There's No Tomorrow
Food for thought29 total reviews
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
When we were younger we'd always say tomorrow when asked to do something. My mom would tell us something to this affect. lol. I guess we all do it. Great job and thanks for the reminder.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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When we were younger we'd always say tomorrow when asked to do something. My mom would tell us something to this affect. lol. I guess we all do it. Great job and thanks for the reminder.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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When we were younger, time seemed to pass too slow. Instead of saying I am 10, we would answer nearly 11. thank you for the review and stars.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Willie, this is a clever poem, so true and it rhymes well and is an easy read. Yes, tomorrow never comes - we're always one step behind. You have worded your poem perfectly. Lovely - regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Hello Willie, this is a clever poem, so true and it rhymes well and is an easy read. Yes, tomorrow never comes - we're always one step behind. You have worded your poem perfectly. Lovely - regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Thanks, Dorothy, glad you liked and understood it. Thanks for the
stars.
Comment from Gypsymooncat
Short, sweet and very true. Wow indeed! Time goes so quick, and the older a person gets, well, I feel like I was 40 just yesterday, but here it is, I'm two years off 60. How did that happen?? Can't we just turn the clocks back?
Loved the poem, loved its message, although time could slow down just a wee bit. Just a tiny, widdle bit...
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Short, sweet and very true. Wow indeed! Time goes so quick, and the older a person gets, well, I feel like I was 40 just yesterday, but here it is, I'm two years off 60. How did that happen?? Can't we just turn the clocks back?
Loved the poem, loved its message, although time could slow down just a wee bit. Just a tiny, widdle bit...
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the review and stars. Glad you liked it. Inside, I still
feel 18, but my 82 year old body says, "You're nuts." I think I will just get rid of my mirrors.
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Lol! Get rid of em, you deserve to feel as young as you do!
Comment from Bichon
Your poem provided me with the interesting outlook on life itself. When I think of it in the way you described it, I really get it. We will always be wishfully waiting for tomorrow, but will it ever truly come.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Your poem provided me with the interesting outlook on life itself. When I think of it in the way you described it, I really get it. We will always be wishfully waiting for tomorrow, but will it ever truly come.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Hi, glad you liked and understood it. Thank you, for your review
and stars.
Comment from Gail Denham
Ha! You said it - and we can't do it over again - no do=overs. But we can live the best we can for today. Listening to what God shows us. I want to do this more. I scurry here and there - seldome stopping to think.
Good poem.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Ha! You said it - and we can't do it over again - no do=overs. But we can live the best we can for today. Listening to what God shows us. I want to do this more. I scurry here and there - seldome stopping to think.
Good poem.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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It does seem we are always in a hurry. That causes time to pass quicker. Thank you, Gail, for the review and stars.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Willie, a fantastic Friday to you. I hope this finds you well, in good health and spirit. I liked your poem, it was an enjoyable read. It reminded me of little orphan Annie singing tomorrow.
Tomorrow, tomorrow, I love you tomorrow. You're always a day away!
Good job and have a good day.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Hello Willie, a fantastic Friday to you. I hope this finds you well, in good health and spirit. I liked your poem, it was an enjoyable read. It reminded me of little orphan Annie singing tomorrow.
Tomorrow, tomorrow, I love you tomorrow. You're always a day away!
Good job and have a good day.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Thank you, for the very warm review and stars. Fortunately, I am in as good health as can be expected at 82. Thanks for the well wishes, my good friend.
Comment from Bicpen
I dont mean to insult your intelligence but can you help me understand the form and format of this please as it seems to use a mixed metre ... it is without doubt a piece which flows but just to where or what I dont really know ... is it free or possibly something other ???
For metre unless im wrong it needs a lot of attention unless you can guide me through it which would mean I am willing to change the stars.
Well let me guess its a free verse and it is supposed to be excellent and yes I understand what it says and i'll be subjective ... I was wanting clarification on the form and format ... firstly it is a clear picture of how we can never really escape our present consciousnesses it also deliberates on how we try to master our time but with that the master is really time itself even some of the greatest wizards and magicians in occult history had a great fear because they could never defeat the purpose of time which is to draw our breath and hold us accountable releasing the frontier of a saga which for us will lead into an eternal existence without time whether for good or for bad.
If its not free verse it is a form of quatrain with a wrong metre that paralyses the format and strictly speaking it remains a three ... as an average ... however if it was a free verse it then becomes a good verse and becomes a four for guess what good ...
... if you dont like to help people understand your work thats entirely up to you I was only trying to gauge how I should approach meriting it as a poem.
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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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I dont mean to insult your intelligence but can you help me understand the form and format of this please as it seems to use a mixed metre ... it is without doubt a piece which flows but just to where or what I dont really know ... is it free or possibly something other ???
For metre unless im wrong it needs a lot of attention unless you can guide me through it which would mean I am willing to change the stars.
Well let me guess its a free verse and it is supposed to be excellent and yes I understand what it says and i'll be subjective ... I was wanting clarification on the form and format ... firstly it is a clear picture of how we can never really escape our present consciousnesses it also deliberates on how we try to master our time but with that the master is really time itself even some of the greatest wizards and magicians in occult history had a great fear because they could never defeat the purpose of time which is to draw our breath and hold us accountable releasing the frontier of a saga which for us will lead into an eternal existence without time whether for good or for bad.
If its not free verse it is a form of quatrain with a wrong metre that paralyses the format and strictly speaking it remains a three ... as an average ... however if it was a free verse it then becomes a good verse and becomes a four for guess what good ...
... if you dont like to help people understand your work thats entirely up to you I was only trying to gauge how I should approach meriting it as a poem.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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You don't have to change the stars, they reflect your opinion. However, you are the only one who did not understand. Sorry you didn't like it. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Dancemom
This is a well written poem on the passing of time. Your meter and rhyming pattern are pleasant to read. I love your message in the last two lines. Well said. Great job and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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This is a well written poem on the passing of time. Your meter and rhyming pattern are pleasant to read. I love your message in the last two lines. Well said. Great job and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Many thanks, Heather, for your very kind words and stars.
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Comment from w.j.debi
It is so true that tomorrow is never going to get here no matter how much we hope for it. You tell the fact in a clever way. I enjoyed the line:
You'll always be a day behind.
So very true.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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It is so true that tomorrow is never going to get here no matter how much we hope for it. You tell the fact in a clever way. I enjoyed the line:
You'll always be a day behind.
So very true.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Thank you, for your kind review and stars.
Comment from Minglement
Wishing I had a sixer left to award this clever poem. Such perfect rhyme and rhythm. I guess this isn't a contest entry but it would be a winner :) Well crafted.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Wishing I had a sixer left to award this clever poem. Such perfect rhyme and rhythm. I guess this isn't a contest entry but it would be a winner :) Well crafted.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Thank you, your virtual 6 is good enough. Glad you thought it worth a six.
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You are so welcome.
