Who Ordered These?
Inspired by R. Zimmerman19 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Congratulations on your win, Laura. I enjoyed reading your funny story. Your lines/words flow smoothly to carry the story. The image is super, too. I like the twists at the end. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2020
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Congratulations on your win, Laura. I enjoyed reading your funny story. Your lines/words flow smoothly to carry the story. The image is super, too. I like the twists at the end. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan
Comment Written 01-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2020
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Thank you for your lovely comments, Happy New Year.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is excellent. It is extremely funny, going of course to the absurd. It is interesting that several of the orders remain unresolved - all the more work for the reader"s imagination.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2020
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This is excellent. It is extremely funny, going of course to the absurd. It is interesting that several of the orders remain unresolved - all the more work for the reader"s imagination.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2020
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Thank you, Happy New Year.
Comment from Bobby Jo
That is so funny. Crazy how thingsturn out sometimes I bet he enjoyed his treats. I hope you enjoy the new year and all it has to offer. Hopefully more time to write. Many heartfelt prayers
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2020
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That is so funny. Crazy how thingsturn out sometimes I bet he enjoyed his treats. I hope you enjoy the new year and all it has to offer. Hopefully more time to write. Many heartfelt prayers
Comment Written 01-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2020
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Thank you and Happy New Year.
Comment from A Little Bird
Congratulations on this amusing tale! I can see why this story was the contest winner! Best wishes for the new year! May 2020 bring you much joy and success!
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2020
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Congratulations on this amusing tale! I can see why this story was the contest winner! Best wishes for the new year! May 2020 bring you much joy and success!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2020
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Thank you Abby your comments are really appreciated. Happy New Year.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Who Ordered These?"
This was an interesting in well-performed story.
It read and flowed well with no grammar issues.
Theme and Imagery were both Excellent an Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Good luck with that sing Happy New Year!
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
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"Who Ordered These?"
This was an interesting in well-performed story.
It read and flowed well with no grammar issues.
Theme and Imagery were both Excellent an Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Good luck with that sing Happy New Year!
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 31-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2019
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Happy New Year Ricky, Thank you.
Comment from papa55mike
This story reminds me of a book I finished recently, Animal Farm. I wonder what those animals would do if they had the internet. What a wonderfully written story.
Good luck in the contest!
Happy Holidays and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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This story reminds me of a book I finished recently, Animal Farm. I wonder what those animals would do if they had the internet. What a wonderfully written story.
Good luck in the contest!
Happy Holidays and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 26-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Thank you Mike the same yo you as well.
Comment from Sugarray77
How fun!! Your humorous story is a really enjoyable read and made me smile. Your examples of dog treats and paraphernalia were well chosen and perfect for this type of tale. Great job.
Melissa
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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How fun!! Your humorous story is a really enjoyable read and made me smile. Your examples of dog treats and paraphernalia were well chosen and perfect for this type of tale. Great job.
Melissa
Comment Written 25-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Thank You
Comment from Sallyo
This one is great fun! I relate to it as we have dogs who'd be anyone's for a treat. I can just imagine the scenario, and the "it was all a dream" ending isn't the end... and for once, it isn't a cop-out. There are some edits needed, but I loved this one so much I'm sixing it.
I was confused about who could have ordered all this stuff?
I was confused about who could have ordered all this stuff.
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can't
That night, pretending to go to bed. I tiptoed downstairs in my bare feet.
That night, after pretending to go to bed, I tiptoed downstairs in my bare feet.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2019
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This one is great fun! I relate to it as we have dogs who'd be anyone's for a treat. I can just imagine the scenario, and the "it was all a dream" ending isn't the end... and for once, it isn't a cop-out. There are some edits needed, but I loved this one so much I'm sixing it.
I was confused about who could have ordered all this stuff?
I was confused about who could have ordered all this stuff.
cant'
can't
That night, pretending to go to bed. I tiptoed downstairs in my bare feet.
That night, after pretending to go to bed, I tiptoed downstairs in my bare feet.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2019
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Thank you for your helpful review and six stars.
Comment from rockmann
Bentley is quite some dog, and this is quite some story. The mystery of the biscuits may have been solved, but what about the other stuff? Was it real, or just part of a dream? Either way, I would keep a close watch on Bentley. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2019
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Bentley is quite some dog, and this is quite some story. The mystery of the biscuits may have been solved, but what about the other stuff? Was it real, or just part of a dream? Either way, I would keep a close watch on Bentley. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2019
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Thankyou
Comment from LisaMay
Your sense of the absurd is delightful. As an animal love and aware of pets' personalities, this is a very believable scenario! They see us at the computer every day and I wouldn't be surprised if they joined FanStory and started writing poems.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2019
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Your sense of the absurd is delightful. As an animal love and aware of pets' personalities, this is a very believable scenario! They see us at the computer every day and I wouldn't be surprised if they joined FanStory and started writing poems.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2019
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Thank you Ruff, Ruff.
