Don't Touch Me!
For Potlatch Poetry31 total reviews
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I don't understand the form even with the notes so I have to review o what I see and feel. It is an excellent poem using the limited endings and it was a very humerous read expecially threatening to create he new version
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I don't understand the form even with the notes so I have to review o what I see and feel. It is an excellent poem using the limited endings and it was a very humerous read expecially threatening to create he new version
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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I used to get thrown in at least once a year. I finally learned how to scare them off when I told them their mother wouldn't recognize them if they came any closer. lol. Thanks, Barb.
Comment from Sally Law
This looks great to me, then again, what do I know. I do know what looks and sound good. A fine rondeau redouble for your poetry challenge.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
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This looks great to me, then again, what do I know. I do know what looks and sound good. A fine rondeau redouble for your poetry challenge.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I went to the beach a couple of days ago. While there, I saw a beautiful girl waving at me. I committed to a wave and realized she was drowning. Nice little poem.
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I went to the beach a couple of days ago. While there, I saw a beautiful girl waving at me. I committed to a wave and realized she was drowning. Nice little poem.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
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Hahahaha. That might have been me. Thanks, Thomas.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
It sure looks good to me. All the lines in their right places and half-line at the end with good rhyming throughout. What more can we ask for? The subject relates to my own feelings about water. I have to be in control!
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It sure looks good to me. All the lines in their right places and half-line at the end with good rhyming throughout. What more can we ask for? The subject relates to my own feelings about water. I have to be in control!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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I'm with you. I don't like being pushed in. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This fun write made me laugh and I am glad I'm not the only one who could not find the instructions for this form! Ha ha ha. Whatever the instructions are, you scored with this write. It is fun and you have the repeated lines in all the right places to give this poem great power and tenacity, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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This fun write made me laugh and I am glad I'm not the only one who could not find the instructions for this form! Ha ha ha. Whatever the instructions are, you scored with this write. It is fun and you have the repeated lines in all the right places to give this poem great power and tenacity, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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The instruction are under 'discussion tab' on the club page. I wanted to write about jerks who throw non-swimmers in the water. I'm glad it made you laugh.
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Yep, thank you for that, I have found them now! He he he, now I know! Love Dolly x
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'll tell you now, Yvonne, I hope someone has a six left! It might be hard to get this right, I'm not sure I would even like to try, BUT, you have certainly mastered this, it's brilliant! I love how you have written this, even the rhyming ends are amazing, what hard words you've picked to deliver this poem to us. I really enjoyed reading this, my friend. I too have a fear of going underwater, scares the life out of me. And I like to feel the sand beneath my feet when I stand up. Great poem, my friend. Well done!! :)) Sandra xx
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I'll tell you now, Yvonne, I hope someone has a six left! It might be hard to get this right, I'm not sure I would even like to try, BUT, you have certainly mastered this, it's brilliant! I love how you have written this, even the rhyming ends are amazing, what hard words you've picked to deliver this poem to us. I really enjoyed reading this, my friend. I too have a fear of going underwater, scares the life out of me. And I like to feel the sand beneath my feet when I stand up. Great poem, my friend. Well done!! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much, Sandra. This is a fantastic review, and much appreciated. There's always a jerk around that thinks it's funny to throw in a non-swimmer. I finally learned how to scare them off. lol
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They are jerks, too. Don't they realise they could be responsible for the death of a non-swimmer? Your poem was amazing. xx
Comment from Pantygynt
This is really good and includes the feminine endings as well, which so many modern poets do not bother with. I think this is a brilliant answer to the potlatch challenge. Definitely sixworthy.
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This is really good and includes the feminine endings as well, which so many modern poets do not bother with. I think this is a brilliant answer to the potlatch challenge. Definitely sixworthy.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you, Jim. You know how much this means to me!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is a difficult form that is well done. An aversion to water? A fear of drowning? I am a fish. I love water and wish I had a pool to bask in and enjoy.
The poem is well done and entertaining even if it isn't written in true form, I enjoyed it. Good job, Yvonne. Nancy:)
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This is a difficult form that is well done. An aversion to water? A fear of drowning? I am a fish. I love water and wish I had a pool to bask in and enjoy.
The poem is well done and entertaining even if it isn't written in true form, I enjoyed it. Good job, Yvonne. Nancy:)
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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I love the water, being around it, on it, and in it, just not pushed in. That's when I panic. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from Bill Pinder
This is an interesting and enjoyable poem to read. That appears to be a very unique form that I may try sometime. I like the humorous, probably based in reality, example that you used.
Bill
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This is an interesting and enjoyable poem to read. That appears to be a very unique form that I may try sometime. I like the humorous, probably based in reality, example that you used.
Bill
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you. I'm glad you like it.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a very skillfully-created, vividly descriptive, strongly emotional write. I can't even swim, so anyone who tosses me in had better get me out quickly! :-)
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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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This is a very skillfully-created, vividly descriptive, strongly emotional write. I can't even swim, so anyone who tosses me in had better get me out quickly! :-)
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Ain't it the truth! It's happened to me a couple of times, and it's NOT funny. Thanks for reviewing.
