Favorite Short Stories, Vol. 3
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "A Matter of Conscience"an eclectic fiction collection, old and new
11 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
I have no idea how this gem slipped by without me noticing, but yet. A story with a lot of subtle inferences sewn in carefully. The setting was clearly delineated, but not overly done, the characters so clear I could see them, and an unexpected ending.
Excellent entry into this contest and I wish you great luck with the Committee. :)
Gloria
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I have no idea how this gem slipped by without me noticing, but yet. A story with a lot of subtle inferences sewn in carefully. The setting was clearly delineated, but not overly done, the characters so clear I could see them, and an unexpected ending.
Excellent entry into this contest and I wish you great luck with the Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Dawn. Both wife AND husband need help. He seems to be an enabler. Hitting the dog should have been a clue that she was driving drunk. She is in trouble. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Hi Dawn. Both wife AND husband need help. He seems to be an enabler. Hitting the dog should have been a clue that she was driving drunk. She is in trouble. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 11-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Agreed. Thanks. :)
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is an interesting entry for the Flash Fiction Writing contest.
This story tells more by what it doesn't say than what it does.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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I think this is an interesting entry for the Flash Fiction Writing contest.
This story tells more by what it doesn't say than what it does.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Thanks very much.
Comment from royowen
Sheila could be in big, big, but she's got a reasonable husband, and he loves, even by choice. Sometimes it's hard to live with someone who keeps mucking up. But this time she's in big trouble, even with a policeman husband. Excellent surprise ending Dawn, great job, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Sheila could be in big, big, but she's got a reasonable husband, and he loves, even by choice. Sometimes it's hard to live with someone who keeps mucking up. But this time she's in big trouble, even with a policeman husband. Excellent surprise ending Dawn, great job, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Thank you very much, Roy. :)
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Bless you Dawn, Have you heard? Phyllis Stewart has passed! Roy
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Yes. I just heard today.
Comment from Miranda Langston
very good entry for the contest. there's only one thing i noticed as far as SPAGs go: The bartender put his rag down on the bar and started toward their table. Go mind your God damned business, Mark thought.
on my computer, all i see is the "s" in "started" before it melts into the word "go". maybe it would be a good idea to alter the font?
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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very good entry for the contest. there's only one thing i noticed as far as SPAGs go: The bartender put his rag down on the bar and started toward their table. Go mind your God damned business, Mark thought.
on my computer, all i see is the "s" in "started" before it melts into the word "go". maybe it would be a good idea to alter the font?
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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Thank you. I'm not sure what to say about what you are seeing on your screen -- that's a new one on me. (lol) The font is a common one I have used for over seven years and never heard it wasn't legible before...? But thank you for mentioning it! I will ask others if they're seeing anything unusual. It's fine on my computer. ??
"The bartender put his rag down on the bar and started toward their table. Go mind your God damned business, Mark thought."
Comment from Joan E.
You certainly captured the mixed emotions well and you added subtle clues to make the story more complicated, like Mark's being an "officer" and there having been prior accidents. Best wishes in the Flash Fiction contest- Joan
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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You certainly captured the mixed emotions well and you added subtle clues to make the story more complicated, like Mark's being an "officer" and there having been prior accidents. Best wishes in the Flash Fiction contest- Joan
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Thank you, Joan. :)
Comment from Ricky1024
A Matter of Conscious" is a 492 flash fiction Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with this and have a Blessed Night.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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A Matter of Conscious" is a 492 flash fiction Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with this and have a Blessed Night.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- now there's a heckuva situation.... and, yeah, rehab should have happened before now... :( A very well-written Flash, Dawn, that feeds the reader both emotions and background in a very short, engrossing span -- thanx for sharing and good luck! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Wow -- now there's a heckuva situation.... and, yeah, rehab should have happened before now... :( A very well-written Flash, Dawn, that feeds the reader both emotions and background in a very short, engrossing span -- thanx for sharing and good luck! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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I am sorry that you ended up reading this without being paid. I did not release it. ??? I intended to come back to earn the funny money to promote it, and when I did, I was surprised to see it was released.
Thanks so very much,Yvette!
Comment from Teri7
Dawn, This is a very interesting and well written Flash Fiction story you have penned for the writing contest. You used very good descriptive words and dialogue. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Dawn, This is a very interesting and well written Flash Fiction story you have penned for the writing contest. You used very good descriptive words and dialogue. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much, Teri! I didn't mean for it to be released without compensation -- I don't know how it happened!
Comment from Fonda Little
Sounds like the start of a great story! God bless you In Jesus's Almighty, All Powerful, Divine, Holy, Majestic Name, The Name Above All Names I pray, amen, Amen, AMEN!
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Sounds like the start of a great story! God bless you In Jesus's Almighty, All Powerful, Divine, Holy, Majestic Name, The Name Above All Names I pray, amen, Amen, AMEN!
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
