Punchinello
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
So Punchinello is still in the basement taking everything in? Creeepy. Nice use of onomatopoetic words: "In anger, Beth slapped the table with the palm of her hand. A loud thwack resonated throughout the house." Good work
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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So Punchinello is still in the basement taking everything in? Creeepy. Nice use of onomatopoetic words: "In anger, Beth slapped the table with the palm of her hand. A loud thwack resonated throughout the house." Good work
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Sankey
Another good chapter I am disappointed I missed again. Well done. Very graphic for sure. Thinking of all the phoney money I should have got from these.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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Another good chapter I am disappointed I missed again. Well done. Very graphic for sure. Thinking of all the phoney money I should have got from these.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020
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Will try to keep the phoney money coming as I post these.
Comment from RShipp
"These included carrion annihilated by traffic. He enraptured himself by dissecting and exhibiting their remains on shelves in his family's toolshed" Definitely ghoulish!! (Unless the guy turns out to be a world-renowned doctor?
I read the chapters a little out of order, but ow I'm back on tract.
Enjoying... if you can enjoy such a creature?
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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"These included carrion annihilated by traffic. He enraptured himself by dissecting and exhibiting their remains on shelves in his family's toolshed" Definitely ghoulish!! (Unless the guy turns out to be a world-renowned doctor?
I read the chapters a little out of order, but ow I'm back on tract.
Enjoying... if you can enjoy such a creature?
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Elljae
"Derisive, Punchinello scoffed,.." I wonder if Derisively should be the word used, instead of derisive. It modifies the verb 'scoffed', and adverbs modify verbs, if I remember my English correctly, but I only question this because I may be incorrect. But despite this, the wonderful story about some scary, crazy lunatic killer continues.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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"Derisive, Punchinello scoffed,.." I wonder if Derisively should be the word used, instead of derisive. It modifies the verb 'scoffed', and adverbs modify verbs, if I remember my English correctly, but I only question this because I may be incorrect. But despite this, the wonderful story about some scary, crazy lunatic killer continues.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a very well told story/chapter. I'll be going back to the previous chapters to catch up.
Cody is indeed an easily recognizable face.
Well done and thank you for sharing this.
Sharon
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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I think this is a very well told story/chapter. I'll be going back to the previous chapters to catch up.
Cody is indeed an easily recognizable face.
Well done and thank you for sharing this.
Sharon
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Cindy Warren
There are some sickos out there, all right. I can imagine the cops who have to deal with them have some nightmares. And you should see the injuries the homeless come into the hospital with. The sickos really do like to pick on them.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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There are some sickos out there, all right. I can imagine the cops who have to deal with them have some nightmares. And you should see the injuries the homeless come into the hospital with. The sickos really do like to pick on them.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from royowen
Sherrif Daniels has comparing the career of Simmons a heartless killer and a very twisted and perverse killer, cannibal and bizarre murderer, and all Punchanello does is sit there and scoff. I think that there is something decidedly inhuman about him. Much to the disgust of Beth. Well done Brett, good scribing, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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Sherrif Daniels has comparing the career of Simmons a heartless killer and a very twisted and perverse killer, cannibal and bizarre murderer, and all Punchanello does is sit there and scoff. I think that there is something decidedly inhuman about him. Much to the disgust of Beth. Well done Brett, good scribing, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Much appreciate the review.
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Welcome
Comment from Ricky1024
Chapter 4 was another continued conversation between the sheriff Brock and Elizabeth.
Nim between of course we have 20 cello with a smartass replies.
Can't wait to see him in action against Beth, Brock, and Cody!
Well done Sir West!
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Chapter 4 was another continued conversation between the sheriff Brock and Elizabeth.
Nim between of course we have 20 cello with a smartass replies.
Can't wait to see him in action against Beth, Brock, and Cody!
Well done Sir West!
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Another fine chapter, sir! ;) Although, I will mention this and you can certainly ignore it, I keep forgetting that Punch is in another room removed from the conversation at hand and his interjections throw me sometimes. Do you think you could, perhaps, italicize his 'parts' since they are not actually 'in' the scene yet are very important to it? Just a thought... :) Look forward to the next installment! ;) Yvette
father was a physicist --> [should this, perhaps, be chemist... physics doesn't really 'match' with use of hydrogen peroxide et al]
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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Another fine chapter, sir! ;) Although, I will mention this and you can certainly ignore it, I keep forgetting that Punch is in another room removed from the conversation at hand and his interjections throw me sometimes. Do you think you could, perhaps, italicize his 'parts' since they are not actually 'in' the scene yet are very important to it? Just a thought... :) Look forward to the next installment! ;) Yvette
father was a physicist --> [should this, perhaps, be chemist... physics doesn't really 'match' with use of hydrogen peroxide et al]
Comment Written 05-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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Appreciate you following this story. Glad you enjoy my hen-scratchings.
