All Those Lines
And every darn one of them is artificial...39 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the lines of the vertical blinds that cut our view of the outside into lines and pieces so that we cannot see the whole picture at once.
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the lines of the vertical blinds that cut our view of the outside into lines and pieces so that we cannot see the whole picture at once.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Sandra -- seems the shorties are all I've time for right now with MidTerms this coming week... but the light's at the end of the tunnel, yeah?!!! ;) :) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
Comment from lyenochka
Great commentary on humans and our perceptions, Yvette! I like how you use "blinds" as your simile as prejudice does "blind" us. I feel like your first line is the one with the biggest oomph. I almost wish it was reversed:
view of pure beauty
curtailed by vertical blinds
as does prejudice
Just a thought. No need to change it! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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Great commentary on humans and our perceptions, Yvette! I like how you use "blinds" as your simile as prejudice does "blind" us. I feel like your first line is the one with the biggest oomph. I almost wish it was reversed:
view of pure beauty
curtailed by vertical blinds
as does prejudice
Just a thought. No need to change it! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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yeah, I went ahead and left it -- couldn't make it flow the other way (although I know what you're saying because that's what I wresteld with initially!). :) :) :) Seems the shorties are all I've time for right now with MidTerms this coming week... but the light's at the end of the tunnel, yeah?!!! ;) :) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
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Thanks, Yvette! You, too! ♥
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvette. You moved deep into the land metaphors with this one. It works great as a 5 - 7 - 5. Just like the blinds can turn and block the view prejudice can stop you from seeing things in their true light. Good luck in the contest. Z
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Hello Yvette. You moved deep into the land metaphors with this one. It works great as a 5 - 7 - 5. Just like the blinds can turn and block the view prejudice can stop you from seeing things in their true light. Good luck in the contest. Z
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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Yes, well, as long as there's no difficult rhyme scheme this week, I can do it: seems the shorties are all I've time for right now with MidTerms this coming week... but the light's at the end of the tunnel, yeah?!!! ;) :) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
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You're welcome. Not in your case, but I told someone once, many years ago, the light at the end of the tunnel was an incoming train. Ha ha ha :)). Z
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Believe me.... I've been in that tunnel as well!! :P :P Take care, Z! ;) Yvette
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I like good shorties. Z. (*_*)
Comment from Ben Colder
Must agree with this poem. Sometime people can never see the beauty of life because of their selfishness. I see nothing wrong with this write and thank the poet for a job well done.
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Must agree with this poem. Sometime people can never see the beauty of life because of their selfishness. I see nothing wrong with this write and thank the poet for a job well done.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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So glad you 'got' this one, Ben -- seems the shorties are all I've time for right now with MidTerms this coming week... but the light's at the end of the tunnel, yeah?!!! ;) :) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
Comment from June Sargent
What a fantastic way of highlighting the folly of prejudice! Blinds making us blind to beauty and truth. Bravo! You've provided some serious food for thought.
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What a fantastic way of highlighting the folly of prejudice! Blinds making us blind to beauty and truth. Bravo! You've provided some serious food for thought.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this one, June -- seems the shorties are all I've time for right now with MidTerms this coming week... but the light's at the end of the tunnel, yeah?!!! ;) :) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Writing Prompt.
Your short verse tells of blinds curtailing the view.
Nicely done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
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I think this is is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Writing Prompt.
Your short verse tells of blinds curtailing the view.
Nicely done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Sharon -- seems the shorties are all I've time for right now with MidTerms this coming week... but the light's at the end of the tunnel, yeah?!!! ;) :) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Ogden
I always try not to get embroiled in disagreements about such controversial
issues as venetian blinds. Nevertheless, I do agree that prejudice is a terrible, evil, thing, but in my opinion, in general, vertical blinds are not always as bad, especially when pulled open on a sunny day. At least, that's what I always have believed. (Now, don't get me wrong, I feel the same way about the horizontal ones.) And, I'll go on record with that!
Ogden
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I always try not to get embroiled in disagreements about such controversial
issues as venetian blinds. Nevertheless, I do agree that prejudice is a terrible, evil, thing, but in my opinion, in general, vertical blinds are not always as bad, especially when pulled open on a sunny day. At least, that's what I always have believed. (Now, don't get me wrong, I feel the same way about the horizontal ones.) And, I'll go on record with that!
Ogden
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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LOL!! Well, I certainly didn't mean to play favorites, but I think the 'vertical' interruption works better.... LOL! Thanx for there review, Don -- seems the shorties are all I've time for right now with MidTerms this coming week... but the light's at the end of the tunnel, yeah?!!! ;) :) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Patty Palmer
A well written pointing out if all you do is look only as far as the curtains, you'll never know if there is anything out there beyond the curtain. If you never look beyond another persons' looks you'll never know what a wonderful friend they may have made!! Good job@
Patty
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A well written pointing out if all you do is look only as far as the curtains, you'll never know if there is anything out there beyond the curtain. If you never look beyond another persons' looks you'll never know what a wonderful friend they may have made!! Good job@
Patty
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Patty -- seems the shorties are all I've time for right now with MidTerms this coming week... but the light's at the end of the tunnel, yeah?!!! ;) :) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Dancemom
This is a good entry for the 575 contest. You have successfully used the correct syllable count. Very well written and your message is a good one. Great job and thank you for sharing.
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This is a good entry for the 575 contest. You have successfully used the correct syllable count. Very well written and your message is a good one. Great job and thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
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So glad you enjoyed, Heather -- these shorties are about all I've time for right now -- take care!! ;) :) Yvette
