Punchinello
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Punchinello Chapter Six"Terror strikes the Texas town of Astatula. Can She
11 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
More of Punchinello's character: " Punchinello was well pleased with his classic and inventive hole-in-one." The reader is in on this one...good approach: "now his new target, a charismatic buttercup in Room 117, was a mere moment away." I am so encouraged in Cody's ADD. I identify so well: "Cody's mind drifted over to a squirrel he observed scurry down the trunk of an oak tree near the playground in pursuit of a fallen acorn." This gas the spirituality of my Bea the wee bear, nice to see. Moving right to the next ch. A+
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
  |
More of Punchinello's character: " Punchinello was well pleased with his classic and inventive hole-in-one." The reader is in on this one...good approach: "now his new target, a charismatic buttercup in Room 117, was a mere moment away." I am so encouraged in Cody's ADD. I identify so well: "Cody's mind drifted over to a squirrel he observed scurry down the trunk of an oak tree near the playground in pursuit of a fallen acorn." This gas the spirituality of my Bea the wee bear, nice to see. Moving right to the next ch. A+
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
-
Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Sankey
A great meandering chapter. Cody wandering off in his mind. Can see the big build up for Punchinello's next conquest. Good work again and no spags. Why do we need more words seeing this was written ages ago.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
|
A great meandering chapter. Cody wandering off in his mind. Can see the big build up for Punchinello's next conquest. Good work again and no spags. Why do we need more words seeing this was written ages ago.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
-
This is the final revision before I publish the book.
-
That was in reference to FS wanting me to say more (the ende bit)
Comment from Cindy Warren
This is all the more creepy because it's so realistic. It's easy to imagine Cody, the abuse victim, shielding himself. The man with the faucet down his throat and the creep who put him there give me the shivers, mostly because it feels too real.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
 |
This is all the more creepy because it's so realistic. It's easy to imagine Cody, the abuse victim, shielding himself. The man with the faucet down his throat and the creep who put him there give me the shivers, mostly because it feels too real.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
-
Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from susand3022
Hi Brett, This is my first experience with Cody, though I see from your blurb here, you've been writing him for a while now. He seems very well developed. I'm wondering about this golden ticket, but that could be from a previous chapter... I really should go back, it's still early in the book! :)
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
|
Hi Brett, This is my first experience with Cody, though I see from your blurb here, you've been writing him for a while now. He seems very well developed. I'm wondering about this golden ticket, but that could be from a previous chapter... I really should go back, it's still early in the book! :)
Comment Written 11-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
-
Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Brett, this is another well edited new chapter in the story. Poor seems to be constantly in danger and now the danger is lurking within the school halls. The security can't have been very good unless it's a person in the staff. Looking forward to what's next. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
|
Hi Brett, this is another well edited new chapter in the story. Poor seems to be constantly in danger and now the danger is lurking within the school halls. The security can't have been very good unless it's a person in the staff. Looking forward to what's next. Ulla:))
Comment Written 10-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
-
Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Elljae
kyphosis
kehua
More new words, I love it. Apparently the Punchinello character looks as bad as he is, perhaps that's why he is so horrible a person, maybe he was bullied terribly when he was younger, by classmates or family and he internalize his feelings to the point it bubbled over at some point to create the monster he has become, maybe.
I feel the story building to a climatic moment(s). I really like stories that feature layers of story into, on top of the main story of stories. This gets better and better with each chapter, I can't wait until Chapter 7.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
|
kyphosis
kehua
More new words, I love it. Apparently the Punchinello character looks as bad as he is, perhaps that's why he is so horrible a person, maybe he was bullied terribly when he was younger, by classmates or family and he internalize his feelings to the point it bubbled over at some point to create the monster he has become, maybe.
I feel the story building to a climatic moment(s). I really like stories that feature layers of story into, on top of the main story of stories. This gets better and better with each chapter, I can't wait until Chapter 7.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
-
Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Ricky1024
Interesting Chapter
From the current situation with Punchinello in the Basement with Beth...
To hiding around the Corner in Cody"s school.
Hmmm.
I'll wait...
Thanks and well again.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
|
Interesting Chapter
From the current situation with Punchinello in the Basement with Beth...
To hiding around the Corner in Cody"s school.
Hmmm.
I'll wait...
Thanks and well again.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
-
Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
So, I'm guessing I'm supposed to know who Earl Anthony Schroder is... last book? :/ And am I reading this right that Punchinello is in the school hallway...? That would not be possible with all the security around schools now, I don't think... :) :) Other than the gruesome beginning (know it's part of the 'Punchinello' motif), a good installment... and what jerks Cody is in class with... :) Yvette
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
|
So, I'm guessing I'm supposed to know who Earl Anthony Schroder is... last book? :/ And am I reading this right that Punchinello is in the school hallway...? That would not be possible with all the security around schools now, I don't think... :) :) Other than the gruesome beginning (know it's part of the 'Punchinello' motif), a good installment... and what jerks Cody is in class with... :) Yvette
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
-
Earl Anthony Schroder is Cody's biological father, although he never refers to him in that manner. When Cody speaks of him it is always Earl Anthony Schroder and in a very negative connotation. The reasons for this will come out as the story progresses. The "jerks" are typical students in any modern classroom, and kids can certainly be real jerks. Appreciate the review.
-
Cool! Mental notes made about the dad...
You know, I teach and have noticed a slow change in the students' attitudes toward each other with the rise of social media.... there's not much 'physical' bullying anymore - SO MUCH online where 'nobody' sees/hears....
Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Bill Pinder
I enjoyed this chapter with good descriptions of the main character and the monster planning an abduction. The story has a believable feel and good pace to keep interest.
Bill
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
|
I enjoyed this chapter with good descriptions of the main character and the monster planning an abduction. The story has a believable feel and good pace to keep interest.
Bill
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
-
Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from royowen
Poor old Cody has had to deal with his own cruel, twisted father, and now somebody even more sinister lies in the shadows, dreaming of inflicting himself on the world, somebody who deserves to be locked up forever, well aware he'll butprn in hell, well done Brett, good scribing, blessings Roy
Typo : Mrs. Alvarez noticed Cody star(r)ed out the window.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
|
Poor old Cody has had to deal with his own cruel, twisted father, and now somebody even more sinister lies in the shadows, dreaming of inflicting himself on the world, somebody who deserves to be locked up forever, well aware he'll butprn in hell, well done Brett, good scribing, blessings Roy
Typo : Mrs. Alvarez noticed Cody star(r)ed out the window.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
-
Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate your insights and the review.
-
Welcome
