Tanka (carefree cardinal)
tanka (5-7-5-7-7)10 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your description of the cardinal, accented by your artwork selection and use of alliteration. I admired your personification of the bird as well. Best wishes in the tanka contest and enjoy your weekend- Joan
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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I admired your description of the cardinal, accented by your artwork selection and use of alliteration. I admired your personification of the bird as well. Best wishes in the tanka contest and enjoy your weekend- Joan
Comment Written 21-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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You're nice. Thank you :)
Comment from BeasPeas
The image of the cardinal is gorgeous and I love all the birds on my back deck. I have some nice photos of all the birds including the cardinals. Your poem reflects lost love and fear of entering the fray again (scared to sing along). Hopefully he will--maybe in the springtime. Marilyn
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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The image of the cardinal is gorgeous and I love all the birds on my back deck. I have some nice photos of all the birds including the cardinals. Your poem reflects lost love and fear of entering the fray again (scared to sing along). Hopefully he will--maybe in the springtime. Marilyn
Comment Written 21-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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Hi Marilyn. I personified the bird. It use to be among my favorite birds; cardinals, bluejays, chickadees, red robins... I grew up and it's like whatever is singing or there. I have seen brown cardinals around Southern California. Thank you. Merry Christmas-tidings. Hearts & hugs, Alicia
Comment from lyenochka
You did a super job with this tanka, Alicia! I could feel the cardinal's desire for love and you used your pivot line well to change from listening to remembering love in the past. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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You did a super job with this tanka, Alicia! I could feel the cardinal's desire for love and you used your pivot line well to change from listening to remembering love in the past. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 20-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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You're nice. Thank you.
Happy Holidays :)
Comment from royowen
A wonderfully composed tanka Alicia, the thought of a red cardinal. Being wistfully drawn to another time and a space where the red cardinal wants to dwell in, well done, good job, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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A wonderfully composed tanka Alicia, the thought of a red cardinal. Being wistfully drawn to another time and a space where the red cardinal wants to dwell in, well done, good job, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 20-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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Hi Roy! Thank you. Happy Holidays. Hugs, Alicia :)
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You too Alicia
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Tanka Poetry contest.
Your verse describes the quiet Cardinal very nicely.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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I think this is a good entry for the Tanka Poetry contest.
Your verse describes the quiet Cardinal very nicely.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 20-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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Thank you
Happy Holidays :)
Comment from Elljae
I wonder if he's scared because his life is always in danger; but maybe not, I think bright red things in nature are usually the dangerous things to watch out for and avoid, if possible. The poem is very melancholy, "scared
", "lost", "sighs" and "fleeting". I feel bad for this cardinal and I wonder if being bright red is the cause of all his lamentations. This poem really got me to thinking, and I don't think I ever really considered the plight of a bird before, especially a red cardinal.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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I wonder if he's scared because his life is always in danger; but maybe not, I think bright red things in nature are usually the dangerous things to watch out for and avoid, if possible. The poem is very melancholy, "scared
", "lost", "sighs" and "fleeting". I feel bad for this cardinal and I wonder if being bright red is the cause of all his lamentations. This poem really got me to thinking, and I don't think I ever really considered the plight of a bird before, especially a red cardinal.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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Hi! It's personification. Bird viewed as human. Thank you
Happy Holidays :)
Comment from Mark D. R.
I really like your carefree cardinal verse and its accompanying photo. You painted a good story for my read today.
..scared to sing along (sic) or sing alone? Both have different meanings for sure.
Best wishes in this Tanka contest.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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I really like your carefree cardinal verse and its accompanying photo. You painted a good story for my read today.
..scared to sing along (sic) or sing alone? Both have different meanings for sure.
Best wishes in this Tanka contest.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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Hi! You're nice. Birds are shy alone, but not in crowds. So, scared to sing along. Thank you.
Happy Holidays :)
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May the sun shine on your happy, healthy New Year too!
Comment from country ranch writer
Nice work up and presentation for this poem,I love cardinals! This poor dear is mooning over his lost love so sad. The other bird are just to happy.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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Nice work up and presentation for this poem,I love cardinals! This poor dear is mooning over his lost love so sad. The other bird are just to happy.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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Hi! You're nice. Thank you.
God bless you :)
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Smiles
Comment from Alex Rosel
I like this. I assume you don't intend your picture to be taken literally. Rather, it's imagery. As such, it fits the words well {thumbs up}.
Best of luck with the competition judging {smiles}.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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I like this. I assume you don't intend your picture to be taken literally. Rather, it's imagery. As such, it fits the words well {thumbs up}.
Best of luck with the competition judging {smiles}.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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Hi! Yeah, it's imaginary as it is about a personified bird. I'm not sure if it's tanka anymore. You're nice. Thank you :)
Comment from oliver818
Nice poem, I enjoyed reading it. I particularly enjoyed the imagery you used and the way it flows. Thanks for sharing this and have yourself a really great day
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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Nice poem, I enjoyed reading it. I particularly enjoyed the imagery you used and the way it flows. Thanks for sharing this and have yourself a really great day
Comment Written 20-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2019
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You're nice. Thank you :)
