Windmills Of Your Mind
A twenty line poem...5 total reviews
Comment from May 1
This poem is so wonderfully written that I am left in awe. Its tone is so perfect and enjoyable to read. It feels as if you have chosen just the right vocabulary to use at just the right time. All in all, it was a true pleasure reading this poem.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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This poem is so wonderfully written that I am left in awe. Its tone is so perfect and enjoyable to read. It feels as if you have chosen just the right vocabulary to use at just the right time. All in all, it was a true pleasure reading this poem.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Thank you for your sincere compliment! It is absolutely one of the favorites in my portfolio! It means so much to me that you appreciate! xoxo
Comment from shaffer40
No question, this is exceptional--well written and creative, lovely prose, with great imagery. Probably a win.
I noticed one thing you might consider:
I think the rhythm would be better if "so" were removed:
To show how time has made you blind.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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No question, this is exceptional--well written and creative, lovely prose, with great imagery. Probably a win.
I noticed one thing you might consider:
I think the rhythm would be better if "so" were removed:
To show how time has made you blind.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much! Every line is 9 syllables; therefore if i take it out, it would only be 8 syllables :( appreciate you enjoyed the poem! :) and thank you so much for the honorable rating! xoxo
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Oh, I see. I wasn't aware -- just like an editor :).
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haha! that's funny xoxo
Comment from Chrissy710
ThisThis is so well written and flows beautifully down the page A great entry for the contest And good luck in the vote I think its the winner Cheers Christine. I like it
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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ThisThis is so well written and flows beautifully down the page A great entry for the contest And good luck in the vote I think its the winner Cheers Christine. I like it
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Thank you for your kind words. It is definitely one of my favorites that I?ve ever written! So happy you appreciate! xoxo
Comment from Cybertron1986
I love the symbolism here. It resounds with truth with that artistic voice that is admirable and appealing. I especially liked the part, "A saddened Man never leaves a trace." Very unique and deep.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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I love the symbolism here. It resounds with truth with that artistic voice that is admirable and appealing. I especially liked the part, "A saddened Man never leaves a trace." Very unique and deep.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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Thank you very much! This is an older writing I did back in late 80?s. Finally had a contest it would fit into! Appreciate you enjoyed it! xoxo
Comment from LisaMay
History repeats, there is nothing new under the sun, the circle continues. You have some very thought-provoking lines in your poem.
I see this is a nod to the Michel Legrand theme song to the film 'The Thomas Crown Affair' of 1969 - Windmills of Your Mind.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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History repeats, there is nothing new under the sun, the circle continues. You have some very thought-provoking lines in your poem.
I see this is a nod to the Michel Legrand theme song to the film 'The Thomas Crown Affair' of 1969 - Windmills of Your Mind.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2020
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Yes, wrote this many years ago after being inspired by that beautiful song! So glad you?ve heard it! Thanks much for checking this out! xoxo
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As a lyricist yourself, of course you'll have a brain stuffed full of lyrics that will rise to the surface from time to time.
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:). I only wish I could write the music too! xoxo
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:). I only wish I could write the music too! xoxo
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Yes, that is another skill. I recently sent off some song lyrics and an answer came back very quickly telling me how talented I was and could I please sign a contract and oh by the way it would cost me quite a few hundred dollars for them to write some music for my lyrics before they would do anything else with them. I won't be signing the contract. I googled the company and saw warnings about scams in such situations.
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A long time ago I entered a contest and it was the same. Oh we will set your words to music and then I could buy it! Buy it! But it?s half my work! No thanks!! They sent me like a sample and it sucked anyway! LoL
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It's disappointing. Money-grubbing vultures at the artist's expense.
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Yep! Need someone to collaborate with not scam me!
