Summer wonder
when love meets the ocean14 total reviews
Comment from Aussie
Wonderful illustration to compliment your 5-7-5 contest entry. Hands above the sea wishing it were me, hands below the ocean, salt washing away memories of your love. As above so below. Well done my friend. XXK.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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Wonderful illustration to compliment your 5-7-5 contest entry. Hands above the sea wishing it were me, hands below the ocean, salt washing away memories of your love. As above so below. Well done my friend. XXK.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for your rewrite it's so beautiful and also thank you from the bottom of my heart for the shining star and amazing review
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Most welcome. XXK.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Summer Wonder, has the right set up and issues a confusing thought for the one who is over the sea to get over it. Hmmm?
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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This 5-7-5, Summer Wonder, has the right set up and issues a confusing thought for the one who is over the sea to get over it. Hmmm?
Comment Written 11-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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Thank you:) and my love is the ocean:)
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Your offering speaks of a soul that has walked away from a lover to search for hope and more across life's oceans... I would suggest, perhaps, that it should state 'soul wanders'...? Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest! ;)
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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Your offering speaks of a soul that has walked away from a lover to search for hope and more across life's oceans... I would suggest, perhaps, that it should state 'soul wanders'...? Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest! ;)
Comment Written 11-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for your encouragement
Comment from LeannaP
Hi!
I would have given this six stars but I don't have any more to give out.
I thought that this poem (along with the illustration) was excellent.
You were able to capture the significant aspect of this poem while bringing awareness to this vast notion of love.
..Nicely written
Leanna
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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Hi!
I would have given this six stars but I don't have any more to give out.
I thought that this poem (along with the illustration) was excellent.
You were able to capture the significant aspect of this poem while bringing awareness to this vast notion of love.
..Nicely written
Leanna
Comment Written 11-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for your encouragement and for the precious stars from your heart to mine:)
Comment from lyenochka
Sounds like an almost relationship occurred in the summer? And after being separated by an ocean, the one urges the other to forget and move on. I think you've captured an entire love story in just these few words. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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Sounds like an almost relationship occurred in the summer? And after being separated by an ocean, the one urges the other to forget and move on. I think you've captured an entire love story in just these few words. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much, and my true love is and will be the ocean:)
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Hello there, my friend. This is a lovely contest entry. Great alliteration in the 1st line. Nice ending. Enjoy your weekend. ~Kerry
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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Hello there, my friend. This is a lovely contest entry. Great alliteration in the 1st line. Nice ending. Enjoy your weekend. ~Kerry
Comment Written 07-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much Kerry for your kind review
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You're very welcome. Sorry for my late response.
Comment from Therese Caron
I am glad we all got to see this poem, the image you chose is perfect with your words. Summer soul is often searching. You used lovely words and managed to say a lot, even with only the allowed 17 syllables. Very nice work!
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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I am glad we all got to see this poem, the image you chose is perfect with your words. Summer soul is often searching. You used lovely words and managed to say a lot, even with only the allowed 17 syllables. Very nice work!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind words
Comment from moonsunrise
I so enjoy reading your poem. I can so relate. I just love summers by the ocean. It's where I long to be especially in winter.
Great image! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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I so enjoy reading your poem. I can so relate. I just love summers by the ocean. It's where I long to be especially in winter.
Great image! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind words
Comment from Dancemom
This is a good entry for the 575 contest. You have successfully used the correct syllable count. Very well written and intriguing. Great job and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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This is a good entry for the 575 contest. You have successfully used the correct syllable count. Very well written and intriguing. Great job and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind words
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a very nicely done 5-7-5 Poem for the contest.
The story is clear and the beautiful picture is an excellent match.
Well done and good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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I think this is a very nicely done 5-7-5 Poem for the contest.
The story is clear and the beautiful picture is an excellent match.
Well done and good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind words, Sharon
