All Those Lines
And every darn one of them is artificial...39 total reviews
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a technically sound 5-7-5 with correct line and syllable count throughout. The content is cleverly constructed combining word play with a valuable life lesson. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
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This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a technically sound 5-7-5 with correct line and syllable count throughout. The content is cleverly constructed combining word play with a valuable life lesson. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2019
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Thank you for your review -- much appreciated! ;) Yvette
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of all of your syllables in this wonderful
piece. It conveys a powerful message about prejudging. Some people do this--but seem unaware that's what they're doing (blind AND biased).
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You have made excellent use of all of your syllables in this wonderful
piece. It conveys a powerful message about prejudging. Some people do this--but seem unaware that's what they're doing (blind AND biased).
Comment Written 07-Dec-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Janice -- seems the shorties are all I've time for right now with MidTerms this coming week... but the light's at the end of the tunnel, yeah?!!! ;) :) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Pam (respa)
-That is quite an image,
Yvette, and a very good presentation.
-The syllable count and use of
one continuous thought is effective.
-The comparison of prejudice
to the blinds is very good,
and emphasizes your message.
-Prejudice does hide and distort
"our image of pure beauty."
-Well done; good luck!
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-That is quite an image,
Yvette, and a very good presentation.
-The syllable count and use of
one continuous thought is effective.
-The comparison of prejudice
to the blinds is very good,
and emphasizes your message.
-Prejudice does hide and distort
"our image of pure beauty."
-Well done; good luck!
Comment Written 07-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Pam... your comments are always so reassuring!! ;) Seems the shorties are all I've time for right now with MidTerms this coming week... but the light's at the end of the tunnel, yeah?!!! ;) :) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
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You are very welcome, Yvette. I am glad the light is at the end of the tunnel! You have a good week, too.
Comment from Susan X Smith
This short poem is an excellent contest entry. It fits the mold and the message about prejudice was well thought out and clearly conveyed. It might have been inspired by the picture.
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This short poem is an excellent contest entry. It fits the mold and the message about prejudice was well thought out and clearly conveyed. It might have been inspired by the picture.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Susan -- seems the shorties are all I've time for right now... but the light's at the end of the tunnel, yeah?!!! ;) :) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sally Law
And these blinders block sunshine, too. My favorite books are the well-worn ones, there's so much richness inside. Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest. A wonderful message here, especially at Christmas,
Sal xo
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And these blinders block sunshine, too. My favorite books are the well-worn ones, there's so much richness inside. Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest. A wonderful message here, especially at Christmas,
Sal xo
Comment Written 07-Dec-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Lady Sal... we all have favorite books, don't we? ;) :) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You made me smile here Yvette! A metaphor for life as we are often blinkered and miss all the beauty out there! A wise and sensitive write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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You made me smile here Yvette! A metaphor for life as we are often blinkered and miss all the beauty out there! A wise and sensitive write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Dec-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Dolly -- seems the shorties are all I've time for right now with MidTerms this coming week... but the light's at the end of the tunnel, yeah?!!! ;) :) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
Comment from JudyE
This is a very perceptive comment and the analogy is effective. Ignorance breeds fear and prejudice but with education and knowledge, the fear can be dispelled. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a very perceptive comment and the analogy is effective. Ignorance breeds fear and prejudice but with education and knowledge, the fear can be dispelled. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2019
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So glad you 'got' this one, Judy -- seems the shorties are all I've time for right now with MidTerms this coming week... but the light's at the end of the tunnel, yeah?!!! ;) :) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent and unique metaphor for our sometimes too-often inability to see clearly what hinders our mind's eye.
Tasteful presentation, clearly stated and authentically unique.
Great luck to you with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
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Excellent and unique metaphor for our sometimes too-often inability to see clearly what hinders our mind's eye.
Tasteful presentation, clearly stated and authentically unique.
Great luck to you with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 07-Dec-2019
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Such wonderful comments, Gloria -- Thank you! ;) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Blinds curtail our view of pure beauty - I love the image that you have created in this stanza. Thank you so much for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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Blinds curtail our view of pure beauty - I love the image that you have created in this stanza. Thank you so much for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Iza -- seems the shorties are all I've time for right now with MidTerms this coming week... but the light's at the end of the tunnel, yeah?!!! ;) :) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
Comment from jenintorre
This poem is incredibly profound. Your words are so true. I think it will do very well in the 5-7-5 contest. Also congratulations on winning the rictometer contest. I really loved that poem. Good luck and Best wishes. Jen.
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This poem is incredibly profound. Your words are so true. I think it will do very well in the 5-7-5 contest. Also congratulations on winning the rictometer contest. I really loved that poem. Good luck and Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2019
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Oh, Jen -- I cannot tell you how wonderful your stars are, ma'am - THANK YOU! :) :) Seems the shorties are all I've time for right now with MidTerms this coming week... but the light's at the end of the tunnel, yeah?!!! ;) :) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
