Sad Farewell
six word good bye46 total reviews
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hi Laura. When I see old steam engines I get a nostalgic feeling so I can feel the poem. We had coal trains come through our village everyday and I lived a few hundred feet from the rails. My friends all had flat pennies they would lay on the rail to be mashed by the passing trains. Robert
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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Hi Laura. When I see old steam engines I get a nostalgic feeling so I can feel the poem. We had coal trains come through our village everyday and I lived a few hundred feet from the rails. My friends all had flat pennies they would lay on the rail to be mashed by the passing trains. Robert
Comment Written 28-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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We did that too with the pennies, Thanks for reviewing. ^_^
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You're welcome
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Saying goodbye is the hardest thing in the world and I shall be doing that soon when I return to my home abroad and I won't see my family for our months. Your words resonated with me, I love trains too! There is an old-fashioned, nostalgic theme to your words, Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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Saying goodbye is the hardest thing in the world and I shall be doing that soon when I return to my home abroad and I won't see my family for our months. Your words resonated with me, I love trains too! There is an old-fashioned, nostalgic theme to your words, Love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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Thanks Dolly, I appreciate it. So very difficult when loved ones are far away xo
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This is a good poem, which evokes a genuine feeling of sadness using few words. It makes me think that in this parting, it will be a long time before the people being separated will see each other again. The person(s) left behind care(s) enough to stand watching and waving, and don't simply see whoever was leaving board the train and then walk or drive off. The picture is very good and the title is perfect.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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This is a good poem, which evokes a genuine feeling of sadness using few words. It makes me think that in this parting, it will be a long time before the people being separated will see each other again. The person(s) left behind care(s) enough to stand watching and waving, and don't simply see whoever was leaving board the train and then walk or drive off. The picture is very good and the title is perfect.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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Thank you for your thoughtful review.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of the six words allowed by the contest prompt to create a farewell scenario--a saddening situation, regardless
of the reason for leaving.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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You have made excellent use of the six words allowed by the contest prompt to create a farewell scenario--a saddening situation, regardless
of the reason for leaving.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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Thank you, Janice.
Comment from Therese Caron
Trains always looks sad when they're leaving. Then they blow the whistle, which increases the feeling of sadness.This poem clearly illustrates that, with people waving sadly and watching the train leave. Good wording, beautiful color, and great image.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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Trains always looks sad when they're leaving. Then they blow the whistle, which increases the feeling of sadness.This poem clearly illustrates that, with people waving sadly and watching the train leave. Good wording, beautiful color, and great image.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2019
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Thank you, Therese.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written six-word poem about sad goodbyes that we have to do from time to time when duty calls or a friend that moves away and we will not see them very often anymore.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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A very well-written six-word poem about sad goodbyes that we have to do from time to time when duty calls or a friend that moves away and we will not see them very often anymore.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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Thank you Sandra I appreciate it.
Comment from Mark D. R.
You did it in most concise way! And you included a few w-letter alliterations besides. Yes, those trains leaving scenes may also include some tears with the waves.
Nice overall presentation for this entry.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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You did it in most concise way! And you included a few w-letter alliterations besides. Yes, those trains leaving scenes may also include some tears with the waves.
Nice overall presentation for this entry.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Thank you I appreciate it!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Way to tell a whole story with only 6 words, my lady!! ;) Seriously, with those words there could be happiness or sadness or a whole host more!! ;) The reader's perspective is the limit -- great job! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Way to tell a whole story with only 6 words, my lady!! ;) Seriously, with those words there could be happiness or sadness or a whole host more!! ;) The reader's perspective is the limit -- great job! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
Comment Written 23-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Thank you Yvette, I hope you have a wonderful Christmas and have some time just to put your feet up. I am glad we met even if its just in cyberspace. Love Lauraxo
Comment from Bill Schott
This six-word poem, Sad Farewell, has the correct word count and creates the scene of departure. A bygone era is touched upon as I envision a steam powered engine splitting the horizon of a far off destination.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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This six-word poem, Sad Farewell, has the correct word count and creates the scene of departure. A bygone era is touched upon as I envision a steam powered engine splitting the horizon of a far off destination.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Thanks Bill!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a nice read, but...
here's a hint. You have 2 weak words in 6 which is a lot. If you could shuffle the words to reduce one it would be good.
Secondly, form. For us oldies, such low contrast/small size of letters makes it almost impossible to read. We shy away instantly from such submissions.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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This is a nice read, but...
here's a hint. You have 2 weak words in 6 which is a lot. If you could shuffle the words to reduce one it would be good.
Secondly, form. For us oldies, such low contrast/small size of letters makes it almost impossible to read. We shy away instantly from such submissions.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Thank you for your review the font was increased when I wrote it, its not at the first it is 2+, which are the weak words?
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weak words are 'we' and 'the'
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Thanks Katherine!
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Hi I changed it a bit what do you think?
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to my mind it's much better. you have breathed movement into the text, which matches the departure of the train, and goes well with the image. Way to go!
