He hurts
Two line rhyming poem5 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This poem will draw the reader in. This becomes universal. As religious as some are they may still have secretly wondered if the gods were teasing them. I have shaken my fist at my Higher Power and said "What the F do you have in mind for me?" It's interesting how we retuen to our primal beliefs when things are going so against what we would have happen. This is very clever.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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This poem will draw the reader in. This becomes universal. As religious as some are they may still have secretly wondered if the gods were teasing them. I have shaken my fist at my Higher Power and said "What the F do you have in mind for me?" It's interesting how we retuen to our primal beliefs when things are going so against what we would have happen. This is very clever.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for the detailed and positive review.
Often we do find ourselves asking /pondering who the hell is moving all the strings...specially when dealing with our love affairs.
I hope the committee likes my wee poem too but I won't hold my breath ..(biggrin)
Comment from judiverse
Cute artwork. This is the stuff of tragic dramas. The lovers are kept apart by fate in the form of a wicked stepmother or feuding family or whatever. Romance is thwarted and the lovers suffer. You have you internal rhyme as well as end rhyme. Great entry, and best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
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Cute artwork. This is the stuff of tragic dramas. The lovers are kept apart by fate in the form of a wicked stepmother or feuding family or whatever. Romance is thwarted and the lovers suffer. You have you internal rhyme as well as end rhyme. Great entry, and best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
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I'm addicted to saddness ..I love turmoil and so that, of course, reflects in what I write..
My favourite films are Wuthering Heights, Hamlet and The English Patients ...all have sad/ tragic endings ..love for me never trimuphs
Thanks Judi for reviewing my latest entry ..Glad you liked the artwork.
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You're very welcome. That's often true in real life, that love doesn't triumph. I like Wuthering Heights and Hamlet, but didn't care much for The English Patient. judi
Comment from rhonnie69
CIAO TEMPESTE: I trust that in spite of negative circumstances...he will inevitably...with her inspiration and her consent...seize her heart. She has already seized his heart...and he's all in. She trusts him that he is...and that he truly loves her...but her prudent mind advises her to make him be patient. Yes. Trials and tribulations are going to trespass...but propriety compels her to let patience have it's perfect way...knowing that that way...before and after they unite...they will both be complete...lacking nothing that they need to stay together. "Clever Girl...happy boy." Your consolation has touched my heart, dear lady. Thank you. God bless you, Tempeste. Cordially: rhonnie69.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
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CIAO TEMPESTE: I trust that in spite of negative circumstances...he will inevitably...with her inspiration and her consent...seize her heart. She has already seized his heart...and he's all in. She trusts him that he is...and that he truly loves her...but her prudent mind advises her to make him be patient. Yes. Trials and tribulations are going to trespass...but propriety compels her to let patience have it's perfect way...knowing that that way...before and after they unite...they will both be complete...lacking nothing that they need to stay together. "Clever Girl...happy boy." Your consolation has touched my heart, dear lady. Thank you. God bless you, Tempeste. Cordially: rhonnie69.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
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Glad you enjoyed the read ....you really gave it some thought rhonnie but in all honesty, I wrote it lightheartedly.
I just woke up and I jotted down these two lines at were in my mind.
I am addicted to saddness and I don't believe in happy endings so of course what I write reflects that.
I would like to thank you for all the support you continue to show me ...it's of great encouragement.
I wish you a peaceful weekend!
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CIAO TEMPESTE: Appropriate for your purpose and for the circumstances you actually wrote your ppoemheavyheartedly.
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CIAO TEMPESTE: Actually you wrote your poem, heavyheartedly. You are addicted to sadness. Thus...you are extremely humble and empathetic. You will always have my support...because you will always have me. I'm yours. God bless you, Tempeste. Cordially: rhonnie69.
Comment from Sugarray77
Excellent write Franca!! I enjoyed your artwork on this little verse and think its a good contender for the prompt. Your writing includes drama, a bit of angst, and longing. Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
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Excellent write Franca!! I enjoyed your artwork on this little verse and think its a good contender for the prompt. Your writing includes drama, a bit of angst, and longing. Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
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Thanks for the positive response Sugarray.. glad you liked the artwork..though it's simple I do think it reflects well the words for my wee poem.
I hope you have a happy weekend!
Comment from Alex Rosel
I like this. Your rhymes, seize/tease and heart/apart, are a tad oblique, and I think that adds to their effectiveness {thumbs up}.
Your image introduces some humor as well {smiles}.
Best of luck with the competition judging {smiles}.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
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I like this. Your rhymes, seize/tease and heart/apart, are a tad oblique, and I think that adds to their effectiveness {thumbs up}.
Your image introduces some humor as well {smiles}.
Best of luck with the competition judging {smiles}.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2019
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I prefer oblique over symmetric ..object places symmetrically tend to blend in hence are less noticable... ..if something is oblique it gets more attention..I personally think it looks better.
Thank you for the postive review.
I hope you have a peaceful wekend!
