The French Letter
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Comment from damommy
Well, well, well. Bisto isn't quite the buffoon he appears to be. I'm wondering, too, if Charles' dream isn't prophetic. Something his subconscious is trying to tell him.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Well, well, well. Bisto isn't quite the buffoon he appears to be. I'm wondering, too, if Charles' dream isn't prophetic. Something his subconscious is trying to tell him.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thanks, Helen. A couple of glasses of mulberry wine certainly seem to have loosened Bisto's inhibitions! All the best, Tony
Comment from Ulla
Hi Tony, again, I have no six left which this chapter so clearly deserves. Where it's going from now on is anybody's guess. You have a great and believable dialogue and great imagery towards the end. All in all, a joy to read. Kind regards. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Hi Tony, again, I have no six left which this chapter so clearly deserves. Where it's going from now on is anybody's guess. You have a great and believable dialogue and great imagery towards the end. All in all, a joy to read. Kind regards. Ulla:))
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thanks so much for your supportive comments, Ulla. Appreciated, as always. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Alex Rosel
Here are a few points you might like to consider:
Never turn up the chance of a good meal in Paris, eh? -- "Turn up", or do you mean "turn down"? I assume you've done it intentionally, but I can't figure out the reason.
and find out more about great grandpapa's goings-on. -- Spag. Here, I assume "Great-Grandpapa" is a proper noun, so it should be capitalized. But I think "Great-grandpapa" is also acceptable. It is also hyphenated since I assume you don't mean Grandpapa who was a great person.
He half-closed the door with his elbow as he went out. -- Nice snippet. I can visualize him, bottle in one hand, glasses in the other {thumbs up}.
I really like the last paragraph. It's a great transition {thumbs up}.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Here are a few points you might like to consider:
Never turn up the chance of a good meal in Paris, eh? -- "Turn up", or do you mean "turn down"? I assume you've done it intentionally, but I can't figure out the reason.
and find out more about great grandpapa's goings-on. -- Spag. Here, I assume "Great-Grandpapa" is a proper noun, so it should be capitalized. But I think "Great-grandpapa" is also acceptable. It is also hyphenated since I assume you don't mean Grandpapa who was a great person.
He half-closed the door with his elbow as he went out. -- Nice snippet. I can visualize him, bottle in one hand, glasses in the other {thumbs up}.
I really like the last paragraph. It's a great transition {thumbs up}.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thanks, Alex. Two good suggestions, both of which I've acted on. Much appreciated.
All the best, Tony
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh dear, Charles has become so used to the hardness of his cell, he can't sleep on a nice soft bed. It will change. That dream didn't sound very nice, I'm wondering if it could be an omen? And, where is Helen? We all want answers to that question. I meant to congratulate you on your 100th chapter. Now 101! This is going to be a big book, but you can't cut it back, everything about the story is brilliant. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Oh dear, Charles has become so used to the hardness of his cell, he can't sleep on a nice soft bed. It will change. That dream didn't sound very nice, I'm wondering if it could be an omen? And, where is Helen? We all want answers to that question. I meant to congratulate you on your 100th chapter. Now 101! This is going to be a big book, but you can't cut it back, everything about the story is brilliant. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Hi, Sandra. We have the next four days all forecast to be over 100F, so I'll be battening down the hatches and getting on with a bit of writing. It would be good to get this finished before the year's end.
As always, I appreciate your encouragement! All good wishes, Tony
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I don't think I could cope with those temperatures, Tony. You've had it quite bad this year, haven't you? Now White Island has added to it as well. Yes, keep those hatches well battened!!
Comment from royowen
Some great poetic praising at the end of your episode Tony, "toodle Pip" I think that's what Americans think the British "toff" speaks like, heh heh. So this is interesting, Bisto sounds like he could be a little on the sloshed side, but I think he's very much on the naive side, and Charles seems a little out of his depth also, a little too much, "fair go, old chap." Well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Some great poetic praising at the end of your episode Tony, "toodle Pip" I think that's what Americans think the British "toff" speaks like, heh heh. So this is interesting, Bisto sounds like he could be a little on the sloshed side, but I think he's very much on the naive side, and Charles seems a little out of his depth also, a little too much, "fair go, old chap." Well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thanks, Roy. I appreciate your comments. Best wishes, Tony
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Bless you Tony.
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Well done
Comment from robyn corum
Tony,
Another nicely-composed addition to your story. More and more confickities, it seems-- plots and subplots. All kinds of troubles! Nice! Ha
Notes, if I may:
1.) They're fond of each other, but not in that way, but I get the impression he rather fancies your Helen.
--> can you lose a 'but'?
2.) I was lying wrapped in my duvet on a Persian carpet by the window I gazed up at the stars of the Mighty Hunter;
--> are you missing a period?
Thanks a lot!
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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Tony,
Another nicely-composed addition to your story. More and more confickities, it seems-- plots and subplots. All kinds of troubles! Nice! Ha
Notes, if I may:
1.) They're fond of each other, but not in that way, but I get the impression he rather fancies your Helen.
--> can you lose a 'but'?
2.) I was lying wrapped in my duvet on a Persian carpet by the window I gazed up at the stars of the Mighty Hunter;
--> are you missing a period?
Thanks a lot!
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Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thanks for the review, Robyn, and especially for the two catches. I've made changes now to tidy things up. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from Pantygynt
Hey! What's all this. Our stories are becoming entwined. Orion's Belt is mine while you appear to be claiming an interest in other parts of the mighty hunter.
I must admit I do have difficulty in picturing Bisto in an amorous role, but I suppose there are multi faceted lives to most of us.
Remember the old saying, suitably modified for the occasion, 'red sky in the morning, secret agent's warning!
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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Hey! What's all this. Our stories are becoming entwined. Orion's Belt is mine while you appear to be claiming an interest in other parts of the mighty hunter.
I must admit I do have difficulty in picturing Bisto in an amorous role, but I suppose there are multi faceted lives to most of us.
Remember the old saying, suitably modified for the occasion, 'red sky in the morning, secret agent's warning!
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Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thanks, Jim. You can have Orion back now. Thanks for the loan!
I'm not sure that Bisto is quite as amorous as the mulberry wine has suggested!
We've four days in a row coming up with temperatures over 100F, so I'll be battening down the hatches and getting on with a bit of writing. That's the idea, anyway. It would be good to get this finished before Christmas.
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I have enjoyed reading the story all the way through but I think it needs streamlining a bit before any intended publication. That can be difficult. I have dug up an old novel I wrote in 1992 and am trying to get it ready for publication and it is driving me up the wall. it could well see the light of day here when I am done with Orion's Belt.
