Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux

Excellent

You're absolutely right about that. Even when they're grown and move out, they still need our help and parenting. When I grew up and moved out, I had to figure things out myself for the most part. It was like in the wild when the bear cub tries to come back after it has been taught to hunt. Thanks for sharing this inspirational and well written work. Well done!

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2019

Thanks much for your read and comments. I like the bear cub analogy. Fortunately, our children have not come back, but they still need our help and support.

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

Ain't that the truth, yeah?! ;) :) But we wouldn't have it any other way....whether with our parents or our children! :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019

Thanks for the read and the feedback.

Comment from Alex Rosel

Excellent

Oh, I'm sure many people will be able to relate to this Naani poem. And the picture you've selected is so evocative {smiles}.

A well presented entry for the contest. Good luck in the voting booth {smiles}.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019

Thanks much for your read and feedback.

Comment from Dancemom

Excellent

This is very true. Parenthood is a commitment and no matter how old your kids get, you still worry about them. You have applied the naani format properly. One suggestion is to maybe put "the" from the second line to the third. Great job and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019

Thanks for your read and suggestion.

Comment from Roy Chadwick

Average

This is obviously a sincere poem about a subject close to the writer's heart, and apart from the caps, is well written and effective.
But there is nothing new or surprising in the composition or style.
The example set shows an example of faith, in the power to keep the believer safe who takes risks. There is a visual image here too, which is missing in the entry.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2019

Can't say I agree with your assessment. Don't understand what you mean by nothing new or suprising in composition or style. The poem is a Naani poem limited to four lines and 20-25 syllables these are limiting criteria. But thanks for the read and your opinion.

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the Naani writing prompt.
This is so true. If I were to make a suggestion I might say "And" instead of "But".
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Sharon

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2019

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2019

Thanks for the feedback and suggestion.