One More Spring
A Kyrielle Entry7 total reviews
Comment from JudyE
This is very evocative writing with the imagery of magnolia trees in bloom and the bluebirds. It seems you've covered all the senses in this very poignant poem Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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This is very evocative writing with the imagery of magnolia trees in bloom and the bluebirds. It seems you've covered all the senses in this very poignant poem Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this piece. Thank you for dropping by to read and share your sentiments.
Comment from Alex Rosel
The refrain, "If only we had one more spring", is particularly poignant, and it appropriately sets the tone for this poem. I especially like the first verse. It evokes a sense of place, and does so delightfully {thumbs up}.
Good luck with your entry in the voting booth {smiles}.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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The refrain, "If only we had one more spring", is particularly poignant, and it appropriately sets the tone for this poem. I especially like the first verse. It evokes a sense of place, and does so delightfully {thumbs up}.
Good luck with your entry in the voting booth {smiles}.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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Thank you for dropping by to read and to share your insights on this piece. Glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, this is such a wonderful tribute to a mother or a wife or a sister or even just a very good friend... a beautiful rhythm and heartfelt rhapsody!! ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;) :)
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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Oh, this is such a wonderful tribute to a mother or a wife or a sister or even just a very good friend... a beautiful rhythm and heartfelt rhapsody!! ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;) :)
Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for the encouraging feedback!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a lovely entry for the Kyrielle Poetry contest.
Your verse tells of the loss of a partner.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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I think this is a lovely entry for the Kyrielle Poetry contest.
Your verse tells of the loss of a partner.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for the encouraging feedback!
Comment from zanya
Wistful evocation of longing and love for the beloved shines beautifully in these stanzas of the Kyrielle with the freshness of the nascent Spring as the milieu
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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Wistful evocation of longing and love for the beloved shines beautifully in these stanzas of the Kyrielle with the freshness of the nascent Spring as the milieu
Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for sharing your insights and for the generous rating!
Comment from RodG
This is such a poignant kyrielle. It definitely makes us think about the woman who is no longer there. We get a picture of what she was like from the bonnet on the chair. We also glimpse what the couple had planned to do--the cruise--and your focus on HIM at the end of the poem really brings on the tears. Your cadence is flawless, but two rhymes mar the poem for me: life & strife. Seen it too often. Rod
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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This is such a poignant kyrielle. It definitely makes us think about the woman who is no longer there. We get a picture of what she was like from the bonnet on the chair. We also glimpse what the couple had planned to do--the cruise--and your focus on HIM at the end of the poem really brings on the tears. Your cadence is flawless, but two rhymes mar the poem for me: life & strife. Seen it too often. Rod
Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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Thanks fir sharing your insights. You?re right about life and strife. Will see what else I can come up with. Appreciate the feedback.
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Just revised it. I think it works.
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Oh, this is much better. I like the last stanza so much more. Rod
Comment from Barbaraj1
What a sad and lovely poem. You did a great job with this kyrielle poem.
The rhyming scheme is excellent. The last line If only we had spring
is the perfect repeating line.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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What a sad and lovely poem. You did a great job with this kyrielle poem.
The rhyming scheme is excellent. The last line If only we had spring
is the perfect repeating line.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for reading and sharing your insights!
