haiku (wildlife artist paints)
Portraying the beauty of nature.4 total reviews
Comment from RShipp
So many 'rules' for this one! Well done for even attempting!!
the 'brush with nature' was a great twisting thought...
Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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So many 'rules' for this one! Well done for even attempting!!
the 'brush with nature' was a great twisting thought...
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thanks for your review. Yes, I had to concentrate on getting the rules right. My entry got disqualified for the 'Lost' contest.
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Ouch.... Sorry about that. I'm just learning to read all the rules closely as well.
I'm glad they have them, though. It not fun for an apple to be compared and measured like it should be an orange.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Mystery poet. I gave you your 3rd vote.
First off I appreciate the fact that you didn't include a picture seeing a haiku is suppose to create with it words a mental picture which yours did without the aid of artwork.
The first two lines set the scenario then you offer a very smart and effective
final /a-ha line.
The word "brush " works so well here �due to its multiple meaning.
Brush : object used to paint on canvas these memories you speak of
"Brush" as an experience
" brush with death" which is quite a possibility seeing I thought the word "safari " meant being in Africa.
I thought this was a brilliant entry.
I wish you all the best in the contest!
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Ciao Mystery poet. I gave you your 3rd vote.
First off I appreciate the fact that you didn't include a picture seeing a haiku is suppose to create with it words a mental picture which yours did without the aid of artwork.
The first two lines set the scenario then you offer a very smart and effective
final /a-ha line.
The word "brush " works so well here �due to its multiple meaning.
Brush : object used to paint on canvas these memories you speak of
"Brush" as an experience
" brush with death" which is quite a possibility seeing I thought the word "safari " meant being in Africa.
I thought this was a brilliant entry.
I wish you all the best in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2019
Comment from Mark D. R.
I do like your Haiku entry. It paints for me a most concrete image of a safari artist. As a classical Japanese Haiku, IMHO it is missing the seasonal element (kigo). However, the contest did not require the same.
If you are interesting in exploring more Haiku, take a visit to the free site, theHaikuFoundation.org.
Good luck in the voting for this writing prompt.
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I do like your Haiku entry. It paints for me a most concrete image of a safari artist. As a classical Japanese Haiku, IMHO it is missing the seasonal element (kigo). However, the contest did not require the same.
If you are interesting in exploring more Haiku, take a visit to the free site, theHaikuFoundation.org.
Good luck in the voting for this writing prompt.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2019
Comment from Pam (respa)
-You have met the
requirements for a
good haiku.
-It paints a vivid word
picture of the artist
and his memories
of the safari.
-The satori line is
very good, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
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-You have met the
requirements for a
good haiku.
-It paints a vivid word
picture of the artist
and his memories
of the safari.
-The satori line is
very good, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2019
