Below Billowing Clouds
A different perspective23 total reviews
Comment from LeannaP
"Silver lined can be undermined."
This was a really nice poem.
You write well.
I like this line in particular because it holds a deep meaning and it rhymed beautifully.
Happy holidays!
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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"Silver lined can be undermined."
This was a really nice poem.
You write well.
I like this line in particular because it holds a deep meaning and it rhymed beautifully.
Happy holidays!
Comment Written 26-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Thank you very much for reviewing. I hope you are enjoying the festive season!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I find this rather long in terms of the message imparted, but the message is very clear and well-written. It can all be summed up in three lines...
"Below these billowing clouds I sprawl.
My turbulent thoughts are gently healed -
problems once big, now small."
I find it nicer to read without the intervening lines of the clouds being blown away.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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I find this rather long in terms of the message imparted, but the message is very clear and well-written. It can all be summed up in three lines...
"Below these billowing clouds I sprawl.
My turbulent thoughts are gently healed -
problems once big, now small."
I find it nicer to read without the intervening lines of the clouds being blown away.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Haha... I wonder what you would do with War and Peace.
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I have tried. Several times. I struggle!
Comment from lyenochka
Fabulous job! I recognized the Wordsworth poem right away but it has your signature word play that turned it to shift away to the healing attribute of enjoying nature away from the crowds.
I think you'll do well in the contest! Thanks for joining!
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reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Fabulous job! I recognized the Wordsworth poem right away but it has your signature word play that turned it to shift away to the healing attribute of enjoying nature away from the crowds.
I think you'll do well in the contest! Thanks for joining!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Thank you for setting up the contest, Helen, and thank you for the 'pump' - a nice Christmas present (Boxing Day here in NZ).
I hope you are enjoying the festive season holidays.
