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Cedar Falls

A ghost story

3 total reviews 
Comment from LeannaP
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Interestingly, i couldn't see any ghosts personified in this particular post However, it does well as a stand alone contest entry..
You write well and thats clearly obvious.
Nicely written. Good luck!

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2019


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2019
    Thanks for the review Leanna, Sarah and her dog died on tuesday but they had not crossed over. The real estate guy that walked in to measure did not see her, because she was a ghost. When she heard him talking about the accident she realized and headed into the light.The light she had not understood, now made sense. Cheers.
reply by LeannaP on 18-Dec-2019
    Oh i see. My condolences.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2019
    Cheers
Comment from Therese Caron
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Great ghost story! The man said nothing to her because he could not see her, as she was dead. She finally went to the light. I loved the description of the room, with the bed and wooden writing desk. I thought the picture of the dog looked perfectly normal and then after I read the poem, I thought he looked ghostly. The power of suggestion is very strong. Good writing, good grammar, great story.

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2019


reply by the author on 17-Dec-2019
    Thanks for the encouraging review. haha I have used that little dog a couple times before. I appreciate your thoughts on this one, cheers
Comment from Henry King
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This is an excellent story. I was surprised by the woman being the ghost. I like that the man gave a hint, during the phone conversation, when the death occurred. I wondered why she did not confront the intruder in any manner. Well done.

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2019


reply by the author on 17-Dec-2019
    Thanks for the encouraging review Henry. She didnot say anything because she was a guest, plus maybe chilled in ghost mode, haha cheers.