Aching Bones
Never give in to old age aches and pains!45 total reviews
Comment from Raoul D'Harmental
Hi Anon
As I lie here in bed with bone and skin a-sagging painfully into an uncomfortable mattress I feel your pain in the multiple stress points radiating pain as I type. Let this pain be indeed! R
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2019
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Hi Anon
As I lie here in bed with bone and skin a-sagging painfully into an uncomfortable mattress I feel your pain in the multiple stress points radiating pain as I type. Let this pain be indeed! R
Comment Written 27-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2019
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Raoul, thank you for the review and the wonderful surprise of a six-star review at that.
Comment from RShipp
Enjoyed the read... and I could relate to the aches and pains.
I thought the diatelle poem was a very difficult task to undertake and be successful at accomplishing.
Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2019
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Enjoyed the read... and I could relate to the aches and pains.
I thought the diatelle poem was a very difficult task to undertake and be successful at accomplishing.
Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2019
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Sandra Ludwick
Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your poem. I certainly could relate to what I was reading. I loved your picture selection. It was perfect. Nicely done.
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your poem. I certainly could relate to what I was reading. I loved your picture selection. It was perfect. Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2019
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Sandra, thank you!
Comment from nomi338
I'm not much of one who pays attention to form as much as I am one who consder dontent above all else. I respect a poets efforts to be creative in tackling various forms of poetry writing. However, if the poem does not speak to me in a manner that I can relate to, then I am likely to not even finish reading it. Your poem grabbed me, not only because of the interesting illustration, your message about the problems that accompany aging is something that I can ultimately relate to. I have always heard men brag about the wisdom that comes with age, but only a few also complain about the aches and pain that also come with old age. You would think that they would use some of that acquired wisdom to encourage the young to take better care of themselves so that they could healthier as well as wiser.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2019
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I'm not much of one who pays attention to form as much as I am one who consder dontent above all else. I respect a poets efforts to be creative in tackling various forms of poetry writing. However, if the poem does not speak to me in a manner that I can relate to, then I am likely to not even finish reading it. Your poem grabbed me, not only because of the interesting illustration, your message about the problems that accompany aging is something that I can ultimately relate to. I have always heard men brag about the wisdom that comes with age, but only a few also complain about the aches and pain that also come with old age. You would think that they would use some of that acquired wisdom to encourage the young to take better care of themselves so that they could healthier as well as wiser.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2019
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Nomi, your wise words are so true, the if only's starting setting in at about fifty for me, when those first early morning aches came on, It was then I though tif only I had not done this or had that accident...ugh
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is well-written, enthusiastic, and uplifting. It sends a powerful message to aging people NOT to give in to aches and pains. Great
advice--for those who still have a choice. :-)
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2019
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Your poem is well-written, enthusiastic, and uplifting. It sends a powerful message to aging people NOT to give in to aches and pains. Great
advice--for those who still have a choice. :-)
Comment Written 26-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2019
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We can never give in to the daily aches and pains, otherwise these last years would really be unwanted.
Comment from royowen
They say that one can't be a sook and get old, in fact age is not for Whimps. A beautifully written diatelle, I haven't seen one of these for awhile, but I like what you've done with this, with deftly scribed ironic humour. Oh yes, one's pride should be dealt with in youth, not in old age. Well done, great scribing, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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They say that one can't be a sook and get old, in fact age is not for Whimps. A beautifully written diatelle, I haven't seen one of these for awhile, but I like what you've done with this, with deftly scribed ironic humour. Oh yes, one's pride should be dealt with in youth, not in old age. Well done, great scribing, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 26-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Thank you my friend!
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My pleasure
Comment from Therese Caron
Wonderful witty poem, with a perfect illustration. You followed the tricky rhyme pattern perfectly. I love the line about risking this pill, as we all see the pill commercials that basically threaten death. Unless I am reading this incorrectly, you don't need an apostrophe on resides in the third line. This is a great poem, and I think a wonderful entry for the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Wonderful witty poem, with a perfect illustration. You followed the tricky rhyme pattern perfectly. I love the line about risking this pill, as we all see the pill commercials that basically threaten death. Unless I am reading this incorrectly, you don't need an apostrophe on resides in the third line. This is a great poem, and I think a wonderful entry for the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 26-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Thanks for the good wishes
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written diatelle about aches and pains that come more often as we age. Sometimes it pains on a place we never knew existed. Only the brave make it through old age.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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A very well-written diatelle about aches and pains that come more often as we age. Sometimes it pains on a place we never knew existed. Only the brave make it through old age.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Sandra, oh, so true!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Share A Diatelle Poem writing prompt.
Your well-rhymed verse tells of the aches that come with old age.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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I think this is a good entry for the Share A Diatelle Poem writing prompt.
Your well-rhymed verse tells of the aches that come with old age.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 26-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Sharon, thanks, we simply just have to plow ahead.
Comment from LisaMay
Well, I guess concentrating on getting this poem into the right sequence of rhyme/near rhyme and syllable count is one way to take your mind off your aches and pains! You can take pride in a very well executed poem. (I recommend going to the gym for the rejuvenating appeal of ogling fit young things in lycra.)
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Well, I guess concentrating on getting this poem into the right sequence of rhyme/near rhyme and syllable count is one way to take your mind off your aches and pains! You can take pride in a very well executed poem. (I recommend going to the gym for the rejuvenating appeal of ogling fit young things in lycra.)
Comment Written 26-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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LisaMay, I must admit that the the young things in lyrca are not attending any of my silver sneaker workouts, shucks! LOL
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Drat!
