I Belong to Myself
Coming to the realization as a young woman that I am my own!2 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A very interesting poem that goes beyond self-confidence and into the realm of narcissism and declaration of life-long 'single'... Your first-person free verse style is unique and has a wonderful free-spirited feel to it. :) ;)
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
A very interesting poem that goes beyond self-confidence and into the realm of narcissism and declaration of life-long 'single'... Your first-person free verse style is unique and has a wonderful free-spirited feel to it. :) ;)
Comment Written 11-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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I appreciate the review & the stars! However, I want to change the view of having confidence into just self-love and not narcissism as people, especially women, need to have confidence to survive in this world unfortunately! Thank you for the kind words! :)
Comment from Alex Edwards-Bourdrez
I like the direct and unapologetic tone that you set--claiming your person as your own, implying that there are forces that seek to claim a part of you--perhaps a vulnerability within you that might give a part of yourself over to those forces. It is as if you recognize something like that in your repeated--and effective--insistence, and you are taking a stand. The simplicity, the repetition, and the rhythm play together to create power. I would have liked to see the progression of different aspects of yourself that you invoke play out more concretely. Can you find something besides character traits to end with? Perhaps using "heart," "guts," "muscles" or "sinews" -- even "brain." The reader would be further drawn in and the traits "Confidence," "Fire," and the like would be generated in the mind of the reader. Often it is more effective to show rather than tell.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
I like the direct and unapologetic tone that you set--claiming your person as your own, implying that there are forces that seek to claim a part of you--perhaps a vulnerability within you that might give a part of yourself over to those forces. It is as if you recognize something like that in your repeated--and effective--insistence, and you are taking a stand. The simplicity, the repetition, and the rhythm play together to create power. I would have liked to see the progression of different aspects of yourself that you invoke play out more concretely. Can you find something besides character traits to end with? Perhaps using "heart," "guts," "muscles" or "sinews" -- even "brain." The reader would be further drawn in and the traits "Confidence," "Fire," and the like would be generated in the mind of the reader. Often it is more effective to show rather than tell.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for the kind words! I appreciate them so much. I also thank you for the honest feedback as well, it makes me a better writer!
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You're most welcome. I also commented on your piece about New York.