After The Fall
When one thing leads to another.9 total reviews
Comment from Therese Caron
Your poem has not failed to live up to expectations, It is wonderful, and maybe with the exception of the car accident, this has happened to many many people. Of course, the accident could also be a metaphor for the crashing end of a relationship, which is what happens to so many people in relationships with others who are married.They either end up alone and sad, or God forbid on the ID channel! You wrote this poem very well with a lot of meaning.
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Your poem has not failed to live up to expectations, It is wonderful, and maybe with the exception of the car accident, this has happened to many many people. Of course, the accident could also be a metaphor for the crashing end of a relationship, which is what happens to so many people in relationships with others who are married.They either end up alone and sad, or God forbid on the ID channel! You wrote this poem very well with a lot of meaning.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2019
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This poem is a very strong cautionary tale. You have used good metaphors. This becomes a universal poem. Who of us does not know of someone who has gone astray, been deluded. You have brought home a very important point. He always goes home to his family and she remains alone. This is a sad state of affairs, pardon the pun. Well written.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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This poem is a very strong cautionary tale. You have used good metaphors. This becomes a universal poem. Who of us does not know of someone who has gone astray, been deluded. You have brought home a very important point. He always goes home to his family and she remains alone. This is a sad state of affairs, pardon the pun. Well written.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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Thanks for your excellent review. (I like puns and always notice them, so don't feel that you have to excuse them.)
Comment from Darlene Franklin
A thought provoking story of how one bad choice leads to another and possible consequences. My only suggestion would be to make a play on the word fail in the title. Good luck with the contest.
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A thought provoking story of how one bad choice leads to another and possible consequences. My only suggestion would be to make a play on the word fail in the title. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
Comment from royowen
They say that we will reap what we sow, and it certainly sounds like this is true, in this situation, beautifully written my friend. I think infidelity lays it's own foundation in the sands of broken foundations, beautifully written my friend, it is a darn good entry in this free verse contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
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They say that we will reap what we sow, and it certainly sounds like this is true, in this situation, beautifully written my friend. I think infidelity lays it's own foundation in the sands of broken foundations, beautifully written my friend, it is a darn good entry in this free verse contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
Comment from Jerome Goldberg
I like a good sense of humor. It is a powerful lubricate. Here you decried: infidelity, dishonesty, lust, drinking, reckless driving etc. but did not sound preachy or judgmental. Well done! Hope you do well in the contest. - Jerry
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I like a good sense of humor. It is a powerful lubricate. Here you decried: infidelity, dishonesty, lust, drinking, reckless driving etc. but did not sound preachy or judgmental. Well done! Hope you do well in the contest. - Jerry
Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- now that is the most unexpected offering for this contest, but certainly is focused on an almost countless array of failures in but two lives...now one. Thanx so much for sharing such a unique poem -- love that little snarky grin at the end!! ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
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Wow -- now that is the most unexpected offering for this contest, but certainly is focused on an almost countless array of failures in but two lives...now one. Thanx so much for sharing such a unique poem -- love that little snarky grin at the end!! ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written failure poem according to the prompt the whole message is one big failure about the wrong choices we make sometimes, there are not always a chance to make things right when they start to go wrong.
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A very well-written failure poem according to the prompt the whole message is one big failure about the wrong choices we make sometimes, there are not always a chance to make things right when they start to go wrong.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh dear, this is a poem and an inventive story and the sad fact here is that this can sometimes happen, one thing goes wrong and then a string of other things happen and we spiral out of control on a course of doom, this happens sometimes, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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Oh dear, this is a poem and an inventive story and the sad fact here is that this can sometimes happen, one thing goes wrong and then a string of other things happen and we spiral out of control on a course of doom, this happens sometimes, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
Comment from Ogden
I fail to see why, as I failed to have the preconception you assumed, you failed to consider that we, the readers, have our own failures to deal with, and most of us, not including myself, will fail to consider the failings you assumed we wouldn't fail to be unimpressed by. But not me. I was amused by your very (actual) failures, and fail to see why you failed to anticipate one's failure to conform to the failings of others. (In case you failed to notice, I vouchsafed your failures.)
;)
Don
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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I fail to see why, as I failed to have the preconception you assumed, you failed to consider that we, the readers, have our own failures to deal with, and most of us, not including myself, will fail to consider the failings you assumed we wouldn't fail to be unimpressed by. But not me. I was amused by your very (actual) failures, and fail to see why you failed to anticipate one's failure to conform to the failings of others. (In case you failed to notice, I vouchsafed your failures.)
;)
Don
Comment Written 08-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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Now there's a word I haven't seen or used for a while: vouchsafed. It's a clunky one.
Thank you so much for your entertaining review - it didn't fail to amuse me - it seems we amuse each other.
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You're very welcome. I thought you might not fail to appreciate the clunk.
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Don
