Summer wonder
when love meets the ocean14 total reviews
Comment from royowen
What a marvellous piece of artwork to remind us that love is never always on the up and up, there are a myriad of reasons why not. As they say, true love never runs smooth. A smooth entry, incorrect syllable count Iza, the second line has eight syllables, "cross the ocean's call of hope." Is my suggestion, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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What a marvellous piece of artwork to remind us that love is never always on the up and up, there are a myriad of reasons why not. As they say, true love never runs smooth. A smooth entry, incorrect syllable count Iza, the second line has eight syllables, "cross the ocean's call of hope." Is my suggestion, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind comments and for point out the syllable count, Mr Roy
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Well done
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Iza Deleanu. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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Hello Iza Deleanu. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind words
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 about summer that urges us to go across the ocean to find hope and life elsewhere and say goodbye to the ones we love.
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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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A very well-written 5-7-5 about summer that urges us to go across the ocean to find hope and life elsewhere and say goodbye to the ones we love.
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you Sandra, you gasp the essence so well...I do miss the ocean a lot
Comment from Ogden
I am totally puzzled! Why, pray, do you ask your true love from across the ocean, to forget you? Was it something he said, or were you just in a bad mood??
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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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I am totally puzzled! Why, pray, do you ask your true love from across the ocean, to forget you? Was it something he said, or were you just in a bad mood??
Ogden (Don)
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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I guess bad mood:) my eternal love is the ocean, and this year I am not able to see it, cause I am already in hibernation...
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That is sad. But, if your love is reciprocal, how can your conscience abide forcing your beloved to flounder indefinitely without you?
