The Ol' Tree Swing
A part of childhood, a part of me...12 total reviews
Comment from Alchera
How could this 5/7/5 entry contest not win if it cradles each infant in its own mother's arms and protected also by Mother Nature's arms in one unique existential eternal hugged breath of love? Blessings Tony
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
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How could this 5/7/5 entry contest not win if it cradles each infant in its own mother's arms and protected also by Mother Nature's arms in one unique existential eternal hugged breath of love? Blessings Tony
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2019
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Thanx so much for your wonderful review on this one, Tony, and for those bright shiny stars!! I've always enjoyed the 'shorties' as there's not meter or rhyme to get all 'bogged' down with... :) :) We had a big oak tree beside our house when I was young and it was 'everything' for a while!! ;) Take care and Merry Christmas over there! ;) Yvette
Comment from MissMerri
A delightful, heart-warming totally lovely little poem, and so beautifully presented too! I loved the sweet memories this provoked and I love that it won first place in the contest. Wow! You are on a roll, my dear. ~MM
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
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A delightful, heart-warming totally lovely little poem, and so beautifully presented too! I loved the sweet memories this provoked and I love that it won first place in the contest. Wow! You are on a roll, my dear. ~MM
Comment Written 10-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
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Thanx so much for your wonderful review, Mary ....but could you please tell me what you would recommend fixing? I'm not really sure what to change in such a short write, but what could I have done differently that would have merited 5 stars instead of 4? Your input would be much appreciated. :)
Comment from Therese Caron
The use of simile here is brilliant. We were avid tree climbers when we were little, and when we were teenagers, sat in the trees and discussed our problems, to my parents chagrin, we did not always stay on the lower branches! You have written a great 575 poem, despite the meager allowance of syllables.This poem brought back memories, and really touched me. Thank you.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
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The use of simile here is brilliant. We were avid tree climbers when we were little, and when we were teenagers, sat in the trees and discussed our problems, to my parents chagrin, we did not always stay on the lower branches! You have written a great 575 poem, despite the meager allowance of syllables.This poem brought back memories, and really touched me. Thank you.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
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Thank you! 🌞
Comment from Darlene Franklin
I love the sentiment, and I also like the repetition of l, m, and c words! Good job on the poem. Is this contest finished? Good luck. This poem gives us a reason to hug a tree.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
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I love the sentiment, and I also like the repetition of l, m, and c words! Good job on the poem. Is this contest finished? Good luck. This poem gives us a reason to hug a tree.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
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You know, you are the first to have 'caught' that intentional rep - thank you for your thoughtful review! 🌞🌞
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Oh, really? It was well done. You're welcome.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Tree Hugger 5-7-5 writing prompt.
Your verse tells of an Oak holding childhood memories.
Well done and good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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I think this is a good entry for the Tree Hugger 5-7-5 writing prompt.
Your verse tells of an Oak holding childhood memories.
Well done and good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 09-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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Thank you! 🌞
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This massive tree looks like it could hold even us big kids who would like to go for a swing. I like the comparison you've used to a mother's arms. I like this and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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This massive tree looks like it could hold even us big kids who would like to go for a swing. I like the comparison you've used to a mother's arms. I like this and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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Thank you! 🌞
Comment from Alex Rosel
I like this entry for the Tree-Hugger contest. I especially like the simile you've used to express the memories the tree evokes {thumbs up}.
Good luck with your entry in the voting booth {smiles}.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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I like this entry for the Tree-Hugger contest. I especially like the simile you've used to express the memories the tree evokes {thumbs up}.
Good luck with your entry in the voting booth {smiles}.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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Thank you! 🌞
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Technically, meets the required 5-7-5 format. Brings back fond memories of my grandparents old home chicken ranch. They had 40,000 chickens year around and a tire swing on a tree we always played on. "cradles childhood's memories" that line sure does it for this poem, doesn't it? Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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Technically, meets the required 5-7-5 format. Brings back fond memories of my grandparents old home chicken ranch. They had 40,000 chickens year around and a tire swing on a tree we always played on. "cradles childhood's memories" that line sure does it for this poem, doesn't it? Well done.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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Oh, Brett that sounds so familiar.... we lived down the road from a big chicken farm - in fact my first 'job' was when I was 12 and Mr. Lyles paid me and my friend Donna $6.00 an hour to clean the houses... we thought that was wonderful money since we were too young to work - looking back, I think we were crazy!! But I did have a tire swing in the old oak beside the house.... still go back there in my mind sometimes! ;) Thanx for stopping in today! ;)
Comment from June Sargent
What lovely imagery summed up in a few short lines! A tree that literally hugs her children as they make sweet memories beneath her protective arms. Great entry. Well done!
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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What lovely imagery summed up in a few short lines! A tree that literally hugs her children as they make sweet memories beneath her protective arms. Great entry. Well done!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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Thank you! 🌞
Comment from Dancemom
This is a good entry for the 575 contest. You have successfully used the correct syllable count. Very well written and a lovely message about nature and motherhood. Great job and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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This is a good entry for the 575 contest. You have successfully used the correct syllable count. Very well written and a lovely message about nature and motherhood. Great job and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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Thank you! 🌞
