My Steps Have Lost Their Bounce
Life isn't all about work and what is left to do26 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem reminds us that aging doesn't have to take away our bounce.
We can continue having fun and going on adventures through life.
Good luck with the prompt
Happy Holidays
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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This poem reminds us that aging doesn't have to take away our bounce.
We can continue having fun and going on adventures through life.
Good luck with the prompt
Happy Holidays
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 11-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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Thank you for your review!
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No problem.
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Comment from Gloria ....
This is an interesting form, author and one that I am not deeply familiar with. It seems like a good form to wax on eloquently about something important.
Excellent movement throughout your poem, starting with the "problem" changing in the middle and then resolving at the end.
Very enjoyable read and I wish you great luck in the voting booth. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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This is an interesting form, author and one that I am not deeply familiar with. It seems like a good form to wax on eloquently about something important.
Excellent movement throughout your poem, starting with the "problem" changing in the middle and then resolving at the end.
Very enjoyable read and I wish you great luck in the voting booth. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 11-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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Thank you for your review!
Comment from Dancemom
This is a good entry for the kyrielle contest. You have successfully used the correct syllable count. Very well written with a nice message. I would suggest that you capitalize the last line, because it is capitalized in the other two stanzas. Great job and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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This is a good entry for the kyrielle contest. You have successfully used the correct syllable count. Very well written with a nice message. I would suggest that you capitalize the last line, because it is capitalized in the other two stanzas. Great job and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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Thanks
Comment from donette1914
outstanding and very talented
very real and heartfelt
and emotional
your words flow freely
your work is so believable and so well penned
thank you for sharing it was a pleasure
donette1914 dec10 2019
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
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outstanding and very talented
very real and heartfelt
and emotional
your words flow freely
your work is so believable and so well penned
thank you for sharing it was a pleasure
donette1914 dec10 2019
Comment Written 10-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
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Donette1914, thank you for your review and very kind words of reflection, may your week be filled with new discoveries!
Comment from Daniel Dalke
This is a very good contest entry. You did a good job of adapting the prescribed form, and also made a good point through your work. Good luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
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This is a very good contest entry. You did a good job of adapting the prescribed form, and also made a good point through your work. Good luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
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Daniel thank you we shall see how the votes come in.
Comment from tfawcus
Well, you don't seem to have lost your bounce, not does your poem! A fine response to the contest challenge. My only concern is whether you have actually followed the contest guidelines: "There is no limit to the amount of stanzas a Kyrielle may have, but three is considered the accepted minimum and it is also the accepted maximum in this contest."
I understand that to mean the upper limit for the contest is three stanzas.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
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Well, you don't seem to have lost your bounce, not does your poem! A fine response to the contest challenge. My only concern is whether you have actually followed the contest guidelines: "There is no limit to the amount of stanzas a Kyrielle may have, but three is considered the accepted minimum and it is also the accepted maximum in this contest."
I understand that to mean the upper limit for the contest is three stanzas.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
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Edited,
Comment from Violet Brady
I love this so much! You don't make the refrain sound forced and instead it adds to the rhythm of the poem. It's such an uplifting, fun piece which I enjoyed immensely. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
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I love this so much! You don't make the refrain sound forced and instead it adds to the rhythm of the poem. It's such an uplifting, fun piece which I enjoyed immensely. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2019
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Violet.thank you.
Comment from nomi338
I think that with every ounce of your strength and your resolve, you should do your utmost to hold onto and never renounce, that thing within you that provides your bounce. Be it strength of purpose, soundness of mind, or hope of every kind. Hold on and never let go.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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I think that with every ounce of your strength and your resolve, you should do your utmost to hold onto and never renounce, that thing within you that provides your bounce. Be it strength of purpose, soundness of mind, or hope of every kind. Hold on and never let go.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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Roger that! Right there with you my friend! May your week be filled with abundant gladness!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello anon, this is a very well written Kyrielle, true to form. Your repeating line falls seamlessly into place and does not sound contrived - each stanza could stand alone. Well worded with some good advice. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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Hello anon, this is a very well written Kyrielle, true to form. Your repeating line falls seamlessly into place and does not sound contrived - each stanza could stand alone. Well worded with some good advice. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 09-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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Dorothy thank you! May your week reveal amazing new aha?s.
Comment from Patty Palmer
I really haven't seen this type of poetry very much so I don't know much about it. However, I did enjoy your poem about your step losing your bounce. The poem itself had some bounce to it! Merry Christmas!!
Patty
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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I really haven't seen this type of poetry very much so I don't know much about it. However, I did enjoy your poem about your step losing your bounce. The poem itself had some bounce to it! Merry Christmas!!
Patty
Comment Written 09-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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Patty thank you
