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Viewing comments for Chapter 73 "Scene at a New Year's Eve Party"Pons and Ned meet at different locations
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Comment from brenda faye curtis
It's a good way to wrap up the year with an update on Ned and Pons, And the neat note that Ned may be far smarter than many realize. That's what makes him such a favorite character of mine--the fact that he's fully human, and the reminder that each of us has a special talent.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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It's a good way to wrap up the year with an update on Ned and Pons, And the neat note that Ned may be far smarter than many realize. That's what makes him such a favorite character of mine--the fact that he's fully human, and the reminder that each of us has a special talent.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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Thanks, Brenda, for the excellent review. Bill
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You're welcome, Bill.
Comment from Janilou
It's interesting to read. Are you saying that Ned actually did understand what the German doctor lady was saying? I think that's it, and that's why he considers his friend, Pons such a good friend.
I don't usually review scripts because they're a little difficult to understand, but obviously with dialogue, there are no errors.
All the best,
Jan
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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It's interesting to read. Are you saying that Ned actually did understand what the German doctor lady was saying? I think that's it, and that's why he considers his friend, Pons such a good friend.
I don't usually review scripts because they're a little difficult to understand, but obviously with dialogue, there are no errors.
All the best,
Jan
Comment Written 28-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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The tough thing about scripts is that the actors have to emote. The audience can?t read minds, so the actors need direction to say the right thing to the right person in the right way.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Funny dialogue exchanges. It seems Pons has a belief that Ned needs everything translated and simplified from real German, then Ned surprises him with something 100% German and coherent., at the end there. Even the jokes seemed to be coming through. Fun share.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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Funny dialogue exchanges. It seems Pons has a belief that Ned needs everything translated and simplified from real German, then Ned surprises him with something 100% German and coherent., at the end there. Even the jokes seemed to be coming through. Fun share.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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Thank you, CC.
Comment from Chrissy710
Ha Ha Bill a great ending I bet Pons did look when Ned answered him in German LOL I love your quirky writings and they always bring a smile to me. Well written . funny and engaging Hope you had a good Christmas and look forward to reading more of your work Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2019
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Ha Ha Bill a great ending I bet Pons did look when Ned answered him in German LOL I love your quirky writings and they always bring a smile to me. Well written . funny and engaging Hope you had a good Christmas and look forward to reading more of your work Cheers Christine
Comment Written 27-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2019
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Thank you, Christine for the great review! Bill
Comment from Therese Caron
Interesting and funny story. The characters are rich and well described. It is written well grammatically, and very interesting when they meet the woman who does not have an open heart and an open mind. I wish this were a real story so I coils see where it's going. Good one!
Terry C.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2019
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Interesting and funny story. The characters are rich and well described. It is written well grammatically, and very interesting when they meet the woman who does not have an open heart and an open mind. I wish this were a real story so I coils see where it's going. Good one!
Terry C.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2019
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Thank you, Therese, for giving this a look. Pons and Ned will tackle the new year with humor and surprises.
Comment from phill doran
Hello Bill
These are funny. You've a great ear for dialogue and word play ("attire"). Very much a homage to the great two-handed stand-up teams of the past. The accents, delivery and images just create themselves from your script - very cleverly done.
I wish you well with your writing.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2019
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Hello Bill
These are funny. You've a great ear for dialogue and word play ("attire"). Very much a homage to the great two-handed stand-up teams of the past. The accents, delivery and images just create themselves from your script - very cleverly done.
I wish you well with your writing.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 27-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2019
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Thanks, Phil, for the positive review. Bill
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good Ned and Pons story, funny and well told within the dialogue.
It would be funny to see Ned in a zoot suit at a New Years Eve party.
Well done.
Sharon
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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This is a good Ned and Pons story, funny and well told within the dialogue.
It would be funny to see Ned in a zoot suit at a New Years Eve party.
Well done.
Sharon
Comment Written 26-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Thank you, Sharon
Comment from Mistydawn
I wonder what happened? Your script is well-written, interesting, believable. I kind of felt sorry for Ned being left in the dark like that. He's probably better off, sounds like the doctor is a bit cold.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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I wonder what happened? Your script is well-written, interesting, believable. I kind of felt sorry for Ned being left in the dark like that. He's probably better off, sounds like the doctor is a bit cold.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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She fits many of the Germans I?ve met as far as saying what she thinks without regards fo4 sensibilities.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Bill. I usually find it entertaining when Ned and Pons get together. I like the dialogue you used implementing some German. I was in Germany for three years with the military so my conversational German was quite good but I never bothered learning to read and write it. I haven't heard the words Zoot suit for about 50 years but I have seen some far more recently than that. I love the name Uncle Seizure. The pun about "attire" cracked me up. Keep writing these things and I'll keep reading them. Robert
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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Hello Bill. I usually find it entertaining when Ned and Pons get together. I like the dialogue you used implementing some German. I was in Germany for three years with the military so my conversational German was quite good but I never bothered learning to read and write it. I haven't heard the words Zoot suit for about 50 years but I have seen some far more recently than that. I love the name Uncle Seizure. The pun about "attire" cracked me up. Keep writing these things and I'll keep reading them. Robert
Comment Written 24-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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Thank you, Robert, for giving this a look. Bill
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You're welcome
Comment from Spitfire
This would be a dandy skit on the old Laugh-In series.
So, has anyone commented on your attire?
Ned: A feller said my right rear one looked like it was a settin' a bit low, but since I walked here...
Great use of puns. A fun read- aloud piece.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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This would be a dandy skit on the old Laugh-In series.
So, has anyone commented on your attire?
Ned: A feller said my right rear one looked like it was a settin' a bit low, but since I walked here...
Great use of puns. A fun read- aloud piece.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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Thanks, Shari. These two are fun to put together.
