My Steps Have Lost Their Bounce
Life isn't all about work and what is left to do26 total reviews
Comment from Therese Caron
This is a beautiful poem, words flow, the rhyming pattern is very good, and it is very true of real life. It is amazing how much grey skies and too much to do can take the bounce out of your step. Luckily it comes back (for now anyway!). Nice job!
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This is a beautiful poem, words flow, the rhyming pattern is very good, and it is very true of real life. It is amazing how much grey skies and too much to do can take the bounce out of your step. Luckily it comes back (for now anyway!). Nice job!
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Therese, thank you!
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a well penned piece that meets the rhyme scheme and repetition rules of the form. The content is one which will have universal appeal with many readers here. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
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This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a well penned piece that meets the rhyme scheme and repetition rules of the form. The content is one which will have universal appeal with many readers here. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Bill Pinder
I like this encouraging poem written in a unique style. That is a great message that we all need to be encouraged by. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Bill
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I like this encouraging poem written in a unique style. That is a great message that we all need to be encouraged by. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Bill
Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
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Bill, thank you!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I lost my bounce a long time ago! Lol, I enjoyed your kyrielle, it's not an easy form to write, I know I've tried and failed dismally, but I have a suggestion which you can toss in the bin if you want. Good luck in the contest!! :)) Sandra xx
Perchance have you ever been blue?
The sky is grey, you are tired too. (I wondered if you had: 'You're tired too' it would fit the rest of the lines of 8 syllables.)
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I lost my bounce a long time ago! Lol, I enjoyed your kyrielle, it's not an easy form to write, I know I've tried and failed dismally, but I have a suggestion which you can toss in the bin if you want. Good luck in the contest!! :)) Sandra xx
Perchance have you ever been blue?
The sky is grey, you are tired too. (I wondered if you had: 'You're tired too' it would fit the rest of the lines of 8 syllables.)
Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
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Thank you I look it over as a thought..
Comment from Barbaraj1
This is an excellent poem. However, your line in the last stanza at the onset of dusk seems to have 10 syllables. Maybe you could fix it for
the contest.
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This is an excellent poem. However, your line in the last stanza at the onset of dusk seems to have 10 syllables. Maybe you could fix it for
the contest.
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Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
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Great catch Barb... THANK YOU MUCH!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Kyrielle poem with a great repeating line. Never worry about the things that we cannot get done, there may be someone else that can finish the job, do your best until your steps lost their bounce.
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A very well-written Kyrielle poem with a great repeating line. Never worry about the things that we cannot get done, there may be someone else that can finish the job, do your best until your steps lost their bounce.
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Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
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Thank you
