Our Returning Hero
a sonnet26 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for your family's sacrifice and your husband's service. You vividly captured the moment of his return, amplified by the fact that you greeted him with a new baby. I appreciate your conveying the emotions in this rhymed sonnet. Sighs- Joan
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Thank you for your family's sacrifice and your husband's service. You vividly captured the moment of his return, amplified by the fact that you greeted him with a new baby. I appreciate your conveying the emotions in this rhymed sonnet. Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Hi Joan. I appreciate your comments and kindness... It was a tough time and we became stronger or it. Thank you so much!!
Melissa
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I am glad you had precious experiences as a child and that this wartime challenge made your relationship with your husband stronger. Smiles- Joan
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa, it must be difficult to watch loved ones go, deployed in foreign lands they'd never otherwise see. Heat, dust and danger. And you have to just sit and wait for them to come back home. We don't have to deal with that in Canada. We aren't forced into the army or navy or air force. And I know there are some who want to go, policing for peace. They do their duty. But it doesn't make it any easier on those left behind.
I enjoyed your poem, reminded of those who risk their lives for us.
I like these lines the best,
"Each moment seemed to creep on sloth-like feet"
and,
"seemed to be devouring my face"
Cheers
Kimbob
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Hi Melissa, it must be difficult to watch loved ones go, deployed in foreign lands they'd never otherwise see. Heat, dust and danger. And you have to just sit and wait for them to come back home. We don't have to deal with that in Canada. We aren't forced into the army or navy or air force. And I know there are some who want to go, policing for peace. They do their duty. But it doesn't make it any easier on those left behind.
I enjoyed your poem, reminded of those who risk their lives for us.
I like these lines the best,
"Each moment seemed to creep on sloth-like feet"
and,
"seemed to be devouring my face"
Cheers
Kimbob
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Hello there KB... thanks for sharing your point of view and comments with me. I especially like it when you tell me which lines stood out to you. Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from poetwatch
Thank you Melissa. I happy your husband came home safely. My brother was over there also, got out and went back in because of 9-11. War is good only for the undertaker and the oil rich tycoons. Hope you and your husband are doing good and feeling fine this new year. This is a good sonnet. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Thank you Melissa. I happy your husband came home safely. My brother was over there also, got out and went back in because of 9-11. War is good only for the undertaker and the oil rich tycoons. Hope you and your husband are doing good and feeling fine this new year. This is a good sonnet. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Hello Jose!!! So good to hear from you... I also hope that you enjoyed a Happy New Year. Thanks so much for the review on the sonnet. All is well here.
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, how hard those years must have been for you! You described it well - the anticipation, the waiting and the heat of the day while waiting for the reunion. And your son is also serving. Thanks to your dedicated family for serving our country!
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Oh, how hard those years must have been for you! You described it well - the anticipation, the waiting and the heat of the day while waiting for the reunion. And your son is also serving. Thanks to your dedicated family for serving our country!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Hi Helen. Thank you for our kind words.
Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
You really write up a nice sonnet, Melissa, and this one is no exception. The tone and mixed emotions of excitement and relief are well illustrated in fine metre and rhyme.
A real pleasure to read and review. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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You really write up a nice sonnet, Melissa, and this one is no exception. The tone and mixed emotions of excitement and relief are well illustrated in fine metre and rhyme.
A real pleasure to read and review. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Thank you Gloria. It was hard to have him gone on deployment. Now, our oldest son is an Army officer and we are keeping an eye out on Iran!! Ugh! I really appreciate your comments and stars!!
Melissa
Comment from country ranch writer
A beautiful home coming for you and your. So happy it was a delightful. Reunion. Some are not so lucky and only have heart break.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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A beautiful home coming for you and your. So happy it was a delightful. Reunion. Some are not so lucky and only have heart break.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Hi Barbara. Thanks so much for our thoughts and comments!!
Melissa
Comment from lauralumummu
How beautiful, I got shivers reading this. I am so glad he came home to you and your family. What do you think of the new troops going to the middle east, 3000? This must be on your husband's mind. We live in Canada and hope and pray things won't escalate. Thank you for sharing this, Happy New Year, Laura.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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How beautiful, I got shivers reading this. I am so glad he came home to you and your family. What do you think of the new troops going to the middle east, 3000? This must be on your husband's mind. We live in Canada and hope and pray things won't escalate. Thank you for sharing this, Happy New Year, Laura.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Hello Laura... thanks so much for your lovely review of my sonnet. Hubby has retired from the Army, but our son is active duty and we always wonder how world events will effect him. Thank you for your lovely thoughts and review!!!
Melissa
Comment from Barbaraj1
This is a heartwarming poem. I am so glad he is back safely. War is
so hard on everyone. I wish there was peace in the world. But it almost seems hopeless.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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This is a heartwarming poem. I am so glad he is back safely. War is
so hard on everyone. I wish there was peace in the world. But it almost seems hopeless.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Thank you Barbara. I am grateful you took a moment to comment!
Melissa
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Melissa!
I don't know how I nearly missed your exceptionally well-crafted sonnet!
Too many antibiotics, I suspect!
Your sonnet is heartfelt and moving.
I can only attempt to imagine the emotions that you were experiencing as you and your husband were reunited...
If I may make two minor suggestions for the following two lines:
I kissed our nine month old, (nine-month-old,) our first-born son; (,) (no need for a semi-colon as what follows is not an independent clause
and gladly spurned dark thoughts of war and death.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Hello Melissa!
I don't know how I nearly missed your exceptionally well-crafted sonnet!
Too many antibiotics, I suspect!
Your sonnet is heartfelt and moving.
I can only attempt to imagine the emotions that you were experiencing as you and your husband were reunited...
If I may make two minor suggestions for the following two lines:
I kissed our nine month old, (nine-month-old,) our first-born son; (,) (no need for a semi-colon as what follows is not an independent clause
and gladly spurned dark thoughts of war and death.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Thanks so much Diane. I am off in a rush to do the editing ;)
Melissa
Comment from Therese Caron
Beautiful trIbute to your husband, and to all returning warriors. This is a warm, lovely sonnet. So romantic - devouring my face. Wonderfully written sonnet, perfect words used. Heartwarming picture. Tell your husband thank you for his brave service!!
Terry C.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Beautiful trIbute to your husband, and to all returning warriors. This is a warm, lovely sonnet. So romantic - devouring my face. Wonderfully written sonnet, perfect words used. Heartwarming picture. Tell your husband thank you for his brave service!!
Terry C.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Hello Terry. I will relay your message to Hubby... thanks for the well wishes and the warm comments.
Melissa
