer of Ghosts was extremely well written your use of metaphor, simile, symbolism and really intensified the emotional imagery. the picture you choose helped with the theme as if you were personifying the fog and light of the moon.
I cant think of anything that should be changed!
Well Done!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
Comment from Bill Pinder
I like this free verse with excellent words about dealing with ghosts from the past. "Blood congealing to Jell-O" is quite a vivid image.
That is another great expression, "in the cemetery of I am still alive."
Bill
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I like this free verse with excellent words about dealing with ghosts from the past. "Blood congealing to Jell-O" is quite a vivid image.
That is another great expression, "in the cemetery of I am still alive."
Bill
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the ghosts of the past often come back to haunt us and our minds cannot be set free from their spirit haunting our conscious mind.
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A very well-written poem about the ghosts of the past often come back to haunt us and our minds cannot be set free from their spirit haunting our conscious mind.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
Comment from dmt1967
This is a very haunting poem but I found it memorising as well. I enjoyed the way the poem flowed and came alive and I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing.
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This is a very haunting poem but I found it memorising as well. I enjoyed the way the poem flowed and came alive and I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
Comment from Ricky1024
"The Glimmer of Ghosts"
"I believe in Ghosts, I Do, I do, I do!.
Married one.
She died and left me with more than grief!
Thanks and well done.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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"The Glimmer of Ghosts"
"I believe in Ghosts, I Do, I do, I do!.
Married one.
She died and left me with more than grief!
Thanks and well done.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
Comment from LisaMay
Your title drew me, then I was left quite affected by the vivid imagery of your words and the emotions they evoked... dark, bleak, horrific... then it lightened up a bit in the last 3 lines, which I like very much:
"In daylight all saints shine.
In starlight, in moonlight
just the glimmer of ghosts. ".
Some comments:
"Ghosts are cold just deserts" (do you mean desserts, like pudding?)
"Thunder without lightening (lightning) or rain."
"Tares": I had to look up what this meant. Thank you for showing me a new word. I now know it is a certain type of weed, with a Biblical reference.
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Your title drew me, then I was left quite affected by the vivid imagery of your words and the emotions they evoked... dark, bleak, horrific... then it lightened up a bit in the last 3 lines, which I like very much:
"In daylight all saints shine.
In starlight, in moonlight
just the glimmer of ghosts. ".
Some comments:
"Ghosts are cold just deserts" (do you mean desserts, like pudding?)
"Thunder without lightening (lightning) or rain."
"Tares": I had to look up what this meant. Thank you for showing me a new word. I now know it is a certain type of weed, with a Biblical reference.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
Comment from A Little Bird
Congratulations on this heart-felt piece. Unrequited love is the worst feeling imaginable. Worse then a loved one dying (though I must admit I've been lucky in that direction; no-one that close to me has ever passed away).
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Congratulations on this heart-felt piece. Unrequited love is the worst feeling imaginable. Worse then a loved one dying (though I must admit I've been lucky in that direction; no-one that close to me has ever passed away).
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
