Flushed With Success
One man's nothing is another's paradise.19 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Monica, Well - I never thought I could be so hooked on a story like this one. I enjoyed every line - and what is more it is so well written that it keeps you interested, you have to keep reading, to find out the outcome of it all. You really had a good idea with this one - unique I should think. Not the kind of thing we write about as a rule LOL. Great story with a moral. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards and Happy New Year - Dorothy x
Tiny typo - drop the apostrophe in Clinton's. A couple of others but I've lost them LOL! Guess the Committee will also LOL! x
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Hello Monica, Well - I never thought I could be so hooked on a story like this one. I enjoyed every line - and what is more it is so well written that it keeps you interested, you have to keep reading, to find out the outcome of it all. You really had a good idea with this one - unique I should think. Not the kind of thing we write about as a rule LOL. Great story with a moral. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards and Happy New Year - Dorothy x
Tiny typo - drop the apostrophe in Clinton's. A couple of others but I've lost them LOL! Guess the Committee will also LOL! x
Comment Written 31-Dec-2019
Comment from w.j.debi
What a creative approach to the assignment you were given. And your fairy tale comes with a happy ending. It is amazing how many people can't live without their cells phones these days. I've even seen people sitting next to each other texting instea of talking. It's crazy.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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What a creative approach to the assignment you were given. And your fairy tale comes with a happy ending. It is amazing how many people can't live without their cells phones these days. I've even seen people sitting next to each other texting instea of talking. It's crazy.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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Thank you very much for your time and kind feedback.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I didn't know if I should chuckle or not when reading this story. A problem like constipation/bathroom issue like this could be very unpleasant. Can you imagine the ring he got while sitting on this seater all day? Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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I didn't know if I should chuckle or not when reading this story. A problem like constipation/bathroom issue like this could be very unpleasant. Can you imagine the ring he got while sitting on this seater all day? Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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Thank you very much for your time and kind feedback.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
What a fun story. I'm not a fan of toilet humor, but this was so bizarre that I didn't mind. I like his name (Bunged N. Trails). LOL! Speaking of prunes, I like them a lot, but luckily they don't affect me in "that" way. :)
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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What a fun story. I'm not a fan of toilet humor, but this was so bizarre that I didn't mind. I like his name (Bunged N. Trails). LOL! Speaking of prunes, I like them a lot, but luckily they don't affect me in "that" way. :)
Comment Written 17-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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Thank you very much for your time and kind feedback. I wasn't too jazzed about the toilet being my assigned object - all aspirations for a win being flushed right down the drain LOL.
Comment from RShipp
"I'm gonna die, Gramps."
"Funny, your folks never mentioned it. Kind of an important piece of information to share, don't ya think?"
"They don't know yet. I lost my cell phone and can't live without it."
This caused me side pains from the laughter!!!!
"As if stupidity wasn't enough to hamper ones self-confidence, he was plagued by chronic constipation making life in general a misery.""
O... my. There go the stitches in the side again.
" Years of backed up excrement started oozing out ... " This is the story for a 12-year-old-boy enjoyment if there ever was one.
A great story... but I suspect MY 12-year-old would have enjoyed the story, understood the moral and kept his phone anyway.
Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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"I'm gonna die, Gramps."
"Funny, your folks never mentioned it. Kind of an important piece of information to share, don't ya think?"
"They don't know yet. I lost my cell phone and can't live without it."
This caused me side pains from the laughter!!!!
"As if stupidity wasn't enough to hamper ones self-confidence, he was plagued by chronic constipation making life in general a misery.""
O... my. There go the stitches in the side again.
" Years of backed up excrement started oozing out ... " This is the story for a 12-year-old-boy enjoyment if there ever was one.
A great story... but I suspect MY 12-year-old would have enjoyed the story, understood the moral and kept his phone anyway.
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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Thank you very much for your time and kind feedback.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Excellent story with a lot of humor and a lesson about life built around a toilet. You did a great job of working with some weird prompts. Have a great Christmas!
Bill
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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Excellent story with a lot of humor and a lesson about life built around a toilet. You did a great job of working with some weird prompts. Have a great Christmas!
Bill
Comment Written 17-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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Thank you very much for your time and kind feedback.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Oh, I will have to let my 16 year old grandson read this story. He is attached to his smart phone too. I swear. I don't know how he watches TV and uses the cell phone at the same time, but he seems to manage it. Great story Monica. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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Oh, I will have to let my 16 year old grandson read this story. He is attached to his smart phone too. I swear. I don't know how he watches TV and uses the cell phone at the same time, but he seems to manage it. Great story Monica. Nancy:)
Comment Written 17-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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Thank you very much for your time and kind feedback.
Comment from Loren .
Great way to present a moral that keeps both young and old engaged. Liked the honesty and how it best to eliminate those things that bind us. Loren
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Great way to present a moral that keeps both young and old engaged. Liked the honesty and how it best to eliminate those things that bind us. Loren
Comment Written 17-Dec-2019
Comment from Darlene Franklin
Clever way to make this into a fairy tale. The great Zoltar is really just a man who discovered a magic pot to help his constipation and became wise. Hehe. An object lesson for children. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2019
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Clever way to make this into a fairy tale. The great Zoltar is really just a man who discovered a magic pot to help his constipation and became wise. Hehe. An object lesson for children. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2019
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Thank you very much, Darlene. It's kind of hard to get all revved up over a toilet, but if you put your mind to it - you realize just what an unsung hero they really are :).
Comment from CD Richards
An amusing moral tale, which fits the "fairy tale" genre perfectly. Also the designated object certainly features prominently, so well done with that.
I picked up a couple of typos. You might want to have a look at them (or not) :)
That's how the Clinton's became so
[Clintons]
"What does derogstory mean,"
[mean?]
and it means Grandma's don't like it
[Grandmas]
would move it wound from fair to fair.
[round]
All the best fairy tales have some nuggets (pardon the pun) of wisdom, and yours has several. I think my favourite is:
"Our minds are pretty powerful and can make us believe almost anything when our hearts are already set on our own personal version of the truth."
Amen.
Good job with this, and best of luck in the voting!
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2019
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An amusing moral tale, which fits the "fairy tale" genre perfectly. Also the designated object certainly features prominently, so well done with that.
I picked up a couple of typos. You might want to have a look at them (or not) :)
That's how the Clinton's became so
[Clintons]
"What does derogstory mean,"
[mean?]
and it means Grandma's don't like it
[Grandmas]
would move it wound from fair to fair.
[round]
All the best fairy tales have some nuggets (pardon the pun) of wisdom, and yours has several. I think my favourite is:
"Our minds are pretty powerful and can make us believe almost anything when our hearts are already set on our own personal version of the truth."
Amen.
Good job with this, and best of luck in the voting!
Comment Written 17-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2019
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Thanks so much, Craig. I really appreciate the kind encouragement as it is kind of hard to get jazzed up over a porcelain god LOL. Wishing you all the best in the voting.
