Be Wee With Bea Part2
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "A Terrible Squishing"Continuation of Bea's Strollings
16 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Aaaaah, it seems Bea and I must be related ... the whole getting something in our heads thing - lol! Whew - you had me worried on this one... although, I must say, I did enjoy Bea's trip to the 'icky' dumpster!! ;) :) A great installment, Liz -- just what we'd think a bear would go through in one of those things!! ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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Aaaaah, it seems Bea and I must be related ... the whole getting something in our heads thing - lol! Whew - you had me worried on this one... although, I must say, I did enjoy Bea's trip to the 'icky' dumpster!! ;) :) A great installment, Liz -- just what we'd think a bear would go through in one of those things!! ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019
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Thank you for your involved review. I like how you phrase your comments. I'm glad you enjoy be so much.
Comment from Sally Law
A good chapter with many delightful things going on with Bea and her friends. I especially enjoyed the banana discovery and the squishing sounds. I'm glad Bea stops for her much needed "Be good to myself treats." I practice that. :)
Suggestion, if I may. "If one couldn't find the marker, the other could."
Sending you my best today as always, Liz.
Sally xo
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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A good chapter with many delightful things going on with Bea and her friends. I especially enjoyed the banana discovery and the squishing sounds. I'm glad Bea stops for her much needed "Be good to myself treats." I practice that. :)
Suggestion, if I may. "If one couldn't find the marker, the other could."
Sending you my best today as always, Liz.
Sally xo
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you for your supportive review. I'm glad there were amusing elements you enjoyed.
Comment from Mistydawn
This is a nice addition to your story. It was very suspenseful I wasn't sure how poor Bea was going to get out. The description was cute, believable. Glad she was able to get a bit of honey and that she's safe. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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This is a nice addition to your story. It was very suspenseful I wasn't sure how poor Bea was going to get out. The description was cute, believable. Glad she was able to get a bit of honey and that she's safe. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you for your supportive review. I'm glad you enjoyed the suspense.
Comment from john mallahan
Your story is especially appropriate at this time of year--at least in the Pacific Northwest. Suburbs of Seattle seem racked by incidents, just such as this. Bears seem, more & more in this region to go to all sorts of places--including dumpsters (an garbage cans, etc) So glad that Bea found a jar of honey in order to get centered!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Your story is especially appropriate at this time of year--at least in the Pacific Northwest. Suburbs of Seattle seem racked by incidents, just such as this. Bears seem, more & more in this region to go to all sorts of places--including dumpsters (an garbage cans, etc) So glad that Bea found a jar of honey in order to get centered!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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I've seen the situation caught on video of a bear caught in a dumpster. That was sad. There must not have been a Scruffles in their life. Bea does have strange ways of centering, doesn't she? Thank you for your enjoyable review.
Comment from Alex Rosel
I like how here you've taken a real-life experience and incorporated it into your fiction {thumbs up}.
Here are a few points you might like to consider:
Why there was such an urgency we'll never know. -- I'd revise this to: "Why there was such urgency, we'll never know." To me, it just reads better.
If one not find a marker, the other could. -- Spag? Do you mean: " If one could not find a marker, the other could."
The only music that played very slowly and rhythmically in her head during that dance was shsslushhh, shsslushhh, shsslushhh. -- I like this snippet of the narrative {thumbs up}.
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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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I like how here you've taken a real-life experience and incorporated it into your fiction {thumbs up}.
Here are a few points you might like to consider:
Why there was such an urgency we'll never know. -- I'd revise this to: "Why there was such urgency, we'll never know." To me, it just reads better.
If one not find a marker, the other could. -- Spag? Do you mean: " If one could not find a marker, the other could."
The only music that played very slowly and rhythmically in her head during that dance was shsslushhh, shsslushhh, shsslushhh. -- I like this snippet of the narrative {thumbs up}.
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Thank you for your supportive review. I'm glad you enjoyed the sense of it.
Comment from lyenochka
I think I must have brought this post up before the picture was placed.
I liked the confusion that Bea felt with the unusual fruits and vegetables. I'm not sure if it was really worth all the anxiety to check out the dumpster. I'm beginning to wonder if Doolie was all that "wise."
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"If one not find a marker" (a verb is missing here)
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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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I think I must have brought this post up before the picture was placed.
I liked the confusion that Bea felt with the unusual fruits and vegetables. I'm not sure if it was really worth all the anxiety to check out the dumpster. I'm beginning to wonder if Doolie was all that "wise."
One comment:
"If one not find a marker" (a verb is missing here)
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Remember Doolie said the 1st dumpster. Was the 1st really the last? Where was the first dumpster? Soon to be revealed. This causes one to do some thinking. We will see you at the 1st dumpster. I enjoy your reviews. Thank you.
